Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
I wrote some poems from the perspectives of Lapis Lazuli and Peridot... Here's Lapis;
We’re Malachite Now
Crushing weight,
Sorrow,
No escape,
Why do I stay?
To make sure you
Don’t harm them
But everyday
I’m here
You harm
Me
Scars you can’t
See
Things you can’t
Feel
Drowning,
Drowning,
Drowning
Far away
I want to leave,
I need to,
But you would bring
Harm to them all
If I do
So I stay,
At the bottom
Of the ocean
Crying
Full of power
Because I can’t quite remember
Who I was before
I only know
We’re Malachite now
(July 18, 2021 - 1:50 pm)
And Peridot, this one isn't the best though;
Worth Protecting
My hands were steal,
Cold and lifeless
Now they’re free,
Lively and creative
Now I make
Now I live
But I can’t help
Remembering
When I served
You
Swore my life
And then it went away
I stood up
For myself
And it felt wrong
But now I’m here
I’ve set myself free…
I’ve found the things
On this planet
Worth protecting
(July 18, 2021 - 1:51 pm)
I really like both of these, they feel very personal and loaded with emotion.
And knowing Steven Universe, it definitely hits hard, in all the right places. Lapis Lazuli, I think, was the other half of Malachite? That part was always sad for me, but your first poem really dives into their head and explores their pain, and solidifies how tragic the whole thing is/was. Even Peridot's, who finally got redemption but still seems to hold a sliver of how things used to be, ends up hopeful at the end!
It's beautiful!
(July 21, 2021 - 2:55 am)
Ah thank you :D
(July 21, 2021 - 4:03 pm)
Hello! Just a little something I did quickly. I'm more of a singer, so it's not that good, but I'm open to feedback!
Fire is a wond'rous thing,
signaling warmth and fresh-cooked food.
But them who forgets that it's wild, it's them who is a fool.
Blink for a moment, let it unleash it's power.
The spark you cherished becomes an inferno looking to endlessly devour.
Raging into the night, burning bright, finding new heights.
The spirits in the flames dance, calling your name.
Reminding you of the beauty of the fire when it's tamed.
(July 20, 2021 - 7:57 pm)
Ooh, that's cool, I like it!
Its theme on the double-edged... ness, of something so useful, especially grabs my attention. What an interesting poem!
(July 21, 2021 - 2:47 am)
Sooo I found this old poem of mine and I thought I'd put it on here :) I posted another one a while back that was similar but different to this so if it seems familiar that's probably why. Idk why im posting this (it's pretty boring), maybe just to get back into the poem writing mindset lol
~~
sunrise
dawn reaches out in vain
cutting light soaked fingertips
against the sharp incongruities
of the night sky,
streaking rosy blood the hue of
melted dreams shifting
through the cosmos,
leaving the world encased in opalescent amber
until the glowing sapphire
washes in like a crystalline tide
and drowns out the sunrise.
(July 21, 2021 - 4:14 pm)
I like it! Beautiful descriptions, it's quite captivating~
(July 22, 2021 - 1:05 am)
I just read through like five pages of these poems, and everybody's so good, and now I kind of want to write a poem so here goes I guess.
I wonder,
do people look at my poems
and think
"Wow,
their style is kinda unique"
because I always feel so boring
using capitals,
and nobody else seems to bother,
but maybe it gives off a vibe
that I like?
Or maybe I'm just too stubborn to stop.
I wonder,
if I read other people's poems and think they're so cool
and like vivid and stuff
do people think that of mine?
Or am I just the person they're required to compliment,
because I write so much it's rude not to.
I wonder,
are they judging mine when
no-one responds to my poems,
or do they honestly not notice I'm here?
Do I have to shout,
repeat myself over and over?
Or for that matter,
do I have enough energy to?
I wonder,
am I wasting anybody's time
when I type out yet another
long,
rambly poem
that probably isn't even that good anyway.
(July 22, 2021 - 1:38 pm)
Wow, WordSong, this is really good... It says a lot of things I've thought and worried over. But I think I should tell you what I try to tell myself: your poems truly are wonderful, and there's no way to know if someone's just being nice or if they're being real. Sometimes when it doesn't feel like anyone cares about your poetry, it's not for that reason. It might be that you really wanted to hear some true praise from another poem writer you look up to, or that you weren't feeling proud of the poem already and thought nobody else liked it. I think you're quite good with words and creative. Also, I'm sorry I didn't say anything, but I liked your poem "Clouds" (the one about the person who was talking to you at recess). I think it was written in a creative way and I've found myself thinking about it. Even the lines that were just one word felt powerful, like "Goodbye," at the end. Anyway, I just want you to know that you're not alone in that insecure feeling and, even though you don't need "acceptance," you are a good, creative poet.
(July 22, 2021 - 3:22 pm)
That's a mood.
It's totally understandable, and I wonder the same things deep down sometimes.
Do I post waaay too much? Yep. Are they too long and boring? Uh, yeah, probably. Do I ever say things just because I have to? No.
On the other hand, I usually feel a little weird posting a comment on every single poem, just because I feel like I'm annoying and like, nothing I say is really that revolutionary or meaningful, even if I really do like it and want to something in encouragement.
I don't know if you follow; but at least for me, that's how it is.
(July 22, 2021 - 3:42 pm)
Thank you both. For like . . . replying in the first place, and also for what you said. Jaybells, I think I know what you mean, but at least for me just someone acknowledging that they read the poem and kind of liked it makes me feel better about myself and my writing. And Peri, thanks for noticing Clouds. I really like that one, and I wasn't sure if anyone had read it.
(July 22, 2021 - 5:08 pm)
I was kind of waiting for someone else to post a poem before I post another one, but it's been nearly a day and I wasn't too post this, so here you go.
Tears (written on June 2nd, 2021)
Naive.
Young.
Irrational.
Inexperienced.
You trail your palm along the wall
of an endless corridor of adjectives,
defining you,
containing you,
shoving you into a box
that gets smaller and smaller with every passing word.
You shudder,
passing a single word.
Your fingers curl and you lean your head against
a cool stone wall.
When you open your eyes,
all you can see is the word,
glaring up at you.
Orphan.
It nahmakes you sound so stupid,
so pitiful,
but your gaze doesn't move,
starting at the word
until hot tears roll down your cheeks.
The wall melts away and you stumble forward,
hitting your knee against a concrete slab. You
look around and realize
they're about to bury you alive
in concrete.
And still all you can think is
orphan.
You wonder if the drops on your face are
tears
or concrete.
You open your eyes, and
there is no concrete,
just a lumpy mattress
and a cracked ceiling
but the tears are still there.
This one was fun for me to write because I'm not an orphan, so instead of writing about my own emotions, I got to write about somebody else's emotions, so it was like writing a fantasy novel except in poem form.
(July 23, 2021 - 3:49 pm)
You express everything so clearly! I really like the comparisons between the all the dream tears and then real tears, which highlights the dream/real world-shift too. Very nicely tied together~
Also, it is indeed SO FUN to write about characters and their struggles! There's such good angst material in there, from my experience, anyway.
(July 23, 2021 - 7:39 pm)
Hi I'm back again, I should really come onto this thread more often because WOW you guys are all such incredible poets!! For some reason I've felt like venting through poetry recently so I guess here's a little poem dump? Two about being scared of the future (I just started looking at colleges and it's literally terrifying) and one unfinished about the girl I like (who's one of my best friends haha *pain*).
~
lifetime
some things end too quickly
even when it’s been a lifetime
and why bother with taxes
when i could lie beneath a willow tree,
listening to the sounds of the forest
and why worry about student loans
when i could have the breeze play with my hair,
feeling my heart beat for the first time
and why learn how college works
when i could let moss grow over my bones,
sinking into the cool earth
and why leave behind everything i’ve ever known
when i could rest my weary head,
forever held in the roots of the world
some things end too quickly
and a lifetime was too short
~
tidal wave (a little more metaphorical)
you can’t stop a tidal wave
no matter how hard you try
no matter how fast you swim
no matter how much you wish
you can only be swept away
along for the ride
pulled out to sea
because no one ever told you
to find high ground
and it’s too late to learn now
it’s either sink or swim
right or wrong
do or die
and you don’t know which way’s up
and you don’t know how long it’s been
and you don’t know where to go
or how you got there in the first place
and it’s been too long
but not long enough
when it’s all you can do
not to drown
~
golden (this is the third poem I've written about this girl send help)
mid-morning sun filters
through a window i can’t see
in the glow there’s you and
darling, you’re golden
at the top of the world
your worries soothe my own
sparks fly quite literally and
darling, you’re golden
*insert more stanzas here*
(July 25, 2021 - 2:03 pm)