Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
I really should have checked out this thread before!! Now that I know what it is, I absolutely have to stay up reading all y'all's amazing poetry :)
Most of my recent poems I wrote for various contests/prompts on Puddings Place, so here's an earlier one. It's a terzanelle, which is a combination of villanelle and terza rima. I wrote it for this year's Governor's School application (Eeeeee! Let's hope I get in again!).
OBLIQUE
Try on her hats
she will come back
try on her hats
start to unpack
open boxes
she will come back
ignore auctions
keep each antique
open boxes
death is oblique
she is not here
keep each antique
shove out the fear
try on her hats
she is not here
she won’t come back.
(October 24, 2017 - 8:58 pm)
Here's a screenshot of a poem, because I like it better without a lot of space in between the lines. A fun fact- calluna and indigofera because are the scientific names of heather and (obviously) indigo, which I mentioned in the poem. I liked how they sounded together, sooo...
(October 24, 2017 - 9:01 pm)
I like how it kind of rambles on like prose!
I'm working on a poem right now. It's all kind of loose and not-quite-fitting together, so it needs a lot of revision...I'll probably post it sometime in the next day or two.
(October 25, 2017 - 9:56 am)
Thank you! And I can't wait to read your poem!
(October 26, 2017 - 7:34 am)
:)
(October 26, 2017 - 11:26 am)
Here it is! I'm not completely satisfied with it, even though I revised it several times. I feel like it's either lacking something or needs something taken out. But anyway...here it is.
river roses
i. it was the springtime
you were young and i was
naive
you spent all your time staring into
the glassy water, i spent all my
time staring at you
too mesmerized to utter a word
ii. i lost my heart to you
iii. but you were narcissus and i was
cursed
iv. (to remain here forever among the river roses
the trailing ferns and
the lilacs)
v. i am haunted by the echoes of my former self
because these days i don't quite know
if i even exist or not;
perhaps i am just a memory
or a fairytale,
told to those with broken hearts
(shattered, splintered, fragmented)
vi. love always found
me at the most
inconvenient times because you left me
vii. and i experienced that kind of burning pain that
comes after heartbreak
after fracturing bones
after the realization that it's all a lie
viii. one-sided love stories are always tragic
ix. because now you can visit my grave,
though the crumbling headstone
is choked by vines and surrounded by
the wild rosebushes
x. i guess you didn't know that grief
was so fatal, narcissus, or maybe you
would've noticed me in time.
I think with each poem I improve a little bit more. I still would not compare my poetry to some other people's, but I think I've come a long way from when I first started writing poetry.
(October 27, 2017 - 1:16 pm)
Whoa! That was amazing, Leafpool! I like the allusion to Narcissus in the first part (you spent all your time staring into/the glassy water, I spent all my time/ staring at you), and the last stanza especially.
(October 27, 2017 - 6:29 pm)
Oh my gooooooooosh, this is amazing!! Leafpool, your poems are so good! I really like vii.
(October 27, 2017 - 10:23 pm)
Thanks, both of you!
(October 29, 2017 - 11:44 am)
A poem inspired by Jon Cozart's Tourist: A Love Song From Paris, and I recommend listening to the song while you read it.
sparrows and stitched-up hearts
——
dearest one,
you have been born with wings.
he writes. he is hunched over a legal pad,
scribbling with the cheap ballpoint pen he found on the floor
of the elevator, and ignores the lines,
ignores the margins, ignores the rules.
his words stumble and hitch
like drunken puppies,
awkward hiccups of half-formed thoughts.
you have been born with wings.
though you cannot see them, I can, for I see
everything of you, and everything I see is you.
it is two am
and he is lying on a too-big bed in a
hotel in paris with the lights turned down low.
the room is overheated, manicured, silent,
like a photo
in a tourist magazine— too perfect to be real.
it was all too perfect to be real.
I see your smile,
sometimes jagged steel
and sometimes melting ice cream.
in the morning sun, your eyes shine like new pennies.
his world right now is something between reality and not,
something between what he knows and
what he wishes.
he has forgotten the difference and
doesn’t wish to remember.
you tell me that I’m wrong, that what I love about you
isn’t real, isn’t there,
but if it is that’s all right. I’d rather beautiful lies than
hard truth. that’s naive,
and so am I.
I still believe in love.
he is on a one-person honeymoon,
broken-hearted in the city of love,
but his chest will repair itself eventually
and he can always drown his sorrows in croissants.
little sparrow, you finally saw your wings.
you have flown away from me.
life is brilliance, turned up to blinding levels, and
life is a sepia photograph.
he crumbles chunks of fresh, hot, bread,
and sprinkles the remains
among the sparrows in the park.
I miss you. I miss your sense of humor,
bold and throaty,
I miss your nervous tics and ceramic statues.
I miss eating your burned cookies
and riding our bikes without helmets
and laughing until our ribs hurt.
at every restaurant he goes to
he says, “table for two.”
paris is a place for a pair
and he is alone.
he is not meant to be alone,
but chance is cruel like that.
little sparrow, please come home to me.
(October 27, 2017 - 6:34 pm)
This is very good! I love the title.
(October 29, 2017 - 11:49 am)
I wrote another poem on friendship.
Hit
I know who my real friends are.
Or so I thought.
We played handball today.
When I was up to start the game,
I accidentally got hit in the face.
I stood there,
Holding my face,
Watching the game go on.
Someone from the other team,
Someone I barely know,
Asked if I was okay.
When I asked my team,
"Did you see me get hit?"
B said she was
On the other side of the court.
Lies!
All Lies!
I wanted to scream.
I SAW YOU
LOOK AT ME!
A said she was
Being goalie.
Lies!
All LIES!
I wanted to scream.
I SAW YOU
TRY TO CATCH THE BALL!
M said she was
Facing the other way.
Lies!
ALL LIES!
I wanted to scream.
I SAW YOU
TALKING TO B!
S said she was
Playing defense.
LIES!
ALL LIES!
I wanted to scream.
I SAW THE BALL!
THERE WAS NO NEED FOR DEFENSE!
~~~~
(October 28, 2017 - 1:10 am)
Wow, Lucy, this is great.
(October 29, 2017 - 11:53 am)
Thanks Leafpool! I really think I write better when it's based on my actual experiences.
(October 29, 2017 - 2:42 pm)
Wow, I don't know what this poem is... it doesn't make sense, and it's a little confusing, but... yeah. It just happened, it's a rough draft, but here it is. XD
I guess it wasn’t in the way you spoke,
but the way I watched you
smile at her.
It was more of the things
I know you once did
That twisted a knot in my stomach,
Her and round
Acid and fire.
Instead of talking to me
You were talking to her
And since I am biased
It hurt,
another stab with every word.
Though I tell myself
You know that that’s over,
I still can’t stop wishing
You’d stop it with her,
And just stay with me
(although that’s even less probable).
She told me it ended
Because you liked another girl
And she didn’t care anymore
But who were you then? And
Who you are now
Is different, and when
I’m watching you look at her
Even if it’s not the way I’m
staring at you,
I imagine you only have eyes
for that girl
Cause I’m just not good enough,
The way I see it.
Though I guess
It wasn’t
A matter of being, but
a matter of seeing things
that maybe aren't there
For I can’t help but think
That we’ll never be together
And that’s why I dream you’re
Looking at her.
(October 29, 2017 - 7:17 pm)