Here's my not-so-wonderful poem. There's a lot of old fashioned and/or weird words in here. I tried to make it be cool. :) (And there's not much of a rhythm to it, sorry 'bout that.)

Waiting

I wait in tranquility,

Still as a dead willow tree.

Lying there,

Oh so lonely.

Vesper comes;

Evening proceeds, to transform into dark night. (I'm not sure if this line makes sense....) 

Not caring about the dark,

Only thinking of my beloved,

Tearing through the trees I go,

Halting only when

I'm

Not

Gadding

By the stream any longer.

Ughten comes

To

Pacificate me,

And as day goes on,

I still have not found my beloved.

Now I wonder, is love nothing but pain

? 

THE END!!!!

Ok, now go back and read the first letter of each line. (read the first letters vertically) ;)

And tell me if there're any words in the poem you didn't understand. :)

Great poem, Poet!

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Here's a poem!!! At least I think it's a poem, I'm not super sure..... ;)

Daylight comes, the night is over,

Dewdrops gather on buds of clover.

All is quiet as the dawn brings light,

The birds take off for an early morning flight.

Children play in a meadow of flowers,

Warmth is brought by the sun's power.

Summer brings such joy and rapture, (I learned a new word!)

I wish this time is one I could capture.

Any criticism and/or comments would be appreciated!

The sky,

she cries tears 

of acid rain.

Pouring down,

it burns our skin

until we bleed.

Some cry,

others scream,

few understand why

we deserve this

sort of punishment

and that the sky

will not forgive

us

anymore.

For we have pushed 

and pried.

Now it is too late

to change  

what we have done

to this world.

And I am telling you

it is over

when the sky cries acid rain.

Cheesy, I know.  

So much

I wish to say

but I cannot say it.

As we sit

in this dark cold room

quiet as mice.

Both our hearts beating

at what

we are about to do.

And then we jump

off the cliff

and plummet into the pool (of love? I'm quite uncertain about this line)

Scared as heck

at what could happen

if it all goes wrong.

Yet when your arms

embrace me

in a life long hug.

And the fragile bond

is sealed

which gives proof of our love.

A sudden calm

creeps over me

for now I know your love is true.

And we will never again

sit in silence

in the dark cold room.  

Very nice, Poet. All I'd suggest is to delete "she" from the second line, so the poem reads: The sky / cries tears etc.

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There is a place

where time stands still

and birds don't sing

and there is no chill.

There is a place

where there is no one

I'm all alone

and there is no sun.

There is a place

where there is no prologue

where I can fight

and there's only fog

There is a place

where there is no death

there is no chance

to take a final breath.

There is a place

where nobody cries

nobody screams

and nobody dies

There is a place

where I can be

and I can win

and I can see.

There is a place

where I'll be remembered forever

forgotten by none

for I'll just be downriver.

There is a place

where I'll go no more

inside my head

a place from before.

There is a world

just waiting for me

I'll be remembered

for seeing what no one else could see.

There is world

where I am stronger

and the place in my head

I dwell in no longer.

These are all so amazing, I can't stand it! TNO, your poem was absolutely terrifying and I loved it. Emma, yours already has a perfect ending. Koffee, my question is, how did you manage to write something that good in the margins of your homework?? Poet, I'm amazed at how you made that work! My acrostics always turn out awful. Snake, I love the rhymes and rhythm in your poem! An Aspriring Poet, yours made me sad and happy at the same time. Edge, yours is beautiful, but could you explain it a little more?

Okay, enough critiquing, I'm going to post mine now. It's kind of a variation on something I wrote a long time ago, and it's not very good, but here it is:

Warriors come forth,
Swords glittering in the sunlight,
Defending their castle,
Built brick by golden brick,
From a beast
Many times their size,
That blots out the sunlight
And swipes a paw,
Killing off
Ten.

Others surge forward,
Sacrificing their lives
To sting with the blades
Of their swords,
To protect the treasured gold,
Hidden in the castle,
Among the many rooms
And passages,
Though the beast is bigger
By a hundred fold.

The queen lies inside,
Hearing the battle
But unable to help,
As her duties lie
With those who make the gold,
Not the warriors
Who bravely defend it.

But the castle is falling,
The beast is winning,
The warriors dying,
The gold uncovered,
And the bear
Steals the honey
From the bees.