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One of the most effective ways to be sure a story will have conflict that keeps readers breathlessly turning pages is to introduce a villain—someone whose goals collide head-on with the main character’s goals. We fantasy readers can all think of unforgettable villains from our favorite stories, those scary or relentless opponents that make life so difficult for the hero or heroine.
Villains need more than special magical powers to become so memorable that they haunt our imaginations; they also need as much personality and feeling as the hero. In actual life, almost no one ever sets out to become a villain. Perhaps your villain is desperate to protect her homeland, or family, or dragon. Perhaps the villain’s very life is at stake. There must always be a why, a solid reason behind the evil the villain does so that it makes sense—at least to him or her.
Usually the plot will unfold if you can figure out the relationship of the villain to the main character and what the villain wants. For instance, in thinking about Quill, my heroine who comes out only in moonlight, I might wonder who cast the original spell on her grandmother and why. I’ll imagine it was a monstrous spirit-witch, Gershardt, who lives in a cavern beneath a pool in the forest. Gershardt’s spells can steal someone’s daytime essence, enabling her to take on a human form, leave the pool, and walk about in the world of mortals. But her spell fades over time so she is trying to steal Quill’s nighttime essence, too—although that would make Quill vanish forever.
In my example the stakes are high: the villain wants to continue living in the physical world, and so does the main character—whichever of them loses will disappear!
I might write for my Crowd Sorcery Sentences: “Gnarled hands rose from the water and gripped a tree root, followed by bony arms and a streaming tangle of white hair. Old Gershardt crept from the pool and stood dripping and frosty in the moonlight, blinking into the shadows with her pale blue eyes, chuckling through her toothless mouth.”
When I write, I try to keep in mind that, from the villain’s point of view, he or she is the true main character of the story, and it is the hero or heroine that is in the way.
- 1. Name
- 2. Physical appearance
- 3. Background
- 4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
- 5. What is the villain’s goal?
- 6. Attitude toward hero
- 7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
- 8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
- 9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
- 10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)
submitted by Fred Durbin
(April 23, 2014 - 11:54 am)
(April 23, 2014 - 11:54 am)
I love that movie!!!
(July 11, 2014 - 10:30 am)
Same here! Maybe she's Inigo's daughter.
(November 4, 2014 - 4:48 pm)
1. Nyeth
2. About 12 years old, long black wavy hair, pale skin. She wears a knee-length raggedy black dress with a high collered black snake skin cape with streaks of dark purple running through it. Her shoes are boots made of the same purple streaks on black background snakeskin.
3. At the age of 4 years old, her father, the town drunk, sells her and her brother to a evil farmer, She and her brother get separated and never see him again. She becomes attacthed to a boy her age named Smith. A few years later at the age of 8, Smith runs away, after promising to come back for her. Two years later a new king comes to the throne and makes an inspector inspect every farm. The king then frees the children on the farm, including Nyeth. As she walks into the nearest town, Sorrol, she sees Smith walking along the dirt street holding hands with a girl named Silver Laurel. She flies into a rage, even as Smith tries to explain and vows to hunt down anyone related to him. Before she can kill him though, he kills himself. One day she finds out he has a sister in a faraway village that was adopted when the parents died, instead of being sold, like Smith. Nyeth makes it her business to hunt the girl.
4. An abandoned castle ruins in the woods of Treacherous Deep, near the poor village of Tillin.
5. The goal for Nyeth is to kill Smith's sister, so she can finally feel the thrill of killing the betrayer.
6. Her attitude toward Fable is that she must kill her to make up for the betrayal of her brother.
7. Nyeth is strong because while she was a worker on the farm the only thing to hold on to was the hope that Smith would come back, and his betrayal was a cold, hard, shock, so she hunts his sister with a vengeance equal to a mad woman.
8. She is made vulnerable when a young girl (from 4 to 8) is present, she will do anything for them, whether it is to bring back her mother, or give her a piece of candy.
9. They are in conflict with each other because the girl's brother betrayed her when she was young.
10. The girl had slipped out of her grasp once more. But soon she would have her. The trap had already been set. All she had to do now was wait.
(July 4, 2014 - 5:06 pm)
Name: Shardelmun
Appereance: burned and melted
Background: he was in a fire when he was young. His parents left him and he was treated cruely by the harsh life he had on the streets.
Lair: He lives in an empty prison cell in the dungeon of the castle. Nobody ever came down there after all the deaths that had happened.
Villian's Goal: To give the happy people of the city a chance to feel his pain... and destroy happiness.
Additide Toward Hero: The villian despises the hero. The first person he wants to make suffer is the hero.
How is Villian Stronger: He is immensly strong. He could lift a barel of weights with one bare hand.
How is Villian Weak: He has those horrible memories that have haunted him forever.
Why in Conflict: Because when the villian was a young boy wandering the streets, the hero had seen him and run from his hideous face.
Sentences: He was ridding the world of happiness. He lifted the heavy ax about his head. The little girl stared into his hungry eyes and screamed. He shouted back. He had the eyes of a killer.
(July 5, 2014 - 7:02 am)
Name: Invincent Jenteal
Physical Apperance: Though most can't see it because Invincent is invisible, he has mysterious dark blue eyes and black hair with specs of grey.
Background: Invincent was a nice guy who gave out candy until Fable's father, Brandal Thatcher, hypnotized him with his starry, other-worldly green eyes to tell his deepest, darkest secret: that Invincent was a Crov, a being that can turn anything invisible.
Lair: An invisible black house that used to be cream-colored, surrounded by a haunted forest.
Villian's goal: To get rid of Fable Thatcher, so she doesn't do what her father did. He gives paper and a pen to her when she is small, hoping that they will distact her. But Invincent doesn't know they are magical.
Attitude toward hero: Invincent doesn't like Fable Thatcher because she is Brandal Thatcher's daughter.
How villian is stronger than hero: He can make anything invisible, making it easier to make surprise attack. He is also older and a little wiser.
How villian is weak or vulnerable: Fable can hypnotize Invincent with her eyes. She can also write something horrible to happen for him.
Why main character and villian are in conflict: Invicent is getting revenge for what Fable's dad did.
Crowd Sorcery Sentences: "Invincent had always hated children. Well, not always. It was that rotten Brandal Thatcher that had gotten that started. He would be just fine with the boy if he hadn't made him tell all the girls and boys he could turn anything invisible. That was why Invicent had sent the boy and his wife on a wild goose chase into his forest. He really should have sent that child of theirs in there, too. Then he wouldn't have to get rid of her, for she would have been gone, like her parents. Today was the day he fixed that mistake."
(July 5, 2014 - 10:00 am)
(July 5, 2014 - 11:46 am)
Hello, guys! I am very in love with this crowd sorcery stuff, so I have been posting lots in it. This is my villian, who wants to get hold of the girl who might make all his dreams come true. (or nightmares, as these dreams aren't very nice).
1. Sheafaga Buco (But he likes to be called "The one who can destroy with paper and pen")
2. He has jet black hair (Love jet black hair :D) and a snake like apperance in his face. (much like you-know-who) His eyes are wide and deady, but are not so bad compared to his crooked claws.
3. He is a wizard, but a horrible experiment made his pet snake combine with himself, creating his ugly appearances and evil dreams. He used to be good, but the snake messed with his brain, trapping his good in a compact space outside his heart.
4. Yes, you might want it to be a black castle on the highest mountain, but really he lives in a small cave. But to make it more creeper, he put giant thorns around it and monsters like three headed dogs to protect his home.
5. Like most villians, to rule the world. Not very creative, is it? But he plans to do it with pen and paper.
6. Fable is the answer to his dreams of power and royality. Fable is the only one who can change the future with, well, pen and paper. You can see why he likes to call himself "The one who can destroy with paper and pen".
7. Well, it is mostly the snake that makes him powerful. It controls him, making him do stuff he would never do when he was good. So, blame the snake, who was smart enough to get in the way of the experiment so he could rule the world.
8. He sometimes can feel sorry for people, as he still can be good. (remember the compact space outside of his heart?) The snake also really wants to rule the world, and will do some stuff you would think of as not smart.
9. Because the villian wants her, and will make sure he does all his wizardy stuff to make her come here. Fable does it because she wants to get the money so she can help herself with living.
10.
A spider crawls on it's web, enjoying it's happy meal of a sad little fly. Suddenly, the spider is grabbed and dropped into a acid like liquid. Sheafaga Buco is the owner of this hand. He smiles happily as the spider screams and wiggles in the cauldron. "Now, this stuff with soon get me closer to that girl, that pen and paper, and that dream that I dream of." He stirs the acid once more, humming "It's a small world" to himself.
(July 5, 2014 - 12:11 pm)
Name:
Callia Nightstar
Appearance:
Long, flowing back hair that cascades down her back, a very fair complexion,
and radiant green eyes that seem to pierce the night, she is also very tall.
She is young, but her hands are weathered and she is often the victim of
fatigue.
Background:Once
a care-free maiden filled with great power and a vivid imagination, Callia
Nightstar was a sensation in the quaint village of Anarak. She would perform
spells for little village-children and would conjure potions for the aging or
ailing. One fateful day, she was performing her legendary “CloudSwirling” spell
when something went horribly wrong! Her powers faltered and the clouds that she
once controlled, raged into a horrifying twister. The sky turned ashen, with a
radiant green ribbon. The twister destroyed much of Anarak, and Callia was
banished into the hills. After months of unsuccessfully casting spells, she
realized she was losing her powers. She needed the help of someone talented,
someone like Fable Thatcher!
Lair: Cave in the Hills of Horror
and Hodmoth (Hodmoth being a creature known to haunt the homes of many in the
valley)
Goal: The
villain's goal is to use Fable Thatcher's power (greedily) to regain her lost
powers and avenge herself by gaining control of many poor, innocent souls.
Attitude toward Heroine:Callia
feels that Fable is integral to her plan.
How is Callia stronger than Fable: Callia
is stronger than Fable, because she has more experience with powers and magic
and she uses Fable's powers to her advantage by advertising a competition for
aspiring young authors which attracts Fable and her magic. She then designs the
contest in a way that allows Fable to write a story about Callia, ending with Callia
getting her powers restored.
How is she weaker than Fable: The
villain is weak and vulnerable though because she is caught up in her greed and
underestimates Fable’s mind, for fable soon finds out what their “Contest Judge”
is up to.
How are they in conflict: Fable
confronts her, attempting to stop Callia, and they have a huge battle in which
Callia has the upper hand, but ultimately Fable prevails.
Crowd-Sorcery Sentences: "Callia Nightstar was an outcast, lost and confused. She needed the help of someone. Someone like Fable Thatcher..."
(July 5, 2014 - 2:59 pm)
Hope you like it! ;)
1. Name:
Khala Evorsca, Queen of Faeries (not Fairies)
2. Physical Appearance:
Tall, thin, and very pale (her skin is almost translucent), with a flowing sheet of blonde hair falling to her hips. Very, very, very light green eyes that are almost white. Her face has an almost carved quality, eerily flawless. While she might once have been very beautiful, now her long nose is always seen wrinkled in hatred, complexion distorted by a wild emotion none would recognize on her: Fear. Lips are thin and pale, almost disappearing into her face. Her ears are elongated and pointed at the tops, like an Elf's. She wears long dresses made out of a thin, silky material in low, smoky colors. She has wings, and even though they are useless to her (she can’t fly with them) they’re breathtakingly beautiful, a stained glass collage of icy pastel colors; blue, purple, pink, green, periwinkle, and white.
3. Background:
Khala was born with special powers that were beyond anyone's ability to control or stop, including herself. She was born with the power to change memories. She can wipe the person completely clean of the memory, back to the clean slate it was before, mercifully (or painfully) blank, or she can alter it. Incite fear in peaceful memories; make people fear a certain place, person, object, time, or even idea. She also has the ability place tranquility or peace in a memory, calming a worry, a fear, or a stressful idea. She can even place or remove love in certain memories, one of the most powerful and dangerous forces to reckon with. Shortly after she was born, a war was started between Faeries and the Humans. On her 13th birthday, Human soldiers forced their way into her parent's castle and killed Khala's parents and sister. Traumatized, scared, and angry, Khala cast her power over all of Humanity, removing all Human's love for anything. Humans could no longer love, and had no memory of how to. But Khala, unable to control her anger, accidentally cleared every Human's memory of the war. Scared about what she had done, she fled Faerie land. Since then, she has worked hard to make the Humans pay for what they had done, but as no living Human had any recollection of what they had done, she was seen as mad, executing and murdering innocent people unprovoked, with no thought or shame.
4. Lair:
Cold stone castle in the middle of an old, mossy forest overgrown with vines.
5. What is the villain’s goal? :
To make Humans pay for what they did to her people, especially her parents and sister. However, she is not aware of what the Faeries did to the Humans during the war. In her mind, she has no cause to find out, because none of the Humans can remember it.
6. Attitude toward hero:
Angry, spiteful, hateful, fearful, and curious because the hero can love, and she is a Human. Khala cannot understand why the hero has the ability to love, and is frightened of it. But she also wonders; if this Human can love when I erased that memory, can she remember the war? Can she remember what she did to my people?
7. How is the villain stronger than the hero? :
As Khala is the last living descendant of the Faerie royalty line, she is the Queen of Faeries. An ancient Faerie law states that the Queen is the only one with the power to change her surroundings, for security reasons. This makes Khala very hard to track down. She also has a tendency to do and then think, which can be very dangerous, combined with the fact that, as previously mentioned, she can change memories.
8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable? :
She operates alone, and is secretly afraid of what she cannot understand. Her tendency to do and then think is one of her weaknesses, as well.
9. Why are the main character and villain in conflict with each other? :
The main character is Human, and Khala wants to return the “favor” of them (the Humans) destroying half of the Faerie race.
10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s):
Khala paced the echoing halls of her ancient castle impatiently, her silken slippers whispering softly against the cold, hard, unyielding stone floor.
Suddenly, randomly, a white, innocent, cottonwood seed memory floated through her mind. Of Kaitlyn. Sweet, pure, beautiful little Kaitlyn. She was running through the wide open, airy halls of her parent’s old castle. The windows were open, rayon curtains fluttering in the breeze, the sweet perfume of lilacs drifting through the place. Kaitlyn was laughing as she tried to run backwards, away from Khala but always watching her, trying to be more like her. Her little feet were dancing around in those silken slippers, making the exact same whispering sound Khala’s were now…
Khala stopped dead. Crying was no use, crying would not bring Kaitlyn back, would not bring her parents back. Crying would not help her avenge their deaths. It had been 14 years since she had last cried. Crying was no use, crying was no use, crying was no use. And yet as Khala was thinking this, she felt the salty teardrops pooled in her eyes give way…
Positively disgusted with herself, Khala managed to pull herself together and resumed her pacing of the deserted hallways.
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(July 5, 2014 - 4:49 pm)
1. Dream
2. Slender, fair skin, blue eyes that seem to see into you, she is beautiful beyond compare.
3. Was born with the power to feel what the person wants most. She can project their desires, change their feelings, change they desires. People came to her wanting her to heel broken hearts, and grant their wishes. Dream became flustered, and ran away from her home. When she returned she found another (Fable) like her was born. Dream turned dark, after going through so much herself, she knew what Fable would feel. She took Fable away.
4. A basement.
5. To find Fable (Dream lost her.) and change her completely.
6. Pittys her. But at the same time slightly jealous.
7. Has more experience, and has more control over her gift.
8. Feels rejected, and is afraid people might demand to use her gift.
9. Dream wants to change everything about Fable, and Fable wants to find herself and where she came from.
10. Dream fingers fluttered, an orb of light apeared in her hand, "This is your future, they don't love you, they never will. Please," Dream pleaded, "aviod this pain."
(July 5, 2014 - 6:48 pm)
Please excuse number 10. where I didn't capitalize "dream". I'm so busy, I was just working on completing it. Thanks.
E.M.I.L.Y.
I fixed it for you, Emily. If you ask, we can usually go in and edit a comment.
Admin
(July 5, 2014 - 8:06 pm)
Maihl (MAIL)
He has spiky yello hair and pale white skin, his eyes are a startling iridescent blue, he has thin almost unnoticeable cuffs around his wrists.
Maihl is not actually a villan he was captured by a greater evil when he was young. This darker shadow fitted him with magic cuffs that soon dug into his arms and preventing them from being removed. With the cuffs attached to him Maihl is the eyes and ears for the hidden enemy, he makes friends with the heroine - who he may sort of have a crush on - and her friends puting them in danger even though he doesn't realize it.
He really is a good guy he just is being controlled against his will.
He is afraid that someone will discover his curse and avoid him.
The cuffs also give him enhanced magic powers more powerfull than most mages.
(July 5, 2014 - 7:16 pm)
Forgot to mention the shadowy demon can randomly enter his mind, take control and make him do something against his will.
(July 6, 2014 - 7:37 am)
1. Everent (most call him Scribbler)
2. Grey hair, grey eyes, frail body.
3. Was the historian, and still keeps old scrolls and books. He has been around for a long time and has seen many things, yet one thing has yet to show itself.
4. Library.
5. To help see either the end or the begining of the prophecy. And fulfill his.
6. Needs to destroy hero in order to fulfill his prophecy.
7. He is wise, and knows alot of things that others don't. He can remember every prophecy ever made or that are going to be made.
8. He doesn't have alot of power and is very old and frail.
9. He wants to destory hero, (I can see why they don't get along.) But other than that, Fable has heard a different prophecy then Scribbler, and they can't agree on which is correct.
10. Scribbler looked at the young lady before him, it was her. He knew it, and he was never wrong. Scribbler sliped into his study and took out the sharp dagger. He made his way towards Fable, concealing his deadly weapon.
(July 5, 2014 - 7:54 pm)
Yrntaer (YEARN-tare)
He (somewhat like Fable) has the ability to make whatever he DRAWS come to life.
He lived in the slums of the city where Fable lived. His mother died at childbirth and his father abandoned him when he was eight years old he learned how to beg for food how to make money and pick pockets. Once when he was attempting to swipe some food from an inn, Fable -who had writen about this earlier- saw him and ratted him out. He was then taken to prison an confined for theivery.
He has shaggy black almost dark blue hair and ragged clothes.
He always carries a pencil with him.
CSS: One wouldn't think he belonged in jail, he was only ten years old. The inside of his cell was covered in half finished drawings. He stood in one corner scribling furiosly on a wall adding the last details to a thick arm with rippling muscles and a harsd calaused fist. He stood back and admired his work as the wall began to ripple.
The night exploded as the prison wall was blown open. Yrntaer grinned to himself as he added the edge to a pair of dragon wings. The prison guards rounded the corner in pusuit, Yrntaer tyrned towards his servant he had drawn "Take care of them for me". He launched himself into the sky as an exuberant howl rolled from his lips. Now to find that GIRL!"
Dun dun duuuhhh!
(July 6, 2014 - 8:02 am)