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CHAPTER ONE:
"Ok, everyone, that's a wrap!" I said, as we finished a practice session.
"Whew! Who knew that takin' my husband's place in guitar playin' could be so hard?!" My wife, Lizzie, said.
"You were good, though." Micky said.
"Yeah. Oh, I have a date with a girl tonight." Davy said.
"Hmm. What's her name?" Peter asked.
"Yvonne, I think. She has an accent." Davy said.
"Hmm. I've heard of that name somewhere. But, I can't remember where." Lizzie said.
"Yeah, well, maybe you heard it on the TV." I said.
Davy left half an hour later, and Lizzie and I went to bed.
I was halfway asleep until Lizzie gently shook me awake.
"Mike! Mike!" She whisper-yelled.
"What?" I said.
"I remember where I heard that name before: In a horror movie!" She said.
"What horror movie?" I said.
"A VAMPIRE movie! It's called 'Dracula 2: The Wolf-Man returns'! Yvonne is Dracula's niece! And she's evil! I bet that the Yvonne that Davy's goin' out with is a vampire, and that she's gonna turn him into a vampire, and then Davy's gonna turn US into vampires, and then we're gonna turn our friends and family into vampires, and then they'll do the same, and soon the whole WORLD is gonna be vampires!" Lizzie exclaimed.
"Are you absolutely SURE thar Yvonne is a vampire?" I replied.
"Yeah. If we don't want to become vampires, we need to go rescue Davy NOW!" Lizzie exclaimed.
After 15 minutes of beggin' and pleadin', she finally convinced me to get up, get dressed, and wake the others up.
"Ok, so, we have garlic, wooden stakes, holy water, and a mirror with some lipstick." Lizzie said.
"Hold it, what's the lipstick for? I understand all the other stuff, but how's lipstick gonna make us prove that Yvonne's a vampire?" Micky said.
"Just in case I need a touch up." Lizzie replied.
We all jumped into The MonkeeMobile, and headed to the castle.
"This is frightening." Peter said.
"Ok, see that bird-like thing? I'm pretty sure it's a VAMPIRE BAT." Lizzie said.
"C'mon, Lizzie, there's no such things as vampires of wolf-men." I said.
She didn't listen, she just kept talkin' 'bout monsters and such.
'It's only 1968, Michael. She'll get over it...eventually.' I thought to myself.
"Von't you come in?" A voice said, staartling me.
"Yeah. Yeah, we will." Lizzie said.
"Good. I am Yvonne, The Count's neice. You're friends of Davy Jones', yes?" Yvonne said.
"Yeah, we wanted to know where he is." Peter said.
"He's visiting our dog in the basement. Ou dog... is more like a wolf." Yvonne said, leading us into a library.
"Ok, that settles it! I'm gonna go into that basement if it's the last thing I do alive!" Lizzie said.
"Oh, no, you don't!" I said, as I grabbed her shirt sleeve.
"Oh, c'mon, Mike, where's your sence of adventure? Of excitement? Of possibly savin' your friend?" Lizzie said.
"I don't have any of that. I just want you safe, ok? I don't want any of you gettin hurt." I replied.
"You're right. You always are. But, maybe, Peter, Micky, and I should at least patrol the surrounding ares? Just for 10 minutes? Please, Mike?" Lizzie pleaded.
"Yeah, it would give us a chance to find a pasageway or somethin'." Micky said.
"What he said." Peter replied.
"Ok, fine. But, you be careful, ok?" I said.
But, before I was even finished with my sentence, they were out the door.
"Hello, Mike." Yvonne said, startling me AGAIN.
"Hi, Yvonne?" I replied nervously.
"I have something special for you." She replied.
She leaned towards me, but I backed away.
"There's something I want to give you." Yvonne said.
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I know, it's kinda long, but I PROMISE I'll continue it tomorrow.
submitted by Emekittycon Kitten, age 12, Kitten Kingdom
(April 13, 2021 - 3:30 pm)
(April 13, 2021 - 3:30 pm)
Ok, Chapter One, Part Two:
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She kept leaning towards me, she bit me on the neck. HARD.
"LIZZIE! MICKY! PETER! GET HERE NOW!! IT'S AN EMERGENCY! HELP!" I screamed.
Yvonne let go, and I fell to the floor. She dissapeared as Lizzie, Micky, and Peter burst through the door.
"MICHAEL! Are you ok, Mike? What hapened?" Lizzie said, as she ran over to me.
"Yvonne... She... she... ohhhh..." I groaned.
"Mike, you're bleeding! And it looks REALLY bad!" Lizzie exclaimed.
She put her hand on my neck, and I winced.
"Sorry. Wha--Mike, have you been foolin' around with those skewers again?" Lizzie teased.
I shook my head slightly, and Lizzie gently turned my head.
"Hmm. The marks on the right side, are slightly bigger than the ones on the left. It looks like--Uh-oh." Lizzie said.
"Whenever there's an 'uh-oh', you KNOW things are bad." Peter said.
"It looks like my prediction about Yvonne was right." Lizzie said.
"You don't mean--" Micky said.
"Mike's been bitten, and it's one bite that has some SERIOUS side effects." Lizzie said.
"Surely it can't be that bad." Peter said.
"It IS that bad, when it's the bite of a vampire!" Lizzie said.
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CHAPTER TWO, PART ONE
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"WHAT?!" Micky and Peter said.
"Shh! Be quiet! Mike's still tryin' to rest his last bit of humanity before he turns into a blood-suckin' vampire." Lizzie hissed.
"Mmm... I don't feel too good..." I said groggly.
"You'll be ok, hon. You'll be fine. Sure, you'll be a vampire who wants to turn us into vampires, but, it'll be ok." Lizzie said, as she put a pillow under my head.
She took a blanket that was on a couch, un-folded it, and put it over me.
I smiled slightly, and adjusted myself so that my neck hurt less.
"You'll be ok. I promise. It'll be ok." Lizzie said, as I blacked out.
I kinda remember bein' moved, and hearin' voices, but, I was still sleeping.
"Mike... Mike, get up. You're home now. Davy's ok. He's with us. Mike. C'mon, get up." I heard Lizzie whisper.
"Wha... What happened? Ow! Why does my neck hurt?" I asked.
"He has amenesia from when he blacked out. He clearly dosen't remember bein' bitten." Lizzie explained to the others.
"That's normal, right?" Davy asked.
"Yep, completely and totaly normal." Lizzie replied.
"How ,ong 'till he.. you know, he's a vampire?" Peter asked.
"Well, considering he was bit 'bout... let's see... 4 hours and 30 minutes ago, I'd say 'bout 12:00 tomorrow. He's about 1/4 the way there." Lizzie answered.
"How do you know that?" Micky asked.
"Easy. His skin's a little pale, and, if I shine this low-level sunlight replacer in his face, he'll ask me to shut it off, because it hurts him, when it's not actually sunlight. Observe." Lizzie said, as she turned one of those lights on.
"AHH! Turn that thing off!" I shrieked, shielding my eyes.
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Bradley just said "bpigg". You want me to... be a Minecraft pig???
(Yeeep.)
You need to go talk to other CAPTCHAs, you know that, don't ya?
(Yeeep.)
(April 14, 2021 - 1:16 pm)
This is a great story! I love how the characters interact with each other and how you've written everyone. This is really good.
(April 14, 2021 - 6:24 pm)
TOPTOPTOP!!!!!!!!!!!!
(April 14, 2021 - 1:21 pm)
TOPTOPTOP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(April 14, 2021 - 2:36 pm)
Hey, guys.
So, I have some news.
I won't be able to post more of this story, cause my parents are, like, RIGHT near me when I use computer, so I have to wait until my dad goes back to work, which will be next Wednesday, so that way, I'll have a lesser chance of them peekin' at it and me gettin' in trouble.
I'm up to Chapter Four now! I JUST finished Chapter Three early this mornin', and I'm hopin' to get it PUBLISHED when I'm an adult.
So, it'll be 'bout 6 days before I can post more of this.
It'll keep goin' till I'm finished with my story.
Oh, @Kitty Cat, since my story is probably gonna be published, can you please do some cover art for me? I'm not really an artist...
Emekittycon Kitty, why would you be "gettin' in trouble"? Chatterbox does not support users going against parents' rules or wishes.
Admin
(April 15, 2021 - 1:16 pm)
I can't wait to see it once you post it! You write really good dialogue.
(April 15, 2021 - 6:34 pm)
I totally can! Could you give me appearance s for the charcaters please? And how younwant the cover to look...
(April 16, 2021 - 8:56 am)
@Kitty Cat, I'll try my best to describe them!
Mike has a hair-style that is kinda a wavy quiff LEGO hair-style, but it's like a boys version. His hair is a REALLY deep dark brown, his eyes are brown, he has tan skin, and he wears a shirt and tie with black pants with a black belt with black shoes.
Micky has a curly short version of an afro, and his hair is also deep dark brown. His eyes are also brown, his eyes are brown, and he has tan skin. He has a poncho that he made from Davy's table cloth (Why did he even DO that?!) and it has a wild pattern. I don't know how to describe it, so if you want you can lok it up. He has a black shirt with medium red and white thin stripes, with black pants, black shoes, and beads.
Davy has a short hair-style that is brown, with brown eyes and tan skin. He has a white shirt with a stripe that has the same pattern as Micky's poncho that goes up the middle, the ends of the sleeves, and his collar. He also has black pants and black shoes. He's he shortest of the group.
Peter has blond hair, grey-green eyes, and tan skin. He has a orange shirt with a green and brown pattern on it, with beige pants, beads, and boots with the fringe on them.
Oh, and Lizzie is actually me, it's just a nickname that has to do with my middle name, LOL. She's not actually a part of the band. You can do her the way that you want her to look like.
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Can the cover be Mike on one side with his face serious, and the rest of the group on the other side lookin' all serious at him out of the corner of their eyes please?
(April 20, 2021 - 10:40 am)
@Admin, my parents are SUPER-PROTECTIVE of me, and they might be lookin' over my shoulder when I write if they see it, and I'm kinda secretive 'bout my writin', so they might over-react if they ever see what I've written, and what I'm writin' 'bout. Trust me, I've written some work that I can't really share to anyone except Ripley-Wren.
Yeah, I was pretty messed up when I was writin' 'bout Devan K.
Well, we do our best to stick to Chatterbox guidelines.
Admin
(April 20, 2021 - 10:28 am)
@Kitty Cat, if I didn't describe The Monkees very well, you can look up what they looked at in 1968 if you want to.
(April 22, 2021 - 11:04 am)
AHHHH TOPTOPTOPTOPTOP!!!!!!!!!
QUICK UPDATE: I'm actually on Chapter SEVEN now! I'll try to post real soon!
(April 25, 2021 - 4:18 pm)
TOPTOPTOPTOPTOPTOPTOPTOPTOPTOP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(April 27, 2021 - 12:04 pm)
(April 27, 2021 - 12:14 pm)
Ok, CHAPTER TWO, PART TWO:
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"See?" Lizzie said, turning it off.
"Don't do that, please." I said.
"Sorry, Mike." Lizzie said.
"He WON'T bite US, right?" Micky asked.
"Maybe. Maybe not. It depends on if he's controlling himself or not." Lizzie said.
"Hey, Lizzie, I'm kinda hungry." I said.
"Oh, sure!" Lizzie replied, pulling out a bag of chips.
I ate them slwoly, and fell aslep. I slept until 10:50 the next day.
"Good mornin', Mike! Hope you sletp well!" Peter said.
"I did, actually." I replied.
"Good. Lizzie's reading about cures for vampires. She says if she finds one, she'll cure you!" He said.
"That's cool." I said.
Just then, Lizzie walked into the room, holding a book.
"I am so exausted! I spent all night tryin' to find a cure, but did I find one? Nope! I didn't find one stinkin' cure!" She said.
"Wow. That's awful!" I said.
"Yeah, it is. And, at 12:00 P.M. tonight, you'll be a full-fledged vampire! And, ya know whose fault this is?" Lizzie asked.
"I don't know, whose?" I said.
"It's DAVY'S fault! If he didn't go out with Yvonne, none of this would be happening!" Lizzie answered.
"Hold it, hold it, why do you blame everything on ME?!" Davy exclaimed.
"Because it IS your fault! It always is, David Jones!" Lizzie said angrily.
"Oh, yeah, EVERYTHING'S always my fault! Well, if you didn't come to save me, Mike wouldn't be turning into a vampire!!!" Davy argued.
"Yeah, so, next time someone invites you to visit them in a creepy old castle, decline the offer!" Lizzie said.
"Oh, really?! And, you think that I actually WANTED to do that?! Well, I've got news for you! I DIDN'T want to go there! OK?!" Davy argued.
"Yeah, right! I'll believe that when cows jump over the room! Which is gonna be... NEVER!" Lizzie said.
"Guys--" I said.
"Quiet, Mike. Davy and I are in the middle of a total arguement!" Lizzie said.
"Guys--" I repeated.
"Mike! Lizzie and I are still debateing!" Davy said.
They continued to argue, and then they stopped. For the rest of the day, Lizzie and Davy didn't talk to each other.
"This has gone on too far. They're not even lookin' at each other!" I said.
"Yeah, I don't think they even LIKE each other anymore!" Micky said.
"Guys, it's, like, 11:45. We have 15 minutes until-- Ya know what I mean." Lizzie said, as Davy came into the room.
"Well, look who's boss now! What are ya gonna do, order me to wash the dishes?" Davy said.
"Oh, wow! You think I'M bossy? Well, David--" Lizzie said.
"Don't. Call. Me. DAVID!" Davy yelled.
"Oh, I can call you whatever I want! Until we find out how to cure Mike, I'M in charge here, CAPHISE?!" Lizzie yelled back.
They started arguein' again, and they went until 11:55.
"YIKES! It's THAT time ALREADY?!" Lizzie exclaimed.
"Yeah, it is. So, how do we know when Mike's a vampire?" Peter asked.
"We'll know. We'll know." Lizzie said nervously.
"I hope it isn't too bad." Davy said.
"I'm scared." Micky said.
That's when the clock struck 12:00, and it all began.
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I'll try to post a chapter durin' the Wednesday's, Thrusday's, Friday's, and Saturday's. Or whenever my dad isn't home.
Hope you like it so far!!!
I'm on CHAPTER EIGHT!!!!!!!!!!
BTW, Bradley says "cowgw". Cows are good work?
(Um,yea) (hhhhh...???)
(April 30, 2021 - 1:52 pm)
I will keep working on the cover you want, I hope you'll like it!
(May 2, 2021 - 12:34 pm)