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OK, I started
OK, I started this story about 6 yrs ago when I was in 1st grade and now I am revising it.
Characters are as follows. (although I may add more later)
Main character: Fern, age 12, tomboyish, hot-tempered.
Other characters are as follows:
Fern's mother: Age unknown, very old-fashioned and gives big parties for other rich people and always makes Fern help with the guests, which Fern hates.
Fern's younger sister: Named Beckey, is about 8 yrs old and takes everything seriously and calmly. Annoys Fern greatly.
Fern's father: Age also unknown, very modern, helps Fern escape from the parties and sympathizes with her suffering when she can't escape.
Fern's older brother: Named Joey, 17 yrs old, very nice, is Fern's model of what kind of person she wants to be when she's older.
Here goes:
Chapter 1:
Meeting Fern
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"Fe-ern!" That was her mother yelling, first thing in the morning.
Today would be another party day. Fern groaned, then got up.
"Coming!", she yelled back, as she scrambled downstairs and got out her cereal before her mother could make her eat a 'more delicate' breakfast.
Her mother frowned, but made no comment. On what Fern was eating, that is. "Get dressed this instant!", she barked." Alright, alright!" A few minutes Fern was back, comfotably dressed in designer jeans and a t-shirt. " What are you thinking!?", her mother demanded, as soon as she came back. "Put on a proper dress. Now! And remember to do your makeup properly." Fern groaned, and reluctantly complied with her mother's demands. " I HATE dresses.", she mumbled as she went back to her room for the second time. " And makeup, too! It makes me look ridiculous!".
Finally,after about three more trips back and forth, her mother was satisfied. Just then, the guests started arriving.
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How is that? Please give me comments on what you think. This is one of my first stories, so I really want your opinions!
This is not a round robin story, I just want help, as this is my first story.
Jenjen
submitted by Jennifer T, age 12, Nowhere
(March 2, 2009 - 9:54 pm)
(March 2, 2009 - 9:54 pm)
Mmmm . . . okay! :) Being "BellaTrix" all the time is a bit tiring, anyhoo. :)
(March 14, 2009 - 11:16 pm)
Thanks, Hanna! I think ur name rox! OMG I am talking like Holly!
*goes crazy and gets hysterical*
(March 15, 2009 - 11:19 am)
Thanks! :) I like yours, too. :)
(March 17, 2009 - 4:10 pm)
No, yours is more awesome!!
(March 17, 2009 - 4:49 pm)
Great job! :)
(March 17, 2009 - 7:29 am)
Thanks Lena!
(March 17, 2009 - 11:29 am)
This is a great place to start drafiting! Hurry and write as much as you want
(March 17, 2009 - 3:23 pm)
That's really good! Cool idea, too. ;)
(March 15, 2009 - 8:37 am)
I thought you're story was very interesting!!
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(March 16, 2009 - 7:46 pm)
Um,Nao?
Los Angeles, California????
You posted that at my house here in Nashville.........?
(March 17, 2009 - 5:17 am)
Um, Jenni. Can you puh-lease write more?
*Gives her best puppy dog eyes*
*sits on edge of chair and stares impatetiently into the screen*
(March 18, 2009 - 4:07 pm)
Wow, that really is amazing. I love the plot, and the charcters are wonderfull. I look forward to what is comign next!
(April 14, 2009 - 12:02 am)