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Megan and Annie
Megan and Annie are doing a Historical Fiction story.
Rules:
1. No fighting.
2. No taking over the story. Work it out with your partner so you can both do the story equally.
3. Keep the story PG.
4. GloWorm says to always keep to your genre, but I disagree: if you really want to, change genres.
Thank you very much! :)
submitted by BellaTrix♡♥♡
(March 30, 2009 - 4:21 pm)
(March 30, 2009 - 4:21 pm)
Hi, Megan, I'm just letting you know that Annie won't be coming on Chatterbox all this week. She should be back on Monday or Tuesday, so don't get worried she's dissapeared. :)
~Allison
(April 4, 2009 - 7:51 am)
Hi, Megan! Just so you know, I'm back and ready to start a story! But, um, BellaTrix, Megan, is it all right if we do Fantasy instead? I don't do historical fiction. So, brainstorming--maybe a magical being (elf/pixie/leprechaun/sprite/nymph) sort of story. I can't wait to start!
(April 6, 2009 - 6:07 pm)
Sorry, I'm here! Last week or so has been hectic. ERBs... Ugh!
OK, so I totally agree about doing Fantasy; I think Bella Trix just slipped up is all. I love magical beings, like elves... Elves okay with you? Sorry that can't be more helpful right now, but I am here!
(April 8, 2009 - 4:54 pm)
Yep, if you really don't think you can do historical fiction, fantasy is fine with me. :)
(April 9, 2009 - 10:51 am)
Megan? Are you there? I'd really like to get started soon!
(April 7, 2009 - 5:42 pm)
Sorry, ignore that last post.
Annie
(April 10, 2009 - 2:35 pm)
Elves sound great, but what kind of elves are we dealing with? I mean, there are all sorts of elves, from the tall graceful ones to the tree elves that are almost like nymphs to the short kind with healing powers to the ones that look like insanely beautiful humans. I personally like the tall, graceful, ethereal type, if that's all right with you. So, how are we going to write this thing? Like, alternating writing, or maybe there are two elves and I write from one point of view and you write the other. PLEASE get back to me on this.
Annie
(April 12, 2009 - 3:28 pm)
I'm really, really sorry that I haven't been holding up my end of the partnership, Annie. School is hectic right now... I barely have time to think, let alone sit down and check the Chatterbox! It seems like my teachers believe that they have to cram everything into the last few months of the school year before you leave for high school. I'm probably going to be gone for long periods of time a lot, so don't freak out on me if I disappear for a couple days or so, okay?
I agree; I'm an absolute fan of tall, lithe elves. However, my Fantasy Encyclopedia says that "elfin women can occasionally seem human" but "seen from behind, they have no backs and are hollow, like a hollow tree." So, the way I see it, we can go two ways with the human-like elves:
1. Go with history and use the evil version of the female elf, or
2. Use our own good version of human-like elf (sort of like Arya in Eragon)
I prefer the second version, but give me your opinion, too! Having read your submission for TAPM (a.k.a. The Authors Pairs Movement), I will assume for the moment that you prefer the second option as well.
I like your idea of alternating writing; like a roleplay, just with two people (been there, done that). However, we might have to work more together at times. Roleplay can get confusing, and if I am going to go missing for short periods like I expect I will (oh, the evils of homework!) the story would move along extremely slowly.
So, plot. Any ideas? At the moment, I'm fresh out. Oh, wait! We could incorporate one or both of our stories for TAPM into our story. What do you think? We could do something totally different plot wise though, if you want. Tell me what you think!
(April 13, 2009 - 3:57 pm)
I feel for you-my teachers go insane too once in a while. I suggest that we stick with the good elves, the ones without the hollow backs (Ugh) and go with the good elves idea. I haven't read Eragon, so I don't know who Arya is. Also, Adawna from my TAPM sample is a sprite, not an elf. Okay-vague plot- Two elves. Some threat to their existance. A quest to save the elves. Or, another vague plot might include some elves that are hiding from humans in the woods, like your TAPM story. Ideas for characters include-The daughters of the leader of the elves, two elves who don't particuraly like each other (to say the least), Two elves who meet by chance, an evil elf and a good elf, etc. etc. I don't know about you, but I like to have a plan before writing.
Annie
(April 14, 2009 - 2:10 pm)
I agree; it's always a good idea to plan out a story before writing it. On that note, what are your interests? I know that sounds like a really random question, but it would really help because then we could work out what we both enjoy writing about (like elves) and it could really strengthen our writing by filling in our "fatal flaws". My interests include: writing (obviously), singing, acting, yoga (primarily doing Sasavana- or meditation to a non-yogi), reading, and Greek mythology.
Just to clarify, my submission isn't about a band of elves hiding from humans in the forest, it's about one elf who came over to Earth from her world and got caught by humans. Certain humans know that elves exist (the usual 'I want to totally wipe out this species' thing), but don't know where the portal to their world is. Hence the reward for a living elf. But that's about as far as I got with my plot.
Plot Ideas:
- Elves have special connection with animals (or trees, or something like that). Animals start falling sick with strange illness that can't be cured. Elves start catching illness. Two elves sent on quest to find cure.
- Big misunderstanding. Elves preparing to fight. One or two elves set out to correct misunderstanding.
- Two elves from enemy tribes/clans forced to wander together. Wander into modern world from nature-friendly world they lived in. Try to find their way back to their world.
P.S.: You haven't read Eragon!? *faints*
(April 14, 2009 - 5:11 pm)
I'm sorry for incorrectly summarizing your TAPM submission (Which was, by the way, very good). My interests include writing, reading, drawing (mostly cats), ballet, tree climbing, and write-acting. Write-acting is when you write a scene from a story, then act it out to see what happens next. It's really fun, and helpful if you're stuck. I also enjoy Greek mythology. (Try putting a dozen or so quarrelsome, all-powerful beings together in one story, and see if there isn't a good amount of treachery and evil spells.) However, I wouldn't classify that as a major interest.
As for the plot idea, I like the first one. How about this:
-The illness is spreading. Two representative elves from enemy tribes are sent to find a cure together. During their travels, they come across a delirious human who mistakenly stumbled upon an inter-dimensional portal and came to Gladell. Their choices are- Go on with the quest and hope that the human doesn't meet the elf tribes, or stop the human and hope that not too many elves die before they can find the cure for the illness.
No, I haven't read Eragon, but I am getting it from my library. Why do you like it so much?
Annie
(April 15, 2009 - 3:57 pm)
I love to climb trees, too. We have an apple tree in our backyard that is perfect for this. A few of the branches make a perfect chair, and you can just relax and listen to the birds. In the summer, we can collect the apples to make applesauce. Delicious!
Write-acting sounds fun. Maybe I'll try it sometime.
I like your idea for the story, except for the human entering the Elf Lands (I love the name that you came up with--Gladell! It's perfect.). Too complicated, and will probably force the characters to do something that we would not enjoy writing. So how about this instead:
The enemy elves stumble onto a portal to the Human Realms. They enter and have to cope with the 21st century. Like? No like? Anyway, I came up with script for the Selection of the two elves to go on the quest:
Adawna watched intently as the wizened old man stepped up onto the platform. Her breath caught; in her short lifespan, she had never seen all of the tribes together at once, as they were now.
The old man cleared his throat. "You all know of the reason for this emergency meeting. An illness is spreading through our tribes, sparing none. Already we hae all felt the loss of our loved ones."
In front of Adawna a woman, her hair braided in the Mourning Knot, let out a choked sob.
The old man cleared his throat, then continued, "In light of this new and strange ailment, the Council of Twelve has made a decision. A unanimous desicion"
A gasp rippled through the crowd gathered Awdawna included. The Council of Twelve was made up of three representatives from each tribe: the leader, his wife, and the strongest warrior. The Council rarely made a desicion, let alone one that was unanimous.
Once the shock had died down, Adawna heard, "Two of your people will be sent out to find the cure. They will not be able to return until the cure is discovered. They must be strong, courageous, determined, and passionate to endure the hardships of the road. With this in mind, the Council has determined that the two women will be from the tribes of Valya and J'Hartha."
The crowd murmured their approval. The elven women of Valya were soft spoken, but passionate. The elves of J'Hartha were of a fiery nature, restless and fierce warriors. Adawna's heart beat quickened. She was from the Valya tribe.
"From the Valya tribe, the elven woman to journey for the cure will be Adawna.
Adawna's joy was short lived. "And accompanying her as her companion and gaurdian will be Rihana of the J'Hartha tribe. May you both find health and happiness on your journey and return with the swiftness of a doe. We bid you luck, Adawna and Rihana."
Adawna felt her heart sink deeper with every word.
((I love Eragon because Christopher Paolini is an awesome writer; he uses words even I don't know. (which is difficult, because my mom says my vocabulary is even better than hers!) ))
(April 19, 2009 - 11:56 am)
I like the story-bit you wrote. I presume I'll be writing from the other elf's point of veiw, but can I change the name? No offense, but I like Lorei better than Rihana as an elf name. Okay, here goes-
Lorei rubbed her warrior's bow with a soft oiled cloth as she pondered the upcoming mission. Of course, as of yet, she didn't know for sure she would be a delegate, but it was almost certain that she would be chosen of the J'hartha. She was the quickest, the cleverest, the fiercest of all the young warriors of her tribe, and fifth in all of Gladell. The other four were the senior elf-warriors, and would almost certainly be staying back to protect their tribe. Lorei's tribe, the J'Hartha were respected for their fierce warriorlike demeanor, and archer skills. It was a fair guess that the other delegate would be from the Korlian, a group known for diplomatic and navigational skills that the J'Hartha lacked. Lorei had immense respect for them. The other tribes were known for little things like their talent with herbs, or their tracking skills. The J'hartha be chosen over those tribes in a heartbeat. Everyone knew that- Her train of thought was broken off as she felt a tap on the shoulder. It was her friend Krithel.
"Lorei! The Council have come to a decision!" said Krithel, tossing her long locks. Lorei carefully placed her bow on a clean cloth, then turned and raced toward the cross section, where the Four Tribes of Gladell had come together to hear the names of the elf warriors. Lorei saw many sobbing over lost loved ones as they massed in the area. The council elf-speaker stood on a platform.
"Two of your people will be sent out to find the cure. They will
not be able to return until the cure is discovered. They must be
strong, courageous, determined, and passionate to endure the hardships
of the road. With this in mind, the Council has determined that the
two women will be from the tribes of Valya and J'Hartha."
Valya? That was ridiculous, the Valya were too soft-hearted; they would never hold up under the efforts of a quest. The elf-speaker went on.
"From the Valya tribe, the elven woman to journey for the cure will be Adawna D'esria."
Of all the luck! Adawna would be the last elf Lorei would ever trust her life to, that over-emotional, soft-hearted, dim-witted- Lorei took a deep breath. If they were going on a mission together, they'd have to get along, at least for the sake of Gladell.
"And accompanying her as her
companion and gaurdian will be Lorei D'Lorien of the J'Hartha tribe. May you
both find health and happiness on your journey and return with the
swiftness of a doe. We bid you luck, Adawna and Lorei."
Lorei vaguely wondered how she would survive, living with just Adawna until they found the cure, but dismissed those thoughts as she was surrounded by a group of well wishers.
Okay, sorry if I did the my-character-is-perfect thing. I tried tomake her her prideful, to downplay the 'best warrior in her tribe'. Criticize freely and at will!
Annie
P.S. I'm reading Eragon. It's really good. I'm right where they rescued the elf woman from the prison in Gil'ead
(April 21, 2009 - 2:06 pm)
I absolutely loved that, Annie! You portrayed Lorei just as I had pictured her! (Is it Lorei as in lore-E, or as in lore-I?) I used Rihana for Lorei's name because I was trying to find a name that sounded like someone who was impatient and reckless with a fiery soul, but I like Lorei much better. You portrayed her perfectly! (btw, it's helpful if you put non-story material in (( )) or do a double shift in-between. It's easier to follow.)
So, you want critizism. My only problem was that Lorei was too confident that she would be chosen. We could fix that by having her be chosen first, and Adawna second.
What plot do you like? The way the story is unrolling right now, my 21st century portal idea doesn't seem to work very well. We would need to have the girls create a closer bond first. Give me some/any ideas!
(You're already in Dras-Leona? Wow, you read almost as fast as I do! =) )
(April 21, 2009 - 4:20 pm)
((Thanks! And, actually, I more thought of Lorei as lore-AY, not lore-I or lore-E, if that's all right with you. About the criticism, I agree that she is too confident, and I will try to fix that, but you should understand why I wrote that way. First of all, I had to set up the story's setting, and I couldn't find anywhere else to do that. Second of all, I wanted to make a point about Lorei's prideful character. I also suggest that we do no editing until we finish- or at least get close to finishing- the story. Otherwise, I'll sometimes write and rewrite a scene again and again until it's worse than when I started writing it. Anyway, I won't tell you what to do. I agree that the portal idea might not work, with the beginning laid out, and frankly, I don't think I'd enjoy writing about the elves in the Human Realms at all. Maybe they should have a straightforward quest, where they come back triumphant. Then we could make the subject of the story the animosity beetween the elves. Unless you think that's too generic? Also, I finished Eragon, and I am now reading Eldest. Eragon just reached Ellesmere with Saphira, Arya, and Orik. I'll type another bit of the story later, maybe where Lorei is packing for the quest. Another thing. If the clans never get together, how do Adawna D'esria and Lorei D'Lorien know each other? Maybe a contest or race. Either Adawna won the race, and Lorei's pride was stung, or Lorei won and made a sarcastic -not too mean- comment about the Valya tribe, and Adawna's pride was stung. Anyway, get back to me! Also, I finished Eragon, and I am now reading Eldest. Eragon just reached Ellesmere with Saphira, Arya, and Orik.))
(April 22, 2009 - 1:00 pm)