Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
Why?
I wonder, looking back.
And I can see
How every tiny action
Causes effects beyond belief.
One word,
One tear,
Shakes the world
-For good or for bad.
And
If people would only
Just think ahead
Perhaps the world would be a better place.
(May 21, 2017 - 2:25 pm)
Oh my gosh, Leafpool, this is so good! I love the imagery and it makes me want summer to be here even more, agh! /the sweet smell of summer/ air and dying lilacs/ that's beautiful. I also love the part about the smuggled sparklers.
I wonder how the CBers from Australia feel about all of us from the Northern Hemisphere making a ton of posts about summer XD
(May 21, 2017 - 2:45 pm)
This is really good Leafpool. I really liked the lines: And then there were smuggled/sparklers that we lit so it smelled/like the 4th of July/while we held the tips together to make/an airborne bonfire. However I fell like you should get rid of the 'And' at the beggining of that part.
(May 21, 2017 - 3:45 pm)
Aww, I'm flattered, Leafpool! I think your poem is really pretty amazing; my favorite lines are: old jeans and t-shirts worn because it/didn't really matter-- no one/could see you anyway
(May 22, 2017 - 5:47 pm)
A fan poem. It's the kind of spoilery that's just unintelligible unless you're already spoiled.
(I'm not sorry.)
Absolutetion
She claws her way up
out of the darkness,
arms shaking, hands aching
for something with which to strike
at this unaccustomed frailty-
my life for my dagger,
she braces herself against the ground
and pushes: decades of pent-up resolve
are only just enough
to drag her leaden limbs upright.
His back is the first thing she sees;
she does not think, but
shoves the prince of demons,
the pretender, the slave driver
who is himself a slave: he falls,
howling, below the deep.
(Even like this, she still has
her single-beat reaction time.)
Now, the deed done, she looks-
and her eyes fall on her,
the redheaded angel she had never
meant to leave behind,
carrying that gilded abomination
for the sake of which
she left her behind anyway.
Even though they are both in,
as she would say, some really deep trouble,
they both
come clean.
They aren't out of that trouble yet,
of course. Her job is not
done. The lute yet survives.
But now she can yank her
old, trusty blade from her own
body, listen to her heartbeat
like the thunder that heralds
the storm of the century,
dance into the lashing rain
and take the final
stroke of lightning
to her chest:
she can let the thunder
drown itself in echoes
happily,
because her daughter has said
"I understand now"
and she knows
love
when she hears it.
************
Sorry if it's a little dark or sweary for your tastes, Admins. Tell me if you choose not to post it, please, so I can edit out the not-quite-child-friendly words.
I think I did it.
Admin
(May 21, 2017 - 7:51 pm)
Thank you, Bluebird! And Epic Fangirl, thanks for the tip. I think I will remove the and from the copy on my Google Docs document.
(May 22, 2017 - 2:45 pm)
Oh, and Curio! I love that poem.
But now she can yank her/old, trusty blade from her own/body,/listen to her heartbeat/like the thunder that heralds/the storm of the century,/dance into the lashing rain/and take the final/stroke of lightning/to her chest:
that's my favorite part!
(May 22, 2017 - 2:47 pm)
What is this a fan poem for? I am curious and would like to know. Great poem by the way.
(May 22, 2017 - 7:03 pm)
It's for Crypt of the NecroDancer, because I'm a nerd. The original version (complete with swearwords, be forewarned) is up on AO3 in the NecroDancer archive.
...Yes, I am essentially one-third of this fandom. It's an indie game, what can I say.
Glad you liked the poem :)
(May 24, 2017 - 6:32 pm)
@Admin, I have this thing on my desk that I call my "poetry wall", so I was wondering if I could post a picture of it. Thanks!
I think so, as long as it doesn't show your complete name or a photo of a person. I'll certainly check it out.
Admin
(May 22, 2017 - 5:53 pm)
This was inspired by a poetry prompt- 'describe the sky right now', but I didn't stay on topic.
before the storm
thirteen birds on a line, splitting the sky in two
a barbed wire fence,
silhouetted dream orange evening
it is the color of a mushroom cloud,
without the fallout, if anything it's
radianting good vibes and lazy thoughts,
seemingly surreal,
so s l o w,
i can't think straight in muggy air
it's a pre-thunderstorm sunset,
i feel it, wind shaking the trees
and see it, the night clouds to the west,
and smell it, sharp ozone and
soon-to-be petrichor
who needs a weatherman when you can
tase the storm before it gets to you?
thirteen birds on a line,
taking off before the rain,
flying fast into a marmalade sky.
(May 22, 2017 - 8:34 pm)
Oh my gosh, I loved this so much!! M AHHHH THE ENTIRE THING WAS SO GOOD!!!! I'm literally fangirling over this right now. My favorite stanzas were the first, third, and last, so basically the entire poem. And the repetition was beautiful; I also love how you use color to describe things! Lovely poem, Blue!
(May 23, 2017 - 12:10 am)
Whhhooooooaaaaa!!!! Good job, Bluebird! I love the description!
@September, WAIT JUST A MINUTE. I'm doing this thing called my "poetry project" where I take people's poetry from the CB (don't worry, I give credit), and some of mine too, and print it out in cool fonts and things. When I have enough I'm going to put it all up on my wall that has my desk, along with some of my artwork...is that what you're doing, too??
(May 23, 2017 - 11:02 am)
Not quite, but that sounds really cool!! What I'm doing is just a corkboard on my desk pinned with a ton of random thought fragments that I use for poems.
(May 23, 2017 - 6:29 pm)
Thank you, September and Leafpool! September, your poetry wall sounds really cool! I have something a little bit like that but with post-it note doodles.
(May 24, 2017 - 7:19 am)