Poems and Feedback
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Poems and Feedback
Poems and Feedback
Hey, everybody! I was on here a lot a few years ago. And then I got busy with highschool and stuff. So, hello again! Missed this site!
So, I recently acquired a love of poetry. So, this would obviously be a good place to post it. Let's all post some cool poems here. Postive feedback or helpful critique is always nice and good! I'd love to get some help on my poems, and I'd love to read all of your great ideas, and maybe give you some feedback! I'll post some of mine soon.
Spammy says yimx, which couls possibly mean why I'm ex. Did spammy get dumped?
submitted by Alex Infinity, age 15, Kansas, newly
(February 18, 2014 - 10:41 pm)
(February 18, 2014 - 10:41 pm)
Sorry, the format is weird. I don't know why it is like that.
But I suppose it happens to everyone...
(February 21, 2014 - 8:11 pm)
I likes it. It was a little confusing, espically the 2 stanza. Nice job, the wording was very nice too!
(February 22, 2014 - 10:46 am)
Thanks :)
(February 22, 2014 - 11:41 am)
enslaved
she is a slave
to fashion,
to her appearance,
to society.
she starves herself
to be gorgeous.
they beg her to stop,
they say she'll kill herself
if she carries on like this.
her response?
"well, at least I'll die in style."
(I actually really like this poem and now I have an idea for a poem thanks to Panic! At The Disco.)
(February 22, 2014 - 3:59 pm)
Hi! I'm rather new here (to the Chatterbox, that is.) I love writing poems!
Here is a poem I wrote several months ago...
Fine.
Have your own way
If I can’t tell you
when the grass could grow
or
where the moon might go
Seems as if
I could at least say
that I love you.
Love is dangerous.
Too much in one direction can
take it from others.
I know that now.
You -
having eyes only for one, the one
- ignore the love lying on
your doorstep
and begging to come in.
Life is hard
but too hard
that only the noonday sun
and from then on
matters to you?
I am the sun in the east
new, but the dawn is
vital.
For one who wakes up
with it
I am surprised that you
do not care for it.
Do not try to keep me
in the dark
for the dawn will come
whether you like it or not.
Do not misjudge me
for I can see the forbidden flames
and I wonder
why not me?
(February 22, 2014 - 5:56 pm)
Wow. This is really good.
(February 22, 2014 - 7:12 pm)
This actually happened to me, and I think I was feeling rather Christopher-Robin-like when I wrote this poem because the rhythm reminds of those poems in When We Were Very Young and Now We Are Six.
Candles
Beeswax candles
smell like
summer,
whether they're
burning
or not, but once,
when I lit a candle bear,
and brought his brother,
another bear, out into his
new-found light,
the not-flaming one,
in the flickering shadows,
looked so terribly sad,
that I wondered if I
had done something wrong
and whether candles really
want
to have that beautiful light
melting away their wax.
(March 1, 2014 - 10:02 pm)
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(March 2, 2014 - 9:59 am)