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Try this poem thing! I wrote apoem sitting in a writing class - homeschoolers have co-ops, in which parents teach classes for a bunch of kids over the school year - anyway, I was just sitting there listening to the teacher talk about a comparative literary analasis essay we're going to write about Frankenstein, and this line pops into my head: "Lost in time from far away." I spun off an interesting poem from that - kind of random, but I'm going to write a story about it, sort of Star Trekky. I want to see what kinds of poem y'all can write with the line "Lost in time from far away" as the first line. This can be really fun - have a set first line and just go. Don't edit too much - I've barely done anything to mine, which I'll post mine in a little bit, only first I want to see what other perspectives people take on it before I bias you with mine. Please give it a try, and have fun!
-Emily
submitted by Emily H., age 13, Sparks, NV
(April 16, 2009 - 11:17 pm)
(April 16, 2009 - 11:17 pm)
Oh, so you can't change from singular to plural? but then is it Ok to change between forms of a verb like I did with fly? I'm kind of confused....
-EH
(April 30, 2009 - 3:26 pm)
By the way, Emily--today in my new Cricket edition, I saw a poem (which won a contest) by a thirteen-year-old girl named Emily H from Sparks, NV. I knew you wrote poems, were thirteen, and lived in Sparks, NV, so I wondered if that was you. It was a really good poem, one about Cymbril from The Star Shard (which I didn't really get into, so shoot me or something, but sorry).
(April 30, 2009 - 7:04 pm)
It IS Emily! :) And don't worry about The Star Shard; I didn't get into it much either.
(May 1, 2009 - 8:15 am)
Well, it's still the same word, right?
(May 1, 2009 - 9:40 pm)
Yeah, Mary, that's me. :D:D:D:D:D:D Yippee!!! Thanks!
-EH
(April 30, 2009 - 10:27 pm)
Congratulations! How thrilling!
(Whenever I enter the contests, I just get a form postcard saying that Ladybug thinks I'm stellar. Whohoo. :) )
(May 1, 2009 - 2:54 pm)
Wow, you should come see my stack of form rejection letters, if you think being called stellar is bad! :)
(May 1, 2009 - 5:16 pm)
Me too, Mary. That's why I don't enter them very often. But then I saw that one... and I liked "The Star Shard".... and I was inspired.... "a bright light burst upon me" as they say... so I wrote it and sent it off and promptly forgot about it. A couple more "stellar" postcards will get me back to barely ever sending one in again. :P
-EH
(May 1, 2009 - 4:03 pm)
Emily, can you post the poem? i missed it. :( It had to be good.
(May 1, 2009 - 6:53 pm)
Oh, it's here on the website at /www.cricketmagkids.com/league/contest/winners/story/10807. Here it is anyway, though, because I forgot to change one of the words before I sent it in. :P
Cymbril
A Halcyon Fey in days of old
Her blue eyes streaked with brownish gold -
A star shard came to her ass heir;
Enchanted pin gleamed in her hair.
Though slave she was in rolling town,
Her golden hair glowed like a corwn,
And when she sang the land aweoke;
The Sidhe were fair-voiced folk.
Her path crossed with an elfish lad -
Their friendship best of all she had.
She saved his life from dreaded beast
In Weepwallow where harpies feast
On victims' blood; he would not run,
Escape, to his lands full of sun
And leave her there, and gradually
They neared the door to liberty
Where lay their dreams. Then one fair day
The seemed to vanish clear away,
And now, 'tis said, the stars they see
From Gorhyv Glyn, forever free.
I got really lucky on that - of course in February we didn't know, really, how it would end, but I went with the happy ending and did the "and now, 'tis said, the stars they see/From Gorhyv Glyn, forever free" and, in the last section of the story, there's a full paragraph just going on about the stars in Gorhyv Glyn. When I read that I almost cried because I'd gotten it right. Hope you like it!
-EH
(May 2, 2009 - 10:21 am)
You mean "as heir," not "ass heir," right?
(May 2, 2009 - 1:02 pm)
Come on, I can't even type my own poem right. It would be nice if Cricket had spellcheck. Corwn instead of crown, aweoke instead of awoke.... I don't know what it is with me today. Sorry.
-EH
(May 2, 2009 - 2:27 pm)
S'kay, I do that a lot, too.
(May 3, 2009 - 12:41 pm)
I do that all the time, Emily.
I didn't get into The Star Shard untill the very end. But then I didn't feel like going back into my enormous pile of Cricket magazines to find the other parts of the story.
(May 3, 2009 - 5:52 pm)
Wow Emily, that's good!!!:D And don't worry about
the spelling mistakes. We understand what you ment.
(May 6, 2009 - 3:58 pm)