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Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
untitled
if i asked
you what color
i spoke it
the refracted light
language
of my words
would you
compare my
stuttery
sentences
to the sunrise,
tangerine and
papaya,
or vantablack?
~~~
Title ideas anyone?
(December 19, 2017 - 10:31 pm)
The color of my Words
(December 20, 2017 - 3:25 pm)
Seven billion
By Black Alley
Seven billion people in the world
Seven billion chances to be loved
Yet, I never have
I was born in darkness
In darkness I lived
I strived
I was taught to fear darkness
To submit to it
Let it engulf me
But they never told me what was in the light
A tiny speck in the distance
Impossible to reach
I lived in fear
In hopelessness
In isolation from the world
Alone
Until I met you
You showed me the light
That I never knew existed
That I thought I could never reach
You gave me a reason to live
A reason to survive
To chase away the darkness
Abandon it
Fear it no longer
And discover what was in the light
The cherish it
To live in the moment
You were everything to me
You were my light
You chased away my darkness
You taught me to laugh
To love
To seek the light
Forgetting about the darkness
leaving my past behind
I saw nothing but you
And you lit up the world
Then one day, that light went out
You were gone
You left me
alone
and moved on
Leaving me to the mercy of the darkness
That I thought I had forgotten
But now
I fear it again
And no longer remember what it’s like
In the light
Darkness devours me
It consumes my thoughts
My soul
And I let it
That tiny speck of light
Off in the distance
Is gone
Everything is dark
Seven billion people in the world
Would it really miss just one?
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Trying out a new style. I've also never written a love poem, so please give me some cretique. I know it's kind of depressing, that's kind of my style. I'm working on a happy one (Nobody can die at the end :( ) ANyway, tell me what you think.
(December 20, 2017 - 3:54 pm)
Awesome poem, Black Alley! Love poems and depressing poems are my jam, so obviously I like this a lot! You conveyed the feeling of heartbreak really well, especially in the line / I saw nothing but you / And you lit up the world / Until one day, that light went out /
(December 20, 2017 - 9:12 pm)
*two thumbs-up*
(December 20, 2017 - 10:42 pm)
author's note, first, because these are more screenshots: my life is turning into a cheesy hallmark movie, help! these are super long, but I had a lot to write about. Anyways, pt. 1 is about this recurring daydream I have, and pt. 2 is just a love poem that I promise makes sense to me even it seems like a lot of nonsense to you all. Both are about a mutual crush.
P.S. the first line of pt. 1 was taken from a Cicada poem by Nick. Just so you know. I'm giving him credit.
(December 20, 2017 - 10:08 pm)
AHHHHH I LOVE LOVE POETRY SO MUCH AND THIS IS SO GOOD!!! I cam imagine the scene so well, and it feels so real to me because I have my own version of this very thing. HEART EYES HEART EYES HEART EYES!
Mudge says abgf. Mudge -- that's -- really scary -- because ABG -- are my initials -- oh my lord Jeseed Chriggs in Hamilheaven, wHAT?!?!?!/1/!//!!!?!?!?!!
(January 1, 2018 - 8:32 pm)
(December 20, 2017 - 10:09 pm)
Wow, Bluebird! I love both of these! So many metaphors. And this might sound odd but to me it sounds kind of science-y. How do you come up with all the metaphors, and really all the pieces of the poems?
(December 23, 2017 - 3:59 pm)
Thank youuu! <3 they might sound science-y because both said person and I are huge nerds. As for the metaphors, I guess I just take notice of a lot of things that I could compare to other things- I usually write poetry in my head before writing it down, which is why a lot of my poems are about events or people. It's weird, but I find that thinking about a poem a lot before actually writing it helps, I'll start with a main idea, then pieces and random imagery I want to include, then actually write it. Or else I spend 2 hours staring at a blank document trying to write something good and then end up deleting it all.
Also, aesthetic boards on Pinterest! They always spark ideas.
(December 23, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
insomnia (unfinished)
--
i've been writing on a
sugar high, trying to ignore my throbbing
headaches and playing music nonstop because the
silence is too oppressant without
it
i've been losing
sleep waking up on my
bedroom floor with my pen still clutched in my
hand there are circles under
my eyes and i don't
care
i've been thinking about you
your name is burned into my
mind in big black letters and i'm never not
thinking about you is it just
me
(December 23, 2017 - 4:15 pm)
There's something about your poetry that just feels so raw and real, you write emotion so well! Especially the last few lines o.O Definitely can relate to this poem. Also, I like what you have in your location box, is that new or have you always had it?
(December 23, 2017 - 8:57 pm)
Thank you! And I changed my location box a couple weeks ago, so it's sorta/kinda new.
(December 24, 2017 - 2:11 pm)
As Of Yet, Unnamed
Why don't words do
What I'm trying to do with
Words
They don't express
Or explain
Or allow
Or just get my $-?*#! point across!
And no one listens or maybe
They can't.
And I'm just speaking GIBBERISH
Pointless blathering in a foreign language
And I'm just talking to myself, now
Why do I even think people care.
My words,
So useless
Right?
'Cause, my ideas, are a
WASTE OF TIME.
So why do I bother to talk
To talk
talktalktalktalk
Such a waste...
Such a waste.
(December 23, 2017 - 9:51 pm)
O.O
I love this! Especially how it gets your ($-?*#!) point across. I especially like the lines "Pointless blathering in a foreign language/And I'm just talking to myself, now"
(December 24, 2017 - 2:15 pm)