Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
This poetry is the total best XD
Way to go
(November 17, 2019 - 2:30 pm)
ribs
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tissue paper
in strips across my bedroom floor
green and gold and
lily white
a gift
a curse
pretty blue paper bag
open-mouthed and gaping
hungry
hungry
an angel, half-formed
hand on her hip
a chisel at her stomach
unreal and almost lovely
broken, boneless
shards of marble like rivers
down her face
parsed down to the essentials—
beauty is such
a little thing.
(November 13, 2019 - 8:59 pm)
(November 13, 2019 - 9:04 pm)
Posting again bc I want this thread to top, goshdarnit! I've been reading some of my older poetry, and wow, has my style changed a LOT. Now it's a lot more... oblique. It's gotten in simpler in some ways and more confusing in others. I don't know if I'm entirely sold on it. Thoughts?
——
eight of hearts
door blown wide.
spilled across the doorstep
in puddles of light:
my insides shuffled like a deck of cards
fifty two pickup at your feet.
my pride triumphs in safety
but i know
how this story goes.
aching for someday that is probably never
tangled breath, waiting wondering
sweet things twisting bitter
at a toss of her grin—
green and almost pretty and
falling to pieces.
pompeii inside and out
for want of a hand like a
question mark
on my back.
your smile in the darkness.
jawline backlit, a knife through
buttery air.
like an itch i can’t quite scratch
hands unfolding eyes unfinding—
waiting. waiting. for
the other shoe
to drop.
(November 13, 2019 - 10:56 pm)
Oh, I love your style, I wish mine could be more like yours. Honestly I don't know what I'm trying to say half the time, so yeah mine needs some work XP
(November 14, 2019 - 9:41 pm)
Memories
Flashes of color
fill my mind
images, feelings
of days before this one.
Was it always
this happy?
Was everything
so beautiful
in the moment?
Maybe.
But maybe not.
We dream
of what once was
because it seems
better.
But in reality,
it never was.
(November 16, 2019 - 8:48 pm)
I really love your style! I think you write really well and it runs deep. Good job! :3 :> :) :0
(November 17, 2019 - 2:34 pm)
The Cave
By (Shawwie)
The silence was a cloth that smothered your ears. The haze in the cave where you were hiding covered your senses like a dark mask. The slow staccato of raindrops tap-danced on the ground. Wispy fog drifted around your body and whispered about you. You felt an irresistible urge to curl up into a ball and forget the war and try to forget the Nazis. You heard a rustle in the darkness and you were stricken with fear. You moved further back into the cave, hugging the cold, rocky, surface of a stalagmite. Outside, you suddenly heard footsteps and harsh words in German. You held your breath for a million years. The footsteps ceased. Then, there was silence yet again.
I wrote this for one of my English projects and I decided I should submit it here
It isn't rhyming couplets like signature poetry but it's free verse.
Tell me what you think
(November 17, 2019 - 2:27 pm)
I really like this, the way you describe things is amazing! Though, there is one thing I think I would change. Instead of having everything as one paragraph, try having line breaks and stuff.
Example:
"The silence was a cloth
that smothered your ears
the haze in the cave
where you were hiding
covered your senses
like a dark mask"
It can have short lines, long lines, whateves. But I feel like when it is a paragraph it feels more like a story. (I know poems are supposed to tell a story, but, you know, it's just not the same) I'm not trying to be rude, it's a really good poem.
(November 29, 2019 - 9:49 am)
Yrah, I love all the imagery!
(December 4, 2019 - 12:24 pm)
Snow Haiku
I don't want snow yet
Maybe around Christmas time
Not in November
(November 19, 2019 - 5:00 pm)
I haven't been on here in a while, but I wrote this recently and decided I wanted to post it. (its pretty long)
Fairwell, my love~
my love
i can't let go
of you
all the way
i know you're
going away
to somewhere better
though i wish
you could stay
right here
in my arms
i can't
let go of
my love
fo you
i can't bid
you fairwell
unless you
promise me
you will forever
remember me
i can't bear
to say goodbye
unless you say
"i promise"
because i will
never forget you
and i hope
you will do
the same
~
"i promise"
you swear
so i
bid you fairwell
though i hope
not forever
my love
i will never
let you go
(November 29, 2019 - 9:36 am)
(December 4, 2019 - 12:49 pm)
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(December 9, 2019 - 8:29 pm)
Sunlight
~~~~~
A bouncy, bright
Day, lighting up your
Dreams;
Cool dampness of
Another morning's rain
Shined right away;
The last golden rays
Slipping through your
Fingers;
But you know it's okay,
Because tomorrow's sun
Will bring a new day.
(December 10, 2019 - 8:41 pm)