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First Sentence Contest
This is an idea I came up with in an attempt to help revive BaB!
I will provide a summary of an invented book (it doesn't have to be actually written, just a book idea -- and it cannot be an already published book). Then you will post a sentence that you think would make a good first sentence for the book.
Remember, first sentences are very important. It's what pulls you in and keeps you reading. Books with good first sentences are usually very good.
Deadline is October 16. I will judge on the 17. Whoever wins first place will be the next judge. If you win first place and would rather not judge please tell me and the role of judge will go to the second place winner.
Let me know if you have any questions or suggestions! I look forward to reading your first sentences.
Story Summary:
Humans have finally landed on Mars. The human habitat is encased in domes of transparent material. Drones big enough to transport people fly around, hovering above the surface of Mars. Contact with Earth is strong and extremely important. Everything is going well, until contact with Earth ceases. No one knows why and things are tense. When one of the transparent domes start leaking the precious air into the Mars atmosphere the tenseness escalates at an alarming pace. There isn't enough oxygen and supplies to share with others for long. Groups of humans turn against other groups. Everyone is blaming another and nothing towards fixing the problems is being done. Sevianna -- a young girl born on Mars who has never seen or set foot on Earth -- realizes that something must be done. The adults aren't doing anything, so she gathers the other Martian children. Together they must save the human habitat and reconnect with Earth. It is a daunting task and many children give up. Soon only Sevianna and three other children are left trying to fix the problems. Can so few do it? Or are they doomed with the rest of the humans on Mars?
submitted by Peregrine, age Many moons, The Eyrie
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
I drop to the cool metal floor, scrunching my eyes shut, but the glowing ball of fire that was our only hope is stamped on the inside of my eyelids. I can't escape its picture in my mind anymore than I can escape the astronomical problem I've just gotten myself into.
(January 5, 2021 - 8:52 pm)
Humans aren't supposed to be nocturnal. But this one is.
(December 30, 2020 - 7:20 am)
I'va always lived in a world of darkness, never to see light. Until now.
Gemma says furrr. Her first sort-of real word! Yes, you do have fur, Gemma.
(January 3, 2021 - 3:37 pm)
@Soda Pop, you mean January 10, right?
@Lumi, yours is amazing! I love how it drops us right in the middle of the action, and we know something's wrong, but we're not sure what, and neither are the characters, and there's also something mysterious about why the narrator has never seen the sun... excellent. 10/10.
It's as dark as it gets tonight, with dark clouds covering the moon and the only light coming from the dying LEDs in the rubble piles, barely enough for me to see the ground in front of me. I find myself wishing, not for the first time, that I could see the world in daylight.
(January 4, 2021 - 4:03 pm)
Yes, sorry!
(January 5, 2021 - 11:09 am)
"There's no use." Asher stated. "None at all." The kid in the corner said nothing. "Aren't you going to talk to me?" The kid turned away. He was shocked, frightened and a bit depressed. The planet that they set out for was now demolished. Earth was their only hope. Now it has been taken away.
(January 6, 2021 - 11:53 am)
After thirteen years of struggling to survive, Asher thought he had it figured out. But the creature's yellow eyes, glaring through the darkness like searchlights, proved him wrong.
(January 6, 2021 - 1:38 pm)
I knew something was wrong that night. The night it all changed. The night I was found.
(January 8, 2021 - 11:25 pm)
Oops-
Here we are!
Honerable Mentions: MoonHalo and Twilight! Both of your sentences were incredible! I would totally read a book that started with either of those!
Third Place: Luminescence! This was awesome, I loved it! The way it pulls you in and wraps you up was amazing!
Second Place: Tie between Kitten and Sterling! I could not decide!! I had to make it a tie because both were soo good!
First Place: peppermint! Oh my wow. That was... Wow. Honestly! Peppermint, that was such an intense yet vibrant sentence! I loved it!
Congrats, Peppermint! You're the winner!
(January 11, 2021 - 2:19 pm)
Thanks for first place Soda Pop!! I'll post a new prompt tomorrow, if that's alright!
(January 11, 2021 - 11:49 pm)
(January 11, 2021 - 11:06 pm)
Wow, second place! I didn't expect that. Congrats to peppermint, you totally deserve it!
(January 12, 2021 - 8:25 am)
Oh wow, thanks for the honorable mention!
(January 12, 2021 - 4:17 pm)
Esa has lived on Ozumia, a remote island that almost no one knows about, for nearly her entire life. The island is a safe place for children with the powers of the elements, (wind, fire, earth, and water) where they can train until they are strong enough to go out into the real world. Esa has the power of water, and, at only thirteen, is one of the most advanced enchantresses on the island. Esa's world is turned upside down when she wakes up one day to find that everyone except her has lost their powers. Esa and a few other trainees are sent on a quest to find out what has happened, but nothing seems to be going right. Soon, Esa and the others are stuck in the regular world of humans with no way to get out, and no idea what they are doing.
Hopefully this makes sense. I sort of came up with it on the spot. Let me know if I need to clarify anything! :)
(January 12, 2021 - 9:07 pm)
Someone once told me that seagulls are unlucky birds that bring nothing but trouble. But in a world full of coruption, seagulls help me consentrate on the tide. It comes in, and it goes out. Simple, the way the world should be. But humans have never been simple and never will be, so that is why I focus on only one aspect at a time.
(January 14, 2021 - 8:27 am)