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"My Greatest Ambition
"My Greatest Ambition Part 1"
What is your greatest ambition?
submitted by Ladybug
(April 11, 2013 - 4:14 pm)
(April 11, 2013 - 4:14 pm)
@Admin, it means everyone thinks anything I write is perfect. Which is frustrating, because, frankly, it's not.
(May 28, 2013 - 5:24 pm)
@ Theo: I understand that. I read once in Rebecca of Sunnybrook Farm, how she would write pieces, and read them to family or friends. They raved it, and thought it wonderful, but she doubted this. When she got outside opinion, she was told quite differently. Is it a bit like that? I struggle with my writing because I can't tell if it's good or not. I write it, thinking it's great, then go back, reread it, am utterly disgusted, and I can't get any real feedback on it! Being a writer in a non-writer community can be difficult.
(May 29, 2013 - 8:12 pm)
Yeah, real feedback is difficult to find. The reason I like Ilene and Alice's relationship in the Story Chain is because Ilene gives Alice real feedback, but also supports her at the same time.
(June 1, 2013 - 10:08 am)
It is definitly like that. Which is why I love writing day camps in the summer. Some one will critisize my writing! Authough my dad also can crtique my writing when I really need it.
(June 2, 2013 - 8:37 am)
I've found that most people don't truly want an outside opinion. It's much more fun to get people to say your writing is spectacualr when it's actually quite mediocre.
If you really want an outside opnion, I'd be more than happy to provide one. *hint hint*
(June 8, 2013 - 11:10 am)
Hmm. Well, that is true. I'm no good at being criticized, or even having my writing criticized. And even though sometimes I feel like I want my drawing to be criticized, really, I only have to look at some one else's and I'll feel bad. So I want to get better. So I go to this writng camp. You see, I don't want someone just agreeing to make me feel good. That makes me feel lame. I was at a young author's conference, and even though I could see in the teacher's eyes she though my idea was lame, she said "Good, good" or something cheesy like that. She did it with the whole class.
What do you mean *hint hint*?
(June 8, 2013 - 4:42 pm)
I meant, if you would really like an "outside opinion" I would be very honored to read your work.
(June 10, 2013 - 5:43 pm)
Oh. Well, once you read my work you might not think so.
But, I'll try to find a story...
...and fail. I can't find anything! So here's a draft for a strange picture book:
Let me tell you a story... a story of how the ancient Greek “gods” became who they were. Specifically, Zeus, Poseidon, and Hades.
One upon a time, three brothers who were friends were walking in the park. Their names were Hades, Zeus, and Poseidon. They were happy for some reason. Maybe it was because lollipops started falling out of the sky and they all loved lollipops.
So Zeus, Hades, and Poseidon each grabbed one lollipop.
Zeus’s was a sort of ivory yellow.
“Lemon flavored! My favorite!” Zeus cried.
Hades’s was black.
“Yay! Black licorish!” Hades was excited.
“I love blue raspberry!” exclaimed Poseidon, examining his blue lollipop.
The three brothers began to devourer their lollipops.
Suddenly, bad things began to happen.
Zeus got struck with lightning, Hades fell into a pit that lead to the underworld, and Poseidon tripped and fell in to a lake.
But, because they ate the lollipops, the lightning, water, and pit to the underworld did not hurt them, but rather gave them supernatural god-like powers.
Zeus became the “god” of the sky and lightning, his symbol of power the lightning bolt, while Hades ruled the underworld with his symbol of power, the helm of terror. Poseidon was in charge of anything happening in the water with his powerful symbiotic Trident.
You might think the brothers would all be pleased, but instead they caused lots of wars. But those, my friend, are different stories.
(June 10, 2013 - 8:32 pm)
@ Theo
That actually doesn't sound that bad.
(June 11, 2013 - 8:44 am)
Thanks! I couldn't actually find anything terribly horrible, but cleaning out my room would surely do the trick.
Zaga says "duta." Yes, there is lots of data stored away in my room, some of it in the form I like to call "A mess."
(June 11, 2013 - 7:50 pm)
I kinda liked it! It was definitely original. I keep most of the stuff I write hidden or locked (yes, quite literally) away, to keep snoopy annoying people from reading it.
I had once decided, simply for fun, to try and write a tragedy. So, again for fun, I attempted to write a story that Anne talked about in Anne of Green Gables. The one where two friends are separated, one comes down with an illness, the other nurses her back to health, then catches it herself, and dies. Morbid, yes, but the way Anne put it, it was almost comical. I then performed the story with a friend in her backyard to the audience of her dog, performing the MOST comical death scene ever in existance which consisted of a lot of gagging, and toppling over into a leaf pile. Then the "dead" body was placed in a sled (with quite a bit of imagination, it was a boat), and stuck in the middle of the yard, while the other "actress" fell to her knees, sobbing hysterically. The whole play ended when the actress in the boat jumped up screaming when something got in her hair, and the dog audience ran away. So note to everyone, never try putting your book into a play, and performing it in your backyard with a dog as your audience.
(June 14, 2013 - 12:00 pm)
I'm sorry. I can't review anything regarding mythology. I'm sorry.
(June 15, 2013 - 11:48 am)
Understandable. It's okay. I'll find something else in my world of stories, somewhere.
(June 17, 2013 - 5:21 pm)
That just means that they're your friends and they appreciate pretty much everything you do. You might be underestimating yourself. But if you press them I think they will probably give you some constructive criticism, and if not...well, there's always the CBers. Seems that at least one of us will, right?
(September 5, 2013 - 9:42 pm)
And yes I know that was for Admin. Sorry. I like giving advice. Admin, please feel free to give yours as well, you're all much more knowledgeable than me.
I'm not sure what advice you're asking for, Sarah. If about getting published, I'd recommend entering our Cricket League writing contests. When you're 14, you can submit work to Cicada, our magazine for teens. A librarian or English teacher should have a list of other publications that accept student work. Like almost everything in life, the more you do it, the better you'll get!
Admin
(September 5, 2013 - 9:43 pm)