Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
Wow, this is amazing, Ruby! I love the repetition
(July 7, 2017 - 3:47 pm)
I don't have the words for what this piece did to me. (And you say I'm a good writer?)
(July 8, 2017 - 2:19 pm)
Thanks for finally getting me to write, you guys! *hugs*
lost and found / traveller
i. my compass is pointing just north of reality
way south of normality
ii. i tried following the north star but it
disappeared behind a cloud
iii. you told me to turn around
iv. lost my map in the bermuda triangle
and my crooked sense of morality
v. so different from you
vi. watch out, you said, i’m coming for you
closing in, i can feel the fog
vii. hello, no
goodbye
viii. i found the only thing i wanted to lose
ix. you caught me by the throat
x. you can make me stare at the sun
but i am the child of the moon
(July 6, 2017 - 12:04 pm)
Ooh, Booksy! I really love that one, it's short but it says a lot!
(July 7, 2017 - 1:22 pm)
Booksy, I love this! My favorite line is: my compass is pointing just north of reality/way south of normality!
(July 7, 2017 - 4:02 pm)
Here's a poem I entered for Booksy's poetry contest. I decided to write it because I was inspired by Lake Michigan, which we've been visiting for three years. This year will be our fourth, and we're leaving in a week. I'm so ready! I would love critique and/or title suggestions!
I'm dreaming
Of an indigo lake
It might as well be an ocean
Because the water stretches out forever
I can't see the end.
I'm longing
For an indigo lake
That touches the sky
Again.
I'm dreaming
Of standing on the shore
While the playful waves kiss my toes
And bury my feet in sand.
I'm longing
For standing on that shore
The sky and the water
Hand in hand.
I'm dreaming
Of running on the shore
Chasing the sun
As it sinks below the water.
I'm longing
To watch the gulls
As they fly away,
Away to the sun.
I'm dreaming
Of wading deep
Into the dark waters
Watching the moon come up
Touching the stars.
I'm longing
For the midnight chills
When the fog rolls in
It's no wonder
they call this lake great
It goes so far.
I'm dreaming
Of an indigo lake
It might as well be an ocean
Because the water stretches out forever
I can't see the end.
(July 8, 2017 - 2:08 pm)
I'd love some critique on this, and also a title suggestion:
I'm trying to decide between Armory/Armorie and Weapon Girl
eyes like security cameras
mascara blades fly when we bat our eyelashes
watching watching following, we know threats
when we see them maybe not at
first glance but we know, we know.
voice like cut steel, lipstick doubles as war paint
because looking powerful is feeling powerful
hair pulled back into sleek ponytails, uniformity
is key because when they see, they will know
fists like stones, nail polish leaves colorful scratches
sweatshirts and jeans have no chinks, impenetrable
armor is crucial, and stilettos make excellent combat boots.
we don't need weapons, we are blades that we can
wield ourselves, we're silent assassins, we're here
to protect when the world can't seem to stand up for those
who need it most.
(July 8, 2017 - 4:15 pm)
ooh, I like it! The concept is very interesting, and the metaphors are all awesome. I like Weapon Girl.
(July 8, 2017 - 7:40 pm)
Thanks, I'm leaning towards that as well!
(July 9, 2017 - 1:55 pm)
BASED ON ACTUAL EVENTS THAT HAPPENED TODAY!!!
Swim
You'd think,
After someone rammed
Right into you
Head-on,
At least someome would ask
"Are you okay?"
You'd think,
After Coach Bryan said
"Clean up the pool deck,
Pick up all the boards and buoys,"
At least someonw would ask,
"Do you need help?"
Of course you would.
But that never happens.
And there they are,
Giving me
What they call
"Sympathy"
After I tell them
What THEY did.
Making me go last
Won't make me stronger
Because past a steel fence,
Behind a stone wall,
And though a mile-thick skin,
I am weak.
So when I get to the wall,
I empty the tears in my goggles out
Underwater.
So after I'm done picking up
Thirteen boards and eight buoys,
I hold in my tears until I get my towel.
So they'll never see my cry.
Swimming is torture,
But getting new times
And earning points for SSC
Makes every second worth it.
~~~~~~~~
Here's another instance where I pour all my feelings out into a poem.
(July 11, 2017 - 8:15 pm)
This needs to top! Don't you die on me, poetry thread. To the top!
(July 16, 2017 - 12:44 pm)
I haz really deep poem
Sure, I guess,
Ignorance is bliss
But why
Am I
The one that's set aside?
I try to make
Myself not look fake
But it's hard
When you've been marred
And you feel so scarred
I'm too nice
To hearts that are like ice
It all feels
Too real
Maybe it's time to seal the deal
I'm a mess,
I'll confess
I'm not keen,
I believe
A notice is a need
You say,
If I may,
That you'll miss me
If I leave
But that's not what I see
So what will the truth be?
(July 19, 2017 - 10:41 pm)
Finally I've written something! Hah, it seems like when I write about poet's block I don't have it anymore.
Untitled
my mind is a dry ditch without any water
to fill it and i'm so lonely so lonely
so lonely
where do i find the words to write if i didn't
have any to begin with?
poets' block is like a drought, water is
words but there isn't water or words here
i'm falling, falling
drowning in the water that isn't there
how can you drown in a nonexistent lake, that's the question
i'm dying i'm dying
to some people poet's block is deadly poison and it kills them
i'm so thirsty
i need water i need words i need something unexplainable, something like inspiration but not quite
but no one seems to want to help i'm so lonely
(July 20, 2017 - 9:55 am)
Bravo, LeafPool!!
(July 20, 2017 - 10:58 am)
Thank you! BTW, it's a lowercase p.
(July 21, 2017 - 11:54 am)