Hey! So a
Chatterbox: Blab About Books
Hey! So a lot of you guys are on NaNoWriMo, and I was wondering if we could make a thread here to work with eachother for our stories next month, give suggestions, give criticism, and help eachother out. I need the help!
Also, NaNoWriMo is about books. So it's fitting for BAB, right? I think I tried this before, but it isn't coming through.
I have a plotline written out. Is it good? It's Children's fiction. The title is Sarah Secret. The Plot:
Sarah is an energetic young girl who believes in magic (VERY important to the story.), who's lived in the city all her life. Then, one day, her family grows. Her mother has a baby, and her Father realises that they can't live in a cramped and crowded apartment anymore, so he decides to follow his dream, and move to the country. They live in an old but updated house, but her dad has decided to get goats and fufill the rustic lifestyle. However, they live miles away from the nearest store, but there is many scattered houses if you go a mile away from where they currently are.
All of this is just a background.
The Secret: about 300 feet away is a very large house. It's grand, and Sarah calls it a Mansion. But the house has something to do with the tragic past of Rowina Road and the county that they live in, And it is said that a man lives in it alone. But, with the help of Sarah's troublesome goat, Andre, who snatches a peice of paper with a 'spell' on it that she wrote, she discovers that the man is not the only one who lives in the house.
A little girl, named Elizabeth, lives there as well. But why is she always inside the house? And why is she so quiet, and obedient?
As Sarah struggles to find her place in her new home, she also struggles with growing up, as she'll be 12 next year, and her only comfort and solace are her books, fantasy books wrote by authors in the city. Books with magic, which Sarah insists on reading, and writes 'spells' and runs wild with her imagination.
Elizabeth is her secret. But what's a secret if it's meant to be told?
(October 6, 2016 - 9:03 am)
I forgot to rejoin, so I'm not on any yet, partly because I'm trying to convince my parents that I can have an email. So, don't bother looking for me yet!
(October 9, 2016 - 8:04 am)
Title Help!
For my fractured fairytale, I'm trying to think of a title. . .I'm deciding right now between either Curiosity or Four of Spades. It's Alice in Wonderland themed. What do you guys think? Feel free to suggest your own!
(October 8, 2016 - 1:01 pm)
I'd say Curiosity.
(October 10, 2016 - 7:50 am)
Ahhh! My book is under the planning stage, and I'm just gonna start early. I have no title for it, and I'm completely stuck with that problem.
So you can find an excerpt and synopsis on my NaNo account, but I'll tell you all the big break down of the book:
(wait, here's a warning, it's based off some CBers!)
First, Katydid is a girl living an average life. Her brother, who is a leftie and annoyingly creative because of it, tortures her daily with hypothetical questions about ridiculous scenarios.
One day, the siblings get dragged off to a boring farmers' market, and no, it is really as boring as it is. Katydid begins to look for a new nightsand to replace her rickety old one, but instead runs into a giddy, wheelchair-bound girl named Jeanie. She and Katydid find a new nighstand, but it's even older than her old one, being over two centuries old.
They're about to pass it up until Katydid's brother notices something about it: there's a hidden compartment and the skeleton key in the msain one opens it! DUN DUN DUN
Inside they find telegram messages dated back from the 19th century. After Katydid brother helps them decode it with his morse code memory, they wonder who sent the messages. They letters will say something like "Help."
The track down the history of the nightstand, and it originally appeared in Mexico. katydid makes and excuse to her mom that's she going to summer camp next week, but she and jeanie and actually going to go to Mexico.
When they get there, they do some more digging and find out there are wormholes to other dimensions scattered around the world, minly caused my meteorite craters and such.
The meteorite that killed the dinosuars has a large crater in Mexico, and as they enter it, they find a time travel device thingy and find them selves in the exact same area.
Except the year is around 1890's, and they're in a steampunk dimension.
They stow away on a pirate ship (whcih just so happens to have stolen rocket boosters), and near England. here the message in the nighstand came from.
They land on a secluded island with lots of woods, and to get to the mainland (the pirates won't come near England's coast at all in fear of being caught), Katydid and Jeanie venture through the woods and hire a kid to take them on a giant hot air balloon to the mainland (the island has a large cliff). But suddenly it catches on fire and crumples into the water. They survive and swim to the coast instead, wondering what happened.
After hitchhiking on a couple of buggies and asking around, they meet a teenage girl from the 1960's dimension, who has been trapped there for over five years.
Turns out she sent the message and sent them to the present-time dimension by using a little magic she got from a a fairyland dimension.
Eventually, someone notices Jeanie's modern-looking wheelchair, and they ask if "the Mechanic" made it for them.
Jeanie, Katydid, and the girl ask who that is, and they go to him.
The person's very mysterious, and is pretty private because he's have been robbed many times, due to making electronics that seem too advanced for even the 21st century.
Turns out he's trapped in 1890's as well, except he's from the VERY far-off future.
Suddenly, robot driod things barge into the mechanic's workshop, and they get away right before it's burned to the ground.
*dramatic stuff about all the mechanic's works and stuff ensues*
ANYHOW
They venture around England. They wonder why they can't go back to the crater in Mexico and go back to their homes (since that's how they all got there). Later, a boy tells them they can't because each dimension ha a different area of leaving it, somewhere around the world. So going back to the crater wouldn't help.
Finally, they meet a boy who used to work with the villians, and they find out that a revolutionist group is trying to capture and brainwash people from the future so they can work in the 1890's and "make the world more advanced and a better place".
Nobody realy trusts the boy, but it turns out he's actually on their side.
After using some magic potion from a fairy dimension and turning into animals, they get captured by the local dog pound (but they escape because one of them turns into a horse). Finally they find the revoluntist group's headquarters and they do some fancy stuff in getting in.
At the end, they find a map with all the wormholes to and from each dimension, and everyone goes back to their own time period. (there's a slight hint and love between the mechanic and the girl from the 60's, but they must go back home)
AND THE REST IS HISTORY UNTIL THE SEQUEL!
I'm very serious about getting this book published. I already found a cheap copy editor on NaNo (she admittedly costs around $200, but that's super cheap compared to other editors). I'll probably publish this book using pronoun and such.
At first I was thinking of using a big book company, but I realized that's basicalky impossible at my age, so I thought let's do self-publish first. Besides, if it's really good, book book publishers may even contact you and you can reprint your book and sell it to em.
(October 8, 2016 - 8:20 pm)
Hmm, Nova, I'm not a great title person, but maybe "Wormholes"?
Also, do you have a name for the teenage girl or the boy yet?
When you do get it published, tell us the title so I can buy it!
(October 9, 2016 - 9:38 am)
I've got a ton of plot ideas at the moment! Honestly though, I can't stick to just on. Here, I'll write you a few of the summaries for pieces I'm working on right now~
(This one is called In Another Life, but I might change that title later on)
Tesha Narang often finds herself dreaming about what it would be like to be someone else. A normal kid with a normal life- far, far away from her hometown of Dempsey, Ohio. She wishes she wasn't stuck with heterochromia, a genetic mutation which causes her eyes to be different colors. If only she could fly away...
When she meets a stranger one night after a long day at school, things start to seem okay. For once in her life, she's found someone she can trust. But when an accident happens and a close friend of her family, Mrs. Simon, undergoes a costly surgery, everything goes back to the way it was. Mrs. Simon and her husband would have to sell their general store to pay for the surgery. How could Tesha find a way to help them?
Fortunately, her Literature teacher has noticed her talent for writing and showed her a contest for aspiring authors. The prize money? 10,000 dollars. With that kind of money, the Simons could keep their business going. Tesha resolves to win- and give the money she earns to Mr. and Mrs. Simon.
That's all I have so far. What do you think?
I'm also working on another plot idea, with no title yet. I'm think of calling it Because of Hope (Hope is the name of the hurricane, you'll understand when you read the summary)
Katie Grace Moreau has lived in the same small town her entire life. She's gone to the same school, hung out with the same people, and worked in the coffee shop that her mother owns for what seems like forever. But, Hurricane Hope changes all that. She and her family are forced to evacuate, leaving everything she's ever known to be destroyed.
The aftermath of the storm is devastating. Luckily, her house will be rebuilt, but it will take time. She and her family go to live with her mother's Aunt Pearl, who coincidently takes care of her distant cousin, Jane "Devan" Dawson. Soon, Devan and Katie become friends.
Devan hates how Aunt Pearl is so old fashioned- she doesn't want to be a giggly, stupid girl who does nothing but cook and clean. Her dream is to play drums for a rock band. Katie shares this love of music, and together, they find ways to make Aunt Pearl see Devan's potential. Finally, Pearl agrees to let Devan audition for a local band.
Yeah, so the details aren't really worked out on this one. I've got to the part where Katie goes to live with Aunt Pearl and Devan, that about it ;) I guess I'll just have to see where the writing takes me.
P.S. You might've seen my drawings of Devan and Katie on the Art thread. They are on there if you'd like to see what they look like!
(October 9, 2016 - 10:00 am)
I would like to just say that your book sounds like it's in the child to teen range.
I have some suggestiions for the second plotline (I like it more, but that might just be because there's so much more room to develop it!)
For starters, I'm going to challenge you.
What is Aunt Pearl's personality and charecter traits?
Second, can you give Katie a little bit of a struggle? Like, she moves in. She feels upset about losing her home and being forced to come here. And Devan and Aunt Pearl are being super girly and stereotypical "beautiful girl who cooks and stuff" and are the "housework" girl stereotype. Not sure how to say it. In your words: "Giggly, stupid girl who does nothing but cook and clean". And at first, she pretends like she isn't bothered by it. And then, she explodes out at Devan one day, yelling at how girly she is, and Devan explodes back, saying that she's just doing what Aunt Pearl told her to do and she was trying to be nice and impress Katie because she thought that Katie would be like Aunt Pearl. And then they wind up being friends after laughing at how ridiculous the fight was, because it gets ridiculous later.
You do not have to do this, DO NOT feel pressured. I just think that it might be a little more interesting if there's complications in the two's friendship, as in they hate eachother/ect. at first, and that Katie has a bit of a problem too (at first.)
Again, you do not have to do ANY of this. I hope I wasn't being too bossy or annoying :(
(October 9, 2016 - 8:12 pm)
Thank you Icy! I really didn't word it well, but it is actually Devan who is annoyed at Aunt Pearl. She kind of tomboy/punk, and doesn't want to be the stereotypical girly girl. Aunt Pearl is VERY old-fashioned, a grumbly old lady who doesn't approve of a lot of things 'kids these days' do. So Devan is fed up with her. Also, a little backstory, because I've been thinking about it: Devan's dad (Aunt Pearl's son) got arrested and sent to jail soon after Devan's mom left them. (Devan was about 3-4 at the time) Aunt Pearl became her legal guardian, but she misses her real parents a lot- that's another struggle along with her not getting along with Pearl. Another thing I should mention, one thing Devan does is go by her middle name, Devan, instead of her first name Jane, and Aunt Pearl refuses to call her anything other than it.
Katie is struggling with leaving her hometown- I think I said something about her mother's coffee shop, right? Well, that is like her favorite place in the whole world, and there's gonna be one scene when they first get to Aunt Pearl's when she's feeling super nostalgic and stuff. Also I'm not sure whether I want Devan and Katie to get along right away...? Maybe they'll be kind of stubborn at first?
Thank you so much for the suggestions! You weren't being bossy at all.
(October 10, 2016 - 3:11 pm)
Oh my gosh. When I was reading throught this thread and saw all these 'fractured fairytales', I remembered a story idea I'd had a while ago. Brace yourself- this was something completely random and stupid that came to me while riding the bus home from school.
A rapper with the stage name Punzel.
'Rap' Punzel. Get it? Oh wow, cringe attack. But I thought about it some more- a spinoff fairytale or whatever they're called, set in the hood? That's definitely different from the other ones I've seen. Maybe I'll write it later on.
(October 9, 2016 - 10:08 am)
What's your NaNo username? I remember you having a Camp one, but I couldn't find it on the site. . .
(October 9, 2016 - 1:56 pm)
Bluebird11.
(October 10, 2016 - 3:12 pm)
St Owl: Well, I'm not sure yet, but I might name the boy mechanic "Rubie" and the teenage girl something similar to intials *cough* BHR *cough*
The boy who used yo work with the revolutionist group might be named "Will T."
You can tell who Katydid is.
*wiggles eyebrows*
But I ended up making the characters really different from their actual personalites (like the kid who helps them on the balloon will be a guy-version of Air)
I wanted to put more CBers in there, but that'd be really confusing.
don't tell them on you-know-where or I would die from embarassment.
Also I tried changing the names more but I don't have any ideas! If they read it I will be forced to hide in a corner.
*sigh*
Oh but hey, if I work on a sequel I might be able to introduce some more CBers!
(in the book I won't mention anything about the CB, though).
(October 9, 2016 - 10:37 pm)
I would say for CBers with fantasy names, you could name streets and such after them. If ya want to add more.
(October 9, 2016 - 11:48 pm)
"Rubie"? So subtle, Nova.
(just kidding.)
I honestly think they'd be touched. But I won't tell them if you don't want me to.
(October 10, 2016 - 10:08 am)
XD
Yes, I am so good at disguising stuff. They may be touched, but who knows how they'll react to the slight hint at love stuff.
ANYHOW....
(October 10, 2016 - 12:12 pm)