Poetry Club!

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Poetry Club!

Poetry Club!

I'm pretty sure we already had one of these but I can't find the thread to resurrect it, so I'm making a new one. There is only one rule: be nice when you criticize (I don't even have to say that here) Anyways, here is a poem (I think it can be qualified as one!) of my own.

Do you ever look up at the sky and wonder

Why am I here?

What is my purpose on this earth?

Will I ever find my way?

The universe is so huge

and I've only seen a tiny piece of it.

There are a million drops of water in a fishtank 

Trillions upon trillions of tiny molecules floating around in the sea

More grains of sand than could ever be counted

An infinite number of stars; those detected and undiscovered.

When I look up into the endless depths of the sky

Or down into the never-ending abyss, as you might call it

I feel

Insignificant 

Trivial

Unimportant

And I know that I am

I'll live a short life compared to how long the universe will last

I will not do anything that will be remembered

But

When I look up at those stars

I hope

I dream

I wonder if

Life isn't so meaningless after all? 

PLEASE criticize! I am not too good at poetry, and would like some suggestions if you have them. Thank you!

 

 

submitted by Guess me if you want
(June 17, 2016 - 1:42 pm)

Beautiful poem! As a fellow appreciator of muffins, I must remark: Muffins are not cake. Cake is denser and made differently. :) Keep up the great work, though!

submitted by Scylla
(July 11, 2016 - 3:31 pm)

Thank you! And yes, I know muffins ≠ cake, but I didn't want to reuse the word too much, and needed some sort of synonym. And there you are.

submitted by Blushing
(July 11, 2016 - 6:21 pm)

That is a really good poem!

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 11, 2016 - 4:51 pm)

Awwww, that was so cute.

submitted by Guess me if you want
(July 11, 2016 - 6:11 pm)
Ooh! This sounds like fun! By the way, everyone's poems are great!
The Seedling
Tiny,
But growing
Taller every day.
Determined,
Beating the other plants
In the race for growth.
But,
Oh no!
A foot.
Down, coming down.
The foot crushes,
Squashes,
Destroys.
The seedling's life is
Done. 
Opposites no. 1
Wild and free
Never
Tame
Running out in the open
Not
Enclosed in a cage
Powerful
Never
Weak
*Flip!*
Weak
Never
Powerful
Enclosed in a cage
Not
Running out in the open
Tame
Never
Wild and free 
The Magic River
Down in the vale where the fae folk roam,
A river gurgles 'neath a bright blue dome.
Fish and crawdaddies swim b'tween the stones,
And crane fly worms make the stream their home.
The creek is a place to cool your toes,
And the flowers grow in neat little rows
On the banks of the stream where ev’rything grows,
This beautiful river where clean water flows.
Hope flows in this stream, as does love.
It reflects the beauty of the stars above.
Loftier that the wings of an dove,
The river’s waters are never rough.
submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 11, 2016 - 8:00 pm)

Oooh, I liked those! Especially The Seedling, that was kind of sad, but an interesting concept.

submitted by Guess me if you want
(July 12, 2016 - 8:00 pm)

Wonderful poems, BubleBuddy! I really loved the reverse poem you did, but all three were really good.

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 12, 2016 - 11:41 pm)

Thanks, Ashlee and Guess!

submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 14, 2016 - 6:54 am)

Love

Love

The emotion that starts as a bud

Then blooms outward

The happiness and drama entangled

In the vines of love

But every rose has its thorns

And sometimes the blossom

Droops 

Withers

Falls

And the love is gone

 

Sunset Magic

The sun sank slowly

Shadows ruled the land

Fireflies flickered their lights

On and off

On and off 

And owls awoke from sleep

The landscape turned into

Another world

Perfect for slumber

 

submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 12, 2016 - 7:28 pm)

This is a something I wrote. You guys probably all think my poems suck because they're so wordy and depressing. Anyways, here it is.

Folded Flag

have you ever felt so empty

broken inside

that you just couldn't function anymore?

have you ever been

unable to cry

because you don't have any tears left?

have you ever had to hold yourself together 

in front of a crowd of people

as a folded flag is handed to your father

as a coffin is carried away from you

away, never coming back

you try and you try

but you just can't

your bottom lip begins to quiver

you squeeze your eyes shut

you clench your fists

a hand on your shoulder

doesn't do anything to make you feel better

the tears run down your face

it hurts your throat

trying to keep the sobs inside

keep it together, you command yourself

as the uniformed man looks at you with sympathy

you stare at the ground

you press your lips together

but it's too hard

you can't do it anymore

your shoulders start to shake

you cover your face with your hands, because

this type of sadness isn't pretty

you'd give anything in the world

to be away from here

at the same time

you can't leave

because

this is your last chance

to

say

goodbye. 

submitted by Guess me if you want
(July 12, 2016 - 10:51 pm)

The Wind's Story

As the light of the sun slips beneath the trees,

And the clouds float loftily on the breeze,

The whisp'rin' wind murmurs a wondrous tale,

Carried afar over the fields, hills, and dale.

 

The tale is as ancient as old Mother Earth, 

Created to be told by the wind and the surf, 

The story holds many a lesson and riddle,

Ev'ry single time it's retold it changes a little. 

 

It talks about stars and the evening and morn,

It talks about ev'ry promise broken and sworn.

The stars and clouds come closer to hear,

When the first rays of the ivory moon appear.

 

As the light of the sun slips beneath the trees,

And the clouds float loftily on the breeze,

The whisp'rin' wind murmurs a wondrous tale,

Carried afar over fields, hills, and dale. 

 

submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 14, 2016 - 6:53 pm)

That was beautiful, BumbleBuddy! I think you could turn that into a fantasy story!

submitted by Guess me if you want
(July 15, 2016 - 12:15 pm)

I love those poems, Guess and BumbleBuddy! And Guess, your poems are NOT bad. They are amazing works of art, stunning. Also, are you Shadow Dragon, Guess Me? Here is one of the ones I created while camping:

Finally Home 

Glistening down

The moon lights her face

Creating a pathway

Home

A mother the child

Never knew

Missing home

She followed the moon

To places unknown

Path of moonbeams

Slight stepping stones

As clouds form

Swirling, stirring

Flakes of frozen raindrops

Upon the girls face

The moon leads her home

Edge of a quiet house

Under light and wall

The girl sits peacefully

A smile upon her face

The moon watching

Over her silent body

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 16, 2016 - 1:17 am)

Whoa, Ashlee and Guess, that is some good poetry.

Moonlit Night

Moonlight

Pure

And 

Enchanting

Turing the coarse

Moorland grass

Silver 

Unnamed

High in the sky, the moon shines bright,

Adding magic to this warm summer night. 

Fireflies dance to the cricket's sweet songs,

And the stars twinkle brightly all night long.

Okay... I can't think of anything else. Bye! 

submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 16, 2016 - 2:50 pm)

Great work, BumbleBuddy! I find it hard to write shorter poetry, and these are the shortest I made while camping:

The Ocean's Call

The breeze blows

Peacefully between our souls

Simple bird's song

A lullaby in our hearts

As feet touch

The spoiled earth

Sand beneath our forms

The ocean beckons

Silently, slowly

Calling us home 

Children of the Earth

Sweet children of the earth

I'm calling you home

To soar across the skies

Forever free

Forever young

Take flight

My children

To a world beyond

Where nothing can hurt you

And you may live forever

Carefree and young 

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 16, 2016 - 5:50 pm)