Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
Many thanks, Leafpool! I'm so glad you liked it.
(July 24, 2018 - 1:42 pm)
I don't have a melody or anything, just basically write whatever comes to mind. I love your poem! The words you use are so pretty and elegant.
(July 31, 2018 - 7:23 pm)
Well, you certainly have a career as a songwriter.
Thanks! :)
(August 12, 2018 - 2:08 pm)
lost
the book is open
pages ruffling ruffled will be ruffled in the breeze
her place is lost
and she has left
looking for something else
she is lost too
(July 24, 2018 - 4:57 pm)
Goodbye our racing through the halls
Goodbye our punctured soccer balls
Goodbye the bakery down the street
Goodbye our desk that was never neat
Goodbye our wild games of tag
Goodbye the keychains on our bag
Goodbye the stories that we told
Goodbye our sunrises brimming with gold
Goodbye our yelling across the class
Goodbye our window with too much glass
Goodbye our model of a cloud
Goodbye our music playing loud.
Now we’ve said goodbye, here’s something we need to know:
You can’t say goodbye without saying hello.
(July 24, 2018 - 5:22 pm)
I love it. Very much. ;)
(July 24, 2018 - 5:58 pm)
Oh I like that!
(July 24, 2018 - 11:13 pm)
I've never had a lover,
Never knew I needed one.
But when I saw your lovely face,
I sensed those days were done.
You brought me great joy,
You brought me the light.
You've shown me how to fly,
You've opened my eyes to the sights.
Oh, how I look
Back on that morn'
When I last looked
On two lovers with scorn...
Locked in the other's gaze,
Never wanting to leave
The other's loving embrace,
(May their bond never be cleaved!)
Now I look at you,
All shy smiles.
I see in that look
That you would go all extra miles.
Now I don't know if I love you,
Don't know if I even LIKE you.
But that's just because
This is a bit brand new...
~~
Wow. That's awful. I really don't know why I posted it...
(July 25, 2018 - 1:06 am)
I han't posted for, like, a really long time but I finally have some time again. I wrote this one a while ago for a writing competition and won with it, but I would still love some critique.
A Matter of Time
Time is precious
You always think
That you have more
Until
The only ticking you hear
Is your dying heart
Counting down
The final seconds of life
And every minute
Every second
Of your entire life
Flashes before you
In a single moment
They say
Let time not count age
But wisdom
I say
What is wisdom
When time runs out
Only age matters then
They say
Time shows what matters
I say
Time shows mistakes
Playing them in my head
Over and over
Drowning me in regret
As my heart ticks
And the seconds of my life
Near an end
They say
Be patient
Things will happen with time
I say
My entire life
Has been spent
Waiting
And I’ll still be waiting
When my time stops
They say
Time teaches the value
Of life
I say
Life teaches the limitations
Of time
They say
Time is a gift
I say
Time is a curse
My heart is ticking
Slower
Slower
It is only a matter of time
Before mine stops
But as I lie
I hear more ticking
Thousands of hearts
The hearts of those untouched by time
Free
(July 25, 2018 - 3:57 pm)
I love that! My only bit of critique would to maybe make the lines longer, so instead of having only a few words on each line you could join some of the lines together. Like
Time is precious/You always think that you have more/Until the only ticking you hear/Is your dying heart/Counting down the final seconds of life
I think it might just make it a little smoother? Otherwise, I really love it.
(July 27, 2018 - 10:57 am)
So...this is me when I read a good poem or meet a good poet:
AKSDKLFDASLKJHF! SO GOOD! WHY CAN'T I DO THAT! MY POEMS ARE NOTHING COMPARED TO THIS! *crumples to ground in awe*
So...here are some of my humble attempts at poetry (and by some I mean a lot, but I'll split them into many posts):
Look at me
Look at me
And tell me
What you see
Say you see a human
Say you see someone who cares
Someone who feels
Someone who silently cries
But also has
Unlimited
Love and joy
Just ready
To be
Discovered
Look at me
And say you see that
(And lie
Because I know you don’t)
You just see the girl
The outcast
The one who lives in darkness
But really thrives for the light
Of understanding.
Look at me
And say
What you see.
(July 25, 2018 - 4:04 pm)
Sorry about this, Admins!
Silent storm
There’s a silent storm inside my heart
I thought that it had gone
I locked it in a chest of ice
Tears the ice was once.
But someone somewhere heard the wind
Of my wishes and my dreams
They somehow felt my silent storm
And set it free.
And now I cannot help myself
It rages out of control
Destruction and revival can’t help
But that will come, I know.
So I give in to my silent storm
I let its cacophony fill my ears
Because out of the darkness
A light is near.
(July 25, 2018 - 4:08 pm)
In case you can't tell, I wrote this when I was madly in love.
Happy?
Am I
Happy?
Can I be
Free?
From my prison of
Misery.
I thought the torture would never end
But then you came to me.
Precious moments in the sun
As close as I’ll ever come
To pure ecstasy.
Holding back just because
I still have common sense.
And every weeping moment
Fades in comparison
Whispers echo in my ears
But I fly with no descent.
So maybe, just maybe
I can stay happy again.
(July 25, 2018 - 4:09 pm)
And...the final one because my others need some editing for them to be CB appropriate.
Drowning
I threw myself
Willingly
Into the water
It filled my lungs
I came up
Choking
Tears falling from my eyes
And fell back
My lungs burned
But I stayed down
Until I came up
Grabbing the closest link
And hanging onto it
For dear life
The waves still whipped at me
And then
Your hand reached out
I didn’t grab it
I called for another voice
But the boat sailed past
Ignoring my cries for help
And then I reached for your hand
And fell onto land
It hurt
My lungs
Were filled
With fresh air
I need more
Give me more
I want more
(July 25, 2018 - 4:11 pm)
OH MY GOODNESS GRACIOUS YOU ARE ALL SO GOOD YOU MAKE ME WANT TO GO WRITE SOME POETRY RIGHT NOW
Um, I'll be right back!
Bring back the light
You said to us,
'Stay here, we'll be back,'
And we waited
For hours
And you didn't
Come
We waited
For days
You lied.
We found a way,
Me and him
Made a life
For years
And years
We were like that
Helpless
No parent
Who was once
You.
But that was
Before
We met her
She changed our world
With her fierce hope
Her life
Had been tougher
Then ours.
Together
We fought
Had an adventure
She was unique
He loved her
But unlike us
She found her way
Back to
The light.
She is now
Who she was
Before
The darkness
Took her
We were still
Ever in the dark
Until
We found you
Again.
But
What we broke
Couldn't be fixed
But in her
Though she was gone
We found
Light.
(July 26, 2018 - 8:49 am)