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First Sentence Contest
This is an idea I came up with in an attempt to help revive BaB!
I will provide a summary of an invented book (it doesn't have to be actually written, just a book idea -- and it cannot be an already published book). Then you will post a sentence that you think would make a good first sentence for the book.
Remember, first sentences are very important. It's what pulls you in and keeps you reading. Books with good first sentences are usually very good.
Deadline is October 16. I will judge on the 17. Whoever wins first place will be the next judge. If you win first place and would rather not judge please tell me and the role of judge will go to the second place winner.
Let me know if you have any questions or suggestions! I look forward to reading your first sentences.
Story Summary:
Humans have finally landed on Mars. The human habitat is encased in domes of transparent material. Drones big enough to transport people fly around, hovering above the surface of Mars. Contact with Earth is strong and extremely important. Everything is going well, until contact with Earth ceases. No one knows why and things are tense. When one of the transparent domes start leaking the precious air into the Mars atmosphere the tenseness escalates at an alarming pace. There isn't enough oxygen and supplies to share with others for long. Groups of humans turn against other groups. Everyone is blaming another and nothing towards fixing the problems is being done. Sevianna -- a young girl born on Mars who has never seen or set foot on Earth -- realizes that something must be done. The adults aren't doing anything, so she gathers the other Martian children. Together they must save the human habitat and reconnect with Earth. It is a daunting task and many children give up. Soon only Sevianna and three other children are left trying to fix the problems. Can so few do it? Or are they doomed with the rest of the humans on Mars?
submitted by Peregrine, age Many moons, The Eyrie
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
"My older sister had been lying when shetold me two years ago that our relationship with earth was fine. Maybe not lying, exactly, but she had been wrong."
I hope its okay that that is technically two sentences.
(October 6, 2020 - 4:51 pm)
(October 6, 2020 - 7:50 pm)
Sevianna was trying to take a nap when she heard the screams echoing across the planet.
(October 6, 2020 - 8:23 pm)
Let me make it a maximum of two sentences! It might make it a little easier. There won't be any exceptions.
(October 7, 2020 - 9:43 am)
Accidentally blowing up the comunication center might have been a mistake, but I'd fix it, I had to. All our lives depended upon me being able to go back and fix what I'd done, but it wouldn't be easy.
(October 7, 2020 - 11:26 am)
"It was not long ago that I took the twinkling night stars for granted. But tonight, looking up at the sky, I cannot help but wonder if I will ever see them again."
(I would have wanted to add maybe two more short sentences, this sure is a challenge!)
(October 7, 2020 - 12:49 pm)
Adults are stupid. First they destroy Earth, and then they kill Mars, too, and force four kids to save the world.
(October 7, 2020 - 7:04 pm)
The first thing Sevianna saw when she woke up Thursday morning was a bunch of adults running around screaming about something undecipherable. It was only 6 a.m. and she rolled over and went back to sleep, telling herself she was still dreaming.
(October 8, 2020 - 3:28 pm)
I almost screamed when I heard the sound.
(October 9, 2020 - 5:26 pm)
The night sky, eternity, holds us back, here on this red planet. We have no chance at survival, no matter how hard the four of us fight.
(October 12, 2020 - 2:14 pm)
This won't be as good as the others, but...
Sevianna pressed her face against her window, watching the people argue.
(October 15, 2020 - 8:06 am)
YES JUST IN TIME
Watching the adults scramble, argue, fight, and cry, it's really a wonder why they call us childish.
(October 16, 2020 - 8:12 am)
It was a dangerous silence, the kind that pressed in from all sides, taking away your breath. Sevianna knew it by another name: fear.
(October 16, 2020 - 10:15 am)
"We can totally build a nuclear reactor in three days, easy peasy," Sevianna said, looking up at their only hope of escape from Mars, an ancient rocket.
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(October 16, 2020 - 11:07 am)
"If it's not the worst thing about grown-ups, then it's close. Just when functionally - literally - everyone on Mars could be in worse danger than during the whole hatch malfunction debacle, they either dismiss it as no biggie or argue and fight without reaching the remotest answer."
(October 16, 2020 - 11:40 am)