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One of the most effective ways to be sure a story will have conflict that keeps readers breathlessly turning pages is to introduce a villain—someone whose goals collide head-on with the main character’s goals. We fantasy readers can all think of unforgettable villains from our favorite stories, those scary or relentless opponents that make life so difficult for the hero or heroine.
Villains need more than special magical powers to become so memorable that they haunt our imaginations; they also need as much personality and feeling as the hero. In actual life, almost no one ever sets out to become a villain. Perhaps your villain is desperate to protect her homeland, or family, or dragon. Perhaps the villain’s very life is at stake. There must always be a why, a solid reason behind the evil the villain does so that it makes sense—at least to him or her.
Usually the plot will unfold if you can figure out the relationship of the villain to the main character and what the villain wants. For instance, in thinking about Quill, my heroine who comes out only in moonlight, I might wonder who cast the original spell on her grandmother and why. I’ll imagine it was a monstrous spirit-witch, Gershardt, who lives in a cavern beneath a pool in the forest. Gershardt’s spells can steal someone’s daytime essence, enabling her to take on a human form, leave the pool, and walk about in the world of mortals. But her spell fades over time so she is trying to steal Quill’s nighttime essence, too—although that would make Quill vanish forever.
In my example the stakes are high: the villain wants to continue living in the physical world, and so does the main character—whichever of them loses will disappear!
I might write for my Crowd Sorcery Sentences: “Gnarled hands rose from the water and gripped a tree root, followed by bony arms and a streaming tangle of white hair. Old Gershardt crept from the pool and stood dripping and frosty in the moonlight, blinking into the shadows with her pale blue eyes, chuckling through her toothless mouth.”
When I write, I try to keep in mind that, from the villain’s point of view, he or she is the true main character of the story, and it is the hero or heroine that is in the way.
- 1. Name
- 2. Physical appearance
- 3. Background
- 4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
- 5. What is the villain’s goal?
- 6. Attitude toward hero
- 7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
- 8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
- 9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
- 10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)
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(April 23, 2014 - 11:54 am)
(April 23, 2014 - 11:54 am)
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1. Name
Mr. Daemonis
2. Physical appearance
Evil!
(Really, is black as the darkest night hair, flaming red eyes, a wicked grin across his face from his delighting in the havoc he causes, a vest that is a simply wicked color of purple, a green shirt that makes green the most sinful color in the universe, a pair of striped pants the color of black, which is ten times as dark that his hair. He can walk with or without detection, depends on what he wants to do. He can not because the clothes are magical, but he knows what to do with them.)(Oh! And he is tireless, fueled by the havoc and worry and sacredness, and the evil of the universe.)
3. Background
Satan sent him to assail Earth’s population, and so he came as a human. He lives for evil, and he knows he is doing evil! He is wicked in all get-outs. He was the personal advisor of Satan when he was in Hell.
4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
His lair is Hell, but on Earth it is the department store, where causes havoc which helps him think.
5. What is the villian’s goal?
To help his master Satan achieve his goal by causing as many havoc. His master’s goal is to before LORD God puts him in misery eternal to make as many people fall from God.
6. Attitude toward hero
Hatred since he opposes the Devil and himself in their schemes.
7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
He is tireless and he is evil. Evil crushes opposition extremely hard.
8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
God and good will eventually crush him. Resolute goodness makes him cringe and shrink away.
9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
Because the hero/heroine tries to rid the world of evil, but the villain wishes to rid the world of as much good as he can.
10. Your Crowd-Sorcery Sentence(s)
Daemonis stood before his master. “You called me, Master?” he inquired.
“Yes, Daemonis. I want you to go down to Earth to terrorize the people and to create havoc. Understand?” replied Satan.
An evil grin light up Daemonis’ face in reply.
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(May 23, 2014 - 1:58 pm)
Hooray! Evil people! I'm probably no good at them, but still!
Name: Nova Ashcraft
Physical Appearance: Long auburn brown hair, gold-brown eyes, and blue-ish tinted skin (like all elves have), and a bit taller than the regular elf.
Background: Nova is part elf, but her mother was Medusa. She has a single snake sprouting out of her hair that is hidden, and she can turn people to stone. She was taken in by a single female elf, but once they discovered her heritage, she was excluded from the elf city she resided in, and she ran away to be taken in by a hag, who taught her the secrets of witchcraft and alchemy, which she used for evil. Once she was discarded from the elven city, she was largely forgotten.
Lair: She lives underground under a forest, in a series of tunnels that connects her to the human, elven, and fae realms. There are also some rooms in the tunnels where she sleeps, eats, and makes evil schemes. She currently is passing nasty, fake messages to the fae and then back to the elves. She, in other words, is behind the war between the elf?/fae war, although nobody knows it.
Villain's Goal: She wants the elves and the fae to destroy each other, and if the humans join a side, that's even better for her. Once they are demolished, she will take over. If needed, she will help a bit more.
Attitude toward hero: Doesn't know who she is yet, but when she does, she will feel a bit bad for her, and will want her to join her.
How is the villain stronger than the hero?: She is very persuasive, and "doesn't need love". She is rather ruthless with people she doesn't know.
How is the villain weaker than the hero?: She keeps her friends close to her, and when something happens to them, she's very passionate about it, although she tries to hide it.
Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?: Asha wants to make peace, and Nova wants them to die.
Your Crowd Sorcery Sentences:
Left, right, forward, right, back. There. Down the ever-circling steps and into the hole. Down, down, down. I held my breath and stared down at the poison that was about to hit me and would distintigrate me on impact if I hit it. Timing was crucial for this. The poison turned to stone just before I hit it with bent knees. Still holding my breath, I hurried across the now slab of stine. Once safely into the stone corridor, I let out my breath. Instantly poison again. I ran to the very end of the hall into the room with the cauldron. My evil-making room.
(May 23, 2014 - 6:58 pm)
What are you talking about? You're wonderful at this! I've got some pretty good competition!
(July 5, 2014 - 3:05 pm)
Name: SoulEater
Physical appeareance: Bone white. Thats because all his appearence is is bones. He can expand his literaly indestructible sceleton and make it cover his skin, so it serves as armor. He is usualy driping with blood from his last kill.
Background: When he was born his parents, the king and queen, found out he was mutant. So he was sent out of the kingdom, and if he was seen in it, he was to be shot on sight. What happened next was really, really bad carma. He was found by trolls. They expiremented on him (painful!) to try and make him able to switch his soul to other people for years under poor condition. He started to hate everything and vowed to himself he would destroy anything that lived. After he became 15,though, the trolls gave up the expirementing. Just as they threw the axeat him to end his life, he switched his soul with another troll, so he lived. The expirements had not been a waste! After brutaly killing the king troll he became the king and prepared a battle against the world.
Lair: Moth Dolgur, the troll palace
Villain's Goal: Destroy all life forms.
Attitude Toward Hero: Doesn't know who it is, but when he does, he will hate him.
How is the villian stonger then the hero: Doesn't have feelings exept maybe hate:) Plus the fact that he is physicaly stronger!
How is the hero stronger then the villian: SoulEater is very conceited and thinks he is more powerful then anyone.
Why is the villian in conflict with the hero?: Simple hero wnts peace, SoulEater wants total destruction.
Your crowd Sorcery sentence: I fumed away from the meeting ready to explode from anger. The goblins made everything so complicated! All I want is revenge on the world! Can we please just go and fight?
" Is every thing all right?' My troll servant asked.
'' Does it look that way?" I asked in return as my punch landed and he sailed out the window.
Soon my tirst of blood would be quenched. Soon I woould conquer!
(September 8, 2014 - 6:04 pm)
Well, here goes....
Name: Lord Joffren Forn (King Forn)
Physical Appearance: Tall, black hair and black eyes, shows signs of being highborn (his bearing, speech, etc)
Background: Born as Lord of Seafury, a castle on the Western Coast, House Forn is the House Paramount of the Western Coast, giving Lord Forn the allegiance of all the noble houses all along the Western Coast.
Lair: Seafury, a castle above the major port of Forn's Glory, a major trading center, since it also is n a river as well as the Sea. This trade makes House Forn incredibly wealthy. Seafury is on a ridge of land, making it very defensible. Seafury's location on the sea makes House forn a major sea power.
Villain's Goal: To become the King of the Western Kingdoms, and he will do anything he has to, to get his goal.
Attitude Towards Hero: King Forn treats King Blacktree as an equal, and respects him, this makes him a dangerous enemy, because he does not under estimate his foes
How is the Villian Stronger Than the Hero?: The Western Coast is larger than the Southern Woodlands, so King Forn has more Houses sworn to him, which means more soldiers. Also, because Seafury is on the Sea, the Western Coast has a powerful navy. lord Forn is an experienced generel compared to young King Blacktree
How is the Villian Weak or Vulnerable?: Many of Lord Forns lords are proud, but poor, so they can be bought for gold, this is his only major weakness.
Why Are the Main Character and the Villain in conflict with each other?: King Blacktree only wants to be the"Southern King", whereas King Forn says "What is a King, with a broken Kingdom?". King Blacktree is in Forns way.
Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s): "M'lord!" the messenger called as he ran. "M'lord! Lord Blacktree is in the Greenway wit- "Must I remind you to say Your Grace when you're speaking to me, Sir Illings?" King Forn drawled, his voice filled with contempt. "Now finish your message, fool." "The king-the lord Blacktree ha-has terms, for you," Sir Illings stammered. "He says that you must give him elligibility of the Southern Woodlands as well as the Bloodlands, around the Blackblood River. You must also send 50 hostages of high birth to him to show goodwill. He says that if you refuse, he will pass through the Greenway and put Forn's Glory to the torch!" "Those are good terms, but what is a king with a broken kingdom? Why, no king at all. He shall have his war, but in his bllod, not mine."
(November 6, 2014 - 8:43 pm)
Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s): "M'lord!" the messenger called as he ran. "M'lord! Lord Blacktree is in the Greenway wit-" "Must I remind you to say Your Grace when you're speaking to me, Sir Illings?" King Forn drawled, his voice filled with contempt. "Now finish your message, fool." "The king-the lord Blacktree ha-has terms, for you," Sir Illings stammered. "He says that you must give him elligibility of the Southern Woodlands as well as the Bloodlands, around the Blackblood River. You must also send 50 hostages of high birth to him to show goodwill. He says that if you refuse, he will pass through the Greenway and put Forn's Glory to the torch!" "Those are good terms, but what is a king with a broken kingdom? Why, no king at all. He shall have his war, but in his blood, not mine," replied King Forn.
Sorry guys, made a little error. :)
(November 7, 2014 - 4:03 pm)
I really like that idea. But what is fae opposed to elves? Someone help me, please.
(November 7, 2014 - 4:37 pm)
The Walking stone is not a creature, but a small disk the size of a plate that is made of stone. Using the walking stone, you can effectively create rifts in the world which act like portals, create "pocket worlds" to reside inside, travel to other worlds, and even to travel back in time. However, the Walking Stone has powerful intentions of its own. The power is granted through a demon named Aon trapped inside and he slowly dominates his controller like a sinister puppet. "Hosts" of the Walking stone will use its powers to destroy the walking stone, effectively freeing the demon. The Walking stone would reside in anywhere, where Aon waits patiently for the next host.
(November 19, 2014 - 6:11 pm)
1. Name
Aileas McLellan
2. Physical appearance
Ragged, long, pure blonde hair. Her body is then and pale, her eyes are exceptionally large and brown. Her lips are very pale, and she has the look of someone almost malnourished. Wears a grey dress and brown boots.
3. Background
Grew up a content and confident girl. Even after her parents died, she and her sister depended on each other, despite their meager means. Then her sister was killed. Aileas thinks she was murdered, though in reality, it was an accident. She was in the wrong place at the wrong time. It destoryed Aileas however, turning her sad, bitter, and reserved.
4. Lair (Hut? Castle? Cave? Ship?)
A small cottage hut.
5. What is the villain's goal?
To have justice for her sister.
6. Attitude toward hero
Cold reservation and bitterness, believing them to be her sisters murderer.
7. How is the villain stronger than the hero?
She is smart, easily outwitting people, and knows how to use them to her advantage.
8. How is the villain weak or vulnerable?
Her sorrow that she carries around burdens her. If you say the right things, she crumples.
9. Why are the main character and the villain in conflict with each other?
The misunderstanding of the murder.
10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)
"Why? Why can't you just leave me alone?!" Aileas sobbed screamingly, body bent defensively. Pain and sorrow riddled her features, and years of hardship had evidently wayned on her. Her physical features showed that of a bitter woman, but her eyes showed that of a beaten girl, yearning for something she could never again have.
(May 23, 2014 - 6:41 pm)
Dude... really? I know this guy who's last name is McLellan, and he's SO nice!
Your guy sounds like a good evil guy, but I don't like the name at all!
(July 5, 2014 - 6:44 pm)
Awesome! You could have her sister killed because of Fable's prophesc or something.
(July 8, 2014 - 10:34 pm)
Name: Jason Liam
Physical Appearance: Tall, thin, short brown hair, perfectly ordinary. If you passed him in the streets you wouldn't even register him, much less remember.
Background: He was a perfectly normal, happy man. His job as a paper salesman wasn't very interesting, but it paid the bills. He liked to grab a drink with his friends after work, hug his two kids, Melinda and Jakey, and kiss his wife, Lena, under the stars. The four, Jason, Lena, and the twins, were happy for a while; unfortunately, Lena was killed in a vehicular accident when the kids were only two years old. Jason was depressed for a while, but he had Melinda and Jakey, and they kept him sane. He threw himself into being the best father he could be, and for a while he was. They were surviving. Thriving, in fact. Still, even the best dad can't protect his children from everything, and when an epidemic flooded the small town, they got sick and passed away. He wishes everyday he could have saved them. He couldn't make it this time. No one was there to keep him grounded. He swore to himself he wouldn't let this happen to any more innocent children. He kidnaps children, ages 0-18, and keeps them in his lair. He just wants to keep them safe, at any cost.
Lair: There is old farm a while away from town. He keeps the children there, in a refurbished barn-house. The whole place is falling apart. He lives alone in the loft of the barn.
Goal: To "protect" as many kids as he can.
Attitude towards hero: (The hero is probably Camille Adelaide. Pg. 3 of hero page) He sees her as a poor, helpless girl who's fallen pray to society and a bad upbringing. He would love to save her. But after she causes him serious trouble, he starts to see her as someone who has to go for the greater good.
Strengths: He's normal enough to pass as a member of society. He passes completely under the rader of law enforcement as they search for the "Masked Kidnapper". He's honestly a good person, just, you know, OUT OF HIS FREAKIN' MIND. Still, he's kind, funny, etc. He's good with kids, they don't see his true intentions until it's too late. He can cut deep, be manipulative, and figure out a person's insecurities.
Weaknesses: He'd rather not kill the hero. He holds out hope that he can save her. He is absolutly crazy and can't see it. He tries to fill the hole his family left with all these other kids and "good" deeds. He is self-destructive, depressed, and did I mention crazy?
Conflict: She wants to be a hero. Catching the man who's kidnapping all those children seems good enough. As she continues, it stops being about her and starts being about all the horrible things he's done, and to some extent, her pity for him. He doesn't even see her at first, but when he does he wants to "save" her. When she lays down some truth on him, he feels betrayed that someone he's only trying to protect could see him as a monster. He decides to get rid of her, however she may be the cataclyst to him realizing that kidnapping kids is a bad career move, and will never fix his broken heart.
(May 23, 2014 - 7:44 pm)
Forgot my sentences!
"Hey there, sweetheart," said a man, leaning over Clara. His teeth were perfect, his eyes sincere, he seemed like just the person Clara was looking for.
"Hullo, sir," she said. "M-my parents are gone and I'm scared. Can...can you help me?"
"Well, certainly, honey. What do they look like?"
Clara gave a brief description--her father was tall and had red hair, and her mother was a blonde and "the prettiest lady you'll ever see."
The man took her hand and stood up, his fingers warm and tight around the little girl's wrist.
"W-where are we going? To find my parents?" she asked.
"Oh, no," he replied. "They are much too stupid to be your parents, letting you get lost and all. Why it's a wonder you weren't killed! Come on, you'll be safe with me." He quickly began tugging her along, leading her farther and farther away from the city park, leaving behind the sound of happy laughter for that of cold wind blowing through rotten walls. And the next day a new poster would be hung in the square: one more missing . . . Clara Fitzella . . . reward . . . any information please . . . Masked Kidnapper? . . .
(May 23, 2014 - 9:46 pm)
I like it, your a really good author! But what are his 'evil intentions'?
(July 3, 2014 - 2:08 pm)
Wow wow wow
(July 3, 2014 - 11:33 am)