Villain

Chatterbox: Crowd Sorcery

Villain

Villain

Note: You have until Monday, July 7, to create a villain in time for voting. Go here to see the schedule.

 

One of the most effective ways to be sure a story will have conflict that keeps readers breathlessly turning pages is to introduce a villain—someone whose goals collide head-on with the main character’s goals. We fantasy readers can all think of unforgettable villains from our favorite stories, those scary or relentless opponents that make life so difficult for the hero or heroine.

Villains need more than special magical powers to become so memorable that they haunt our imaginations; they also need as much personality and feeling as the hero. In actual life, almost no one ever sets out to become a villain. Perhaps your villain is desperate to protect her homeland, or family, or dragon. Perhaps the villain’s very life is at stake. There must always be a why, a solid reason behind the evil the villain does so that it makes sense—at least to him or her. 

Usually the plot will unfold if you can figure out the relationship of the villain to the main character and what the villain wants. For instance, in thinking about Quill, my heroine who comes out only in moonlight, I might wonder who cast the original spell on her grandmother and why. I’ll imagine it was a monstrous spirit-witch, Gershardt, who lives in a cavern beneath a pool in the forest. Gershardt’s spells can steal someone’s daytime essence, enabling her to take on a human form, leave the pool, and walk about in the world of mortals. But her spell fades over time so she is trying to steal Quill’s nighttime essence, too—although that would make Quill vanish forever.

In my example the stakes are high: the villain wants to continue living in the physical world, and so does the main character—whichever of them loses will disappear!

I might write for my Crowd Sorcery Sentences: “Gnarled hands rose from the water and gripped a tree root, followed by bony arms and a streaming tangle of white hair. Old Gershardt crept from the pool and stood dripping and frosty in the moonlight, blinking into the shadows with her pale blue eyes, chuckling through her toothless mouth.”

When I write, I try to keep in mind that, from the villain’s point of view, he or she is the true main character of the story, and it is the hero or heroine that is in the way. 

  1. 1. Name
  2. 2. Physical appearance
  3. 3. Background
  4. 4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
  5. 5. What is the villain’s goal?
  6. 6. Attitude toward hero
  7. 7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
  8. 8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
  9. 9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
  10. 10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)

submitted by Fred Durbin
(April 23, 2014 - 11:54 am)

Name: Malo Luman

Physical Apperearence: Pointy scarred face, stringy brown hair that falls over his face (shoulder length, long pale fingers, wears a giant birds skull as a helmet, with a cloak of raven feathers

Backround: Malo was born in a cabin in the woods, where his mother died in labor. His father, being a witch doctor and feared by the nearby village, verbally abusing him, treating him horribally, and accusing him of being a devil spirit the killed his wife. Stricked with hatred and grief, he befriended the ravens that lived by his home, where they worked together and murdered the dreadful father. Malo's heart was still made of stone, and it was too late to help him. The ravens guided him on his passgae to evil, until he eventually overpowered the raven clan, killing them all. Malo now seeks to conquer anything to stand in his way. His cloak and skull are the remains of the raven clan.

Attitude towards Hero: He despises the hero, and under estimates the hero greatly.

How is the Villian Stronger than the Hero:  His anger can take over him, and make him a monster, and making him much stronger and more evil physically.

How is the Villian Weak: Malo is a weak soul full with anger, and if you look at it, is not stronger than the hero. He is a weak man, with no feelings, and deep down inside, goodness is propelling upwards, but dying as it starts to emerge. That is his fatal flaw.

Why is the Hero and the Villian in Conflict:  They are in conflict because the hero wants to rescue those he has captured and stop him on his way to overpowering good, and turning it evil, while Malo wants to succeed.

Crowd Sorcery Sentance: A petrifying scream clutched the night on its last gasp for breath. the dying burning bird shrieked louder as the flames engulfed them, swallowing and dragging them down to the pits of darkness. The unscathed Malo, swaggers off into the distance, his cruel gron smirking its way upon his thin lips. This was only the beggining.  

 

 

 

submitted by Edie the Bewildered, age 12, Middle of No Where
(June 26, 2014 - 4:55 pm)

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Thank you, Joe the Stickfiddler!

Name: Eoin (pronounced Owen) Cossell

Physical Appearance: He is a shape shifter, but
likes to appear in the form of a human with buzz-cut red hair, brown eyes,
tanned skin, long limbs, skinny, and rather tall. 

Background: Eoin's mother died giving birth to
his younger brother (his younger brother died as well) and his father became a criminal. Eoin learned
how to steal, pickpocket, lockpick, and escape  in every way. When he and his father discovered his shape-shifting
abilities, it was only a bonus. His father's legs were taken off in a gunfight, and the only person Eoin loved that was left in this world was now in a hospital and would be forever. Eoin, who had become cold and hard over the years, melted and broke down when he heard the news. His father's last words to him before he blacked out because of pain were to find the hero/heroine (whoever he/she is) and to kill him/her and finish the feud once and for all. Eoin, thinking that his father was crazy, humored him and agreed. He met the hero/heroine a month later (once he had gotten over his breakdown) and knew that his father's words were true. He vowed to kill him/her when he met her next. 
 

           Attitude Towards Hero: Doesn't really know much about her, and a bit confused about her as well, but his father said to kill her, and he knows he needs to finish the feud.

How is the Villain Stronger than
the hero?: Has motivation that drives him, and nothing will stop him.  Also is a shape-shifter.

 How is the Villain
Weaker than the hero?: Can’t stand any more pressure than he is already under.

 

Why are the Hero and the Villain in conflict?: Eoin wants to
kill him/her, she/he wants to survive.

 

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Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s): A small orange striped cat
sauntered down the street, his tail held high. He suddenly stopped, raised his
head, and sniffed as though he smelled something. Any person walking by would
have thought that he had sniffed out something tasty. Any person but the cat.
The cat simply needed an excuse to run into an alleyway to morph into a human
without any suspicions swirling around him. No marked person needed to be
killed on order of his poor deformed father in this town. Next town had better
watch out.

 

submitted by Ariel K, age 12, Atlanta, Georgia
(June 27, 2014 - 6:37 am)
  1. 1. Name
  2. Evelyn Longnuf
  3. 2. Physical appearance
  4. She has jet black hair that comes around her ankles. To keep it out of her way, she ties it into a big braid. She has a turned up nose, and thin, grim-looking mouth. Her lips are pale and ghost-like. Her ears are so small that she wears fake ears so that people on't laugh at her. She has perfect teeth, and nothing out of place on her face. She wears a simple but elegant black dress with long, tight sleeves and a sash. Her cloak is a rich purple, with a faint trace of blue.
  5. 3. Background
  6. Evelyn was born in the poor countryside of a rich kingdom. Where she lived, everyone was angry at the king and queen for not helping them, and so she naturally became angry too. When Evelyn was 4, they brought her mother back dead because of wolves. Since then, she has been scared of wolves. She had to live with her rough and iggnorant father. He abused her, so she ran away. She ran into the forest, and discoveered she had a talent for growng things. She went to another village and realized it was magic. She was generous and helpfu at firsst with her magic, but then people started abusing her talent. She stopped doing it for people, and became consumed with the desire to get more powerful. Now, she is cruel because of how she was treated.
  7. 4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
  8. She works in anunderground tunnel system made by the king and queen during a war.
  9. 5. What is the villain’s goal?
  10. The villain's goal is to become all powerful and show others what she went through.
  11. 6. Attitude toward hero
  12. She realizes the hero may be a threat, and is in the way of her suceeding. She wants to get rid of them quickly.
  13. 7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
  14. She doesn't care about risking the safety of other people for herself, and has magic abilities.
  15. 8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
  16. She is desperatly afraid of wolves, and has a strong sense of pride.
  17. 9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
  18. The main character is in the way of her succeding.
  19. 10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)
  20.    Evelyn looked at the dead child with distaste.
  21.     "Pity," she said. "If you hadn't put up a struggle, you'd still be alive." She took out a knife from her dress and slashed the vines smothering the child. 
  22.     She walked over to her table and began experimenting. This was her pleasure. She took her dried ingredients, basil, nightshade, rose petals, and cinnamon bark. She put in equal qualities of everything but the nightshade. She put twice as much of that than anything else. She put them all in a mixture of hot water and sugar, and came out with a poisen so deadly one drop would kill fifty people.
  23.     Evelyn walked over to her other table and poured the liquid into a vial. She smiled as she put on her cloak. A cruel, nasty smile. Adding her vial of poison to her bag of goods, she headed out to market.
  24.     "Potions to make you richer or happy!" she cried in a low voice. "Potions for prosperity and love!" When a line formed she took to putting the coins she was getting in her satchel and moving her location.
  25.     "Use that before bed tonight, and you will find its effect by morning." Who cared about a little twist on the truth. The effect would come by morning. She smiled her grim, icy smile. By morning, they would be dead.
submitted by S.E., age 11, My Lair
(June 29, 2014 - 7:01 am)


1. Name: Estrella


2. Physical appearance:


Before she cursed the hero she was the most beautiful woman in the
land. She had straight black hair that she wore in a complicated up do on her
head. Her skin was pale and her eyes were a bright green. The dresses that she
wore were mostly in dark colors such as navy blue and deep purple. She always
wore her black cape pinned around her shoulders with a golden brooch. After she
cursed the hero she was transformed into a hag with a long warty nose, ragged
tatters of clothing, and a hunchback.


3. Background:


When our hero was only a baby, Estrella put a curse on him/her.
However, what she didn’t know was that in doing so she would turn herself into
an old, ugly hag. Desperate, she went to the ends of the earth to find the cure
for her ugliness. Finally she found the answer in the ancient scrolls, the cure
was to track down the baby she had cursed years ago and kill him/her to restore
her beauty.


4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?):


Estrella lives in an enormous castle in the hills on the outskirts
of the city where our hero lives. This castle used to belong to the king, but
Estrella thought it would suit her purposes so she took it over and there
wasn't very much anyone could do about it.


5. What is the villain’s goal?:


Estrella's goal is to kill the hero. If she kills the hero
then she will be returned to her former beautiful state.


6. Attitude toward hero:


Estrella doesn’t really know the hero, she just views him/her as something
standing in the way of her beauty.


7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?:


Estrella is stronger than the hero because she is a powerful
sorceress with millions of spells at her disposal.


8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?:


When Estrella cursed the hero she accidentally gave him/her some
sort of power that she can’t control.


9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with
each other?: Because Estrella cursed the hero but if Estrella kills the hero
she will be beautiful again.


10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s):


Estrella woke with a yawn and looked into the mirror and expected
to see her flawless smooth skin, but instead she saw the face of an old hag. Right,
that stupid curse. Estrella had searched through every ancient scroll and every
book of spells she had. But then it hit her, the one scroll she had not
searched through, The Scroll of Darkness. It contained thousands of forbidden
spells and remedies for curses. Estrella pored over the pages for hours, trying
desperately to find the solution to her predicament. Finally, there it was, Side
Affect Ugliness: To be restored to their former self any witch or wizard who has become ugly because of
a spell they cast must find the person they put the spell on and kill them.
Ahh, thought Estrella, I must kill her.


submitted by Watermelon
(June 29, 2014 - 1:19 pm)


Name


King Tarquin


 


Physical appearance


Long, bright red hair.  Smoky gray eyes.  A large mustache and long beard.  20 years old. 
Wears regal, fancy clothes.


 


Background


He killed his father, King Reginald, so that
he could be king.  Then, he framed an elf
named Sandev.  Sandev was executed.  To perpetuate his lies, King Tarquin ordered
that all elves be killed.  But now, four
years later, he is even crazier and more power-hungry.  King Tarquin has started to truly believe
that an elf killed his father and that all elves are evil and must be killed.


 


Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)


His castle.


 


What is the villain’s goal?


To kill all the elves in his kingdom, and
thereby “avenge” his father’s murder.


 


Attitude toward hero


Just someone in the way.


 


How is the villain stronger than the hero?


He has an entire kingdom of people under his
control that will do anything he says.


 


How is the villain weak or vulnerable?


King Tarquin is nuts, plus he is irrational
and he underestimates the hero.


 


Why are the main character and the villain in
conflict with each other?


The hero doesn’t want all the elves to be
killed, and King Tarquin does.  And now
King Tarquin wants to kill the hero, as well.


 


Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)


My royal carriage pulled up to a fairly
average-looking house, but one of my spies had told me that an elf was living there.  The spy pretended to be a man willing to
harbor elves, but, really, he was working for me.


I marched up to the house with two soldiers
and rapped smartly on the door.  Another
elf would soon be dead.  I would be one
step closer to avenging my father’s murder! 
My spy opened the door.


“In there,” he whispered, pointing to a
closet off the main room of the cottage. 
I smiled.


“Do your work, boys.”  The soldiers strode across the room and one
of them tried the doorknob of the closet, but it was locked.  The other soldier kicked it, hard, and I
heard the wonderful sound of a lock breaking. 
One soldier swung the door open. 
I stepped forward to watch.  This
was going to be fun!


A terrified young elf was huddling at the
back of the closet.


“D-don’t hurt me, please, I’m just a child,”
he stuttered.  “I—“


But he was cut off as the soldiers
simultaneously ran him through with their swords.


I cackled triumphantly.


submitted by Bounty, age 12, Crowd Sorcery
(June 29, 2014 - 6:36 pm)

1. Name

Mara  Aylmer

2. Physical appearance 

Mara looks like an ordinary child: short, looking to be about seven or eight years in age, big, shining eyes, and a permanent scowl 

3. Background

Mara had a heart disease at a young age--a heart disease that threatened to kill her. Mara’s parents had limited options and could not bear to have their child die. A surgery was performed and Mara was given a clockwork heart. At first, all seemed good, but then Mara's parents noticed something. No matter how much time pasted, Mara never got older. Thinking it was just an odd suspicion, and their daughter had surely just not yet hit her growth spur.... At 15 years of age, still looking 7... Mara was not suspicious of anything, but rather agreed with her parents. Of course she hadn't hit their growth spur yet. It was obvious. 

Mara and her parents were merely traveling when it happened. When the police stopped their car, telling them of an "Unauthorized Machine." They insisted it wasn't their daughter, because it simply couldn't be--but the police disagreed. The police took Mara away from her parents without further arguing. They had a doctor examine Mara, and sure enough, they found her clockwork heart. For this reason, she surely couldn’t actually be human, they though. She was nothing more than a machine. So she was thrown in the place all unauthorized machines go: the rubbish mound. 

4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)

Mara was able to set up a home of her own in the rubbish mound, using broken old machines that couldn’t work anymore, and creating her own machines out of scraps to build and army. 

5. What is the villain’s goal?

Mara’s goal is to use her mechanical army she is building up in the rubbish mound to take over the city and its people who have wronged her and start an new age: an age where machines rule and ordinary humans are considered useless.

6. Attitude toward hero

Bitter and hostile, as she is towards all humans. Still, she wonders, if she was born with a healthier heart, that she could’ve been friends with the hero. She could’ve been friends with everybody. Each time she thinks this, she shakes her head. Too late for that.

7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?

In accord to her clockwork heart, Mara cannot feel love or happiness. Only anger, misery, and the urge to destroy. When others might pause because of loved ones or sympathy, Mara charges forth. Only feeling the terrible emotions has lead her to believe it’s the only way: the last time she felt love was when she was a mere baby, and Mara doesn’t dare remember that time. Instead she is able to battle, to strategize, with no emotions in her head except for hurt, pain, and revenge. Her army of machines is even more emotionless than herself, without even thoughts of revenge but rather thoughts of obeying Mara’s command.

8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?

Amongst her feelings of hatred and malice, there is a feeling of hope, because hope does not come from the heart, but from the will of the being themselves. Mara hopes that she can meet the doctor, or whoever performed the surgery on her, to help her change it back. To replace her clockwork heart with a real one, even if it means she will die in a matter of minutes. The hope, that is clogged up and overshadowed by her other feelings, is hard to find. Mara doesn’t believe it’s there, but it’s there. 

She is also extremely sensitive about her clockwork heart, and prefers picking fights than explaining that she’s a little different.

9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?

After living undercover as a small child in the big city for just a couple of weeks, Mara’s preparations were complete. Everywhere she goes, she keeps bumping into the hero, though! The hero, who really believes she’s just a seven year old girl. The hero, who keeps trying to help her. The hero, who is the only thing standing between her and her army at the rubbish mound. The hero, who can’t just let her wander away because she might get lost or hurt or feel scared and alone. Mara, who feels hurt and scared and alone all the time. Mara, who just wants to get away from the hero and get to her army of machines, to show the hero who she really is. 

10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)

Mara paced down the street, her hand buried in her tiny pockets, a menacing frown upon her face. She bumped into somebody.

“Outta my way,” she growled. The human stepped aside, looking confused and worried. Humans. Pfft. Humans would learn to respect her in time. To respect her and every “machine” they’d ever mistreated.

One of the worst things about being in the body of a seven year old was that everyone on the sidewalk seemed to ignore you. Ran into you, trampled you, and didn’t even notice.

“Get outta the—“ she started but no one hear her. Pushed, shoved, thrown around, Mara found herself in an alleyway slightly off the street, all scratched up and bruised. She glowered unhappily, but no one on the street noticed. That was fine. They’d stop pushing her soon. Everything was ready. All she had to do was go to the rubbish mound and get her army—

“Are you okay?” someone asked. She looked around. They weren’t asking her, were they? “Little girl? Are you okay?”

They were asking her.

“I’m fine,” she growled, trying to push her way back into the street.

Whoever was concerned about her was holding her back by the collar of her shirt. 

“What’d ya want?” she frowned.

“I just want to make sure you’re okay! You seemed hurt!”

Mara looked up to see what sort of idiot human was trying to help her, looking into the eyes of the person who would be her biggest obstacle for the next week. 

submitted by Theo W., Dark, Dreary Places
(June 30, 2014 - 10:04 am)

When are we going to vote for villians?

submitted by Watermelon
(July 1, 2014 - 9:46 am)

      Tantibus looks younger than 200, and speaks with a Shakespearian accent, Using
thy's and thou's and such. He works for a master never truly revealed, and
hates when his plans fail. His species is homolupus, which means he has wolf
features. He wears a light grey shirt from a deer's pelt, and leather pants.
His hair is long and grey. He has wolf ears sticking out of the top of his
head, and sharp black fangs. He can turn to black smog whenever he feels
threatened. This does not mean he is a coward though, he will fight for days in
the sake of his master. He thinks the hero is a weak fool that is as easy to
smash as a small insect. He finds himself powerful, and once commented he was
stronger than Master. Tantibus also is kind of proud. He never excepts help and
works solo. He has an advantage against hero, with his smart and clever way,
thinking outside the box. The light kills him, or badly hurts him, though.                                                                              Sentences
for Tantibus: The homolupus paused. He heard the sound of running feet, those
of a human. He snarled at the word and pulled out his sword, dripping with the black
blood of a monster. He silently made his way to the cart, thinking of how nice
a poem would be about his master.

submitted by Tantibus, age about 200, The shadow lands
(July 1, 2014 - 9:59 am)

      Tantibus looks younger than 200, and speaks with a Shakespearian accent, Using
thy's and thou's and such. He works for a master never truly revealed, and
hates when his plans fail. His species is homolupus, which means he has wolf
features. He wears a light grey shirt from a deer's pelt, and leather pants.
His hair is long and grey. He has wolf ears sticking out of the top of his
head, and sharp black fangs. He can turn to black smog whenever he feels
threatened. This does not mean he is a coward though, he will fight for days in
the sake of his master. He thinks the hero is a weak fool that is as easy to
smash as a small insect. He finds himself powerful, and once commented he was
stronger than Master. Tantibus also is kind of proud. He never excepts help and
works solo. He has an advantage against hero, with his smart and clever way,
thinking outside the box. The light kills him, or badly hurts him, though.                                                                              Sentences
for Tantibus: The homolupus paused. He heard the sound of running feet, those
of a human. He snarled at the word and pulled out his sword, dripping with the black
blood of a monster. He silently made his way to the cart, thinking of how nice
a poem would be about his master.

submitted by Lydia Gottshall, age 12, Altoona Pennsylvania
(July 1, 2014 - 10:15 am)

Erp... Sorry I submitted that twice...

submitted by Lydia G., age 12, Altoona Pennsylvania
(July 1, 2014 - 4:27 pm)

Name: Athra

She is an aging woman, who is not-so-threatening. There are bags under her gray eyes, and slashes of gray in her jet black hair. She also has a scar on her hand. 

Attitude: She has usually been strong and caring, like a second mother, towards the main character. However, underneath that kind layer, there's cruelty, agression, and wicked and she's the leader of the Hellfires, a group of dangerous people who are responsible for killing thousands of men women and children. All they want is for others to suffer.

Strength: Though aging, Athra is a powerful swordperson who can kill a person in one stroke. She is also highly strategic, and will meticulously organize a siege on the main character's home.

Weakness: She is aging and the scar is a connecton to her other Hellfire members, for if one of them is killed or injured, she feels thei pain or starts to die with them.

Sample: Athra eyed *hero's name* and crept out of the hedges. She slashed at him/her, as he/she screamed"AAHHNNGHH!" and staggered around for a bit and collapsed.

Athra smiled. 'A job well done,' she thought.'No with that pesky brat *main character's name* out of the way, Hellfire will finally be invincible.'

But *character's name* had miraculously survived. Athra was wrong.

submitted by Iliana S., age 10, NYC
(July 1, 2014 - 6:16 pm)

1. Conor Band (when doing evil he calls himself Echo)

2. Sandy Blond hair, blue-green eyes, tall, only wears T-shirts with designs or slogans, and wears the same pair of jeans over and over that give him his powers.

3. Conor was an orphan who was brought in by a mad scientist who made him invulnerable. Later, a rebel wizard puts his invulnerability into his jeans. The wizard doesn't know that he gave his powers into the jeans, though, and Conor can now use sound magic and create a swirling invulnerable forcefield in any shape.

4. Conor borrowed magic to make a forest hideout covered by an invisible forcefield. His hideout is in a planet that he rules.

5. Conor's goal is to encase all other magicians in a shield of magic and suck their powers into himself to make the most powerful wizard ever, as told in a prophecy, that can destroy the whole world.

6. Conor draws the hero in and hypnotizes him (or her) to help get the magic. The hero escapes and Conor traps the hero in a shield cage...

7. Conor has more magic than the hero.

8. Conor believes that the hero is weak and neglects to see that the hero has a greater power.

9. The hero is living in a nearer planet full of magic, and is popular there. Conor captures them when one of Conor's henchmen drains their powers slowly.

10. "And look who we have here," the scientist began.

Conor gulped a, "Y-yes?"

"How about you come with me. You have power in your future, yes. Lots," hissed the stranger.

Conor felt excited and quickly followed the Frenchman out of the room...                                                                                                                                                                                                                                            

submitted by Anneliese H., age 10, Wauwatosa,WI
(July 1, 2014 - 7:55 pm)

Name: James Watson, though everyone calls him Vortex.

Physical appearance: Vortex is tall, has black hair and goatee, and wears white robes.

Background: Since day one, Vortex has been taught that humanity is beneath him, and since then has been trying to dominate the planet.

Lair: A huge castle in the middle of nowhere.

What is the villain's goal? To dominate earth.

Attitude towards hero: Vortex thinks Errin is pathetic and he is his worst enemy. 

How is the villain stronger than the hero? Vortex has mastered air magic and is more practiced in sorcery than Errin is.

How is the villain weak or vulnerable? Vortex tends to sorely underestimate his opponents.

Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other? Vortex is bent on taking over the world, but Errin knows that would be disastrous and is trying to stop him.

Vortex faced his opponent, a professional sorcerer like himself, except trained more with fire magic. They called him the Blacksmith. Blacksmith took the first move. Red-hot flames blasted from his palms at Vortex, he dodged, and then shot a tiny tornado at his nemesis. The Blacksmith countered with flame-shield. Vortex smiled.

"What an amateur," he thought. He clapped his hands together, spoke a spell, and created a large windstorm that blasted towards Blacksmith at an alarming speed. Blacksmith tried to counter it again but the windstorm was too strong. It tore through his miserable shield and blasted Blacksmith into a wall, completely blacked out. Vortex had won the battle barely trying.

 

 

 

 

 

submitted by Will T., age 14, Georgia
(July 1, 2014 - 9:04 pm)

BTW Fable was chosen as the hero.

submitted by Brooke E., age 11, Arkansas
(July 2, 2014 - 9:57 am)
  1. 1. Name
  2. Scorpius Spellhatcher
  3. 2. Physical appearance
  4. He has a grim appearance. It doesn't matter to him what he looks like. He has thick brown hair with gray eyes.
  5. 3. Background
  6. He doesn't have a backround. He can't remember anything about is past.
  7. 4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
  8. He works as the advisor to the king, so he works in a high tech lab in the castle.
  9. 5. What is the villain’s goal?
  10. To elliminate Fable Hatcher.
  11. 6. Attitude toward hero
  12. Merciless.
  13. 7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
  14. Scorpius has more tools and strenghth and power.
  15. 8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
  16. They will do anything to find out something about their past.
  17. 9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
  18. Fable accidently wrote something that hurt him in some way.
  19. 10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)
  20. Staring back at him was his reflaction. It was everywhere. In pictures, in the mirror, in the well...
  21. "Who am I?" he said to himself, "Where do I belong?"
submitted by S.E.
(July 2, 2014 - 8:27 am)