Regular poetry thread

Chatterbox: Pudding's Place

Regular poetry thread

Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)

This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!

submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)

That's really good, Leafpool. I really like it!

@September, I feel like I haven't seen you in so long! 

submitted by Twirlgirl, age 13, My Imaginary Dance Studio
(February 12, 2019 - 6:55 pm)

I don't really love using rhyming, since it ends up sounding like Dr. Suess a lot, but it just... happened, whie I was writing.

The Place Where the Lost Things Go

A friendship bracelet, a shard of soul,

One half is lost, of two halves in a whole,

A changed story, a legend, a song,

One person's story, distorted and wrong,

One wrong choice, fate changed forever,

Can't turn back time, you gotta choose, now or never.

Where do the lost things go?

 

Choose the wrong path, one place less to explore,

Reach a fork in the road - ocean, or moor?

The spotlight's on you, it's your chance to shine,

It was your time to soar, why stay in line?

You stand by the grave, memories flash by,

Where did she go - where, when, and why?

Take me to the place where the lost things go.

Take me to the place where the lost things go. 

 

Please feel free to let me know about any criticism you have! 

submitted by Twirlgirl, age 13, My Imaginary Dance Studio
(February 14, 2019 - 12:29 pm)

Ahhh, I love this! It’s so pretty and meaningful, and the rhymes work perfectly. I love the line, ‘one half is lost, of two halves in a whole’ and also the way you repeated the ending lines. Well done!

submitted by Leeli
(February 16, 2019 - 9:19 am)

RIP Oppy. A poem in honor of her. <3

— 

a love letter to the human race

machines in your own image

bear the names of what you love

spend your nights in dizzy daydreams

of what might be up above

with telescopes and glassy eyes

you find what you can’t see

and build from dust a blueprint—

a path that led to me

how wonderful you are

how mortal, how divine

what strength it takes to mourn

brains of code and scripted lines

when you can’t find a reason

you’ll write your own rhymes

and though i can’t explore farther

all you have is time

don’t dry your eyes, but laugh and cry

death can be a friend

my chapter closes but for you

it’s a beginning, not an end

someday you’ll sleep as i do

among the stars you loved

breath stilled into ice caps

on milky’s crashing cove

but my battery is low

and the seas have been scraped dry

the red rock that i sing to

on my birthday waves goodbye

from tattered impossibilities

you built me: noah’s arc

but the flood will end

i love you, friend

and it is getting

dark.

submitted by Abigail, age Old enough, Inside my head
(February 16, 2019 - 1:46 am)

1) Who is this about again? 

2) This is so incredible. The rhyming is exquisite and so is the rythm. And the imagery. It's simply beautiful. And I love the end. 

submitted by Leafpool, age No, not a cat
(February 16, 2019 - 11:16 am)

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I don't often do rhyming work, so this was a fun exercise.

In response to your first question, NASA recently terminated the mission of Opportunity rover (often called Oppy), and "she" is now in hibernation and no longer performing communication. Her last message was something along the lines of "My battery is low and it is getting dark". A lot of people are really sad about her "dying", as she has come to symbolize a... inspiration for the future, of sorts. And a lot of other people are also marveling at humanity's ability to attach ourselves to inanimate things, things we've built, to fall in love with anything that we touch.

submitted by Abigail, age Old enough, Inside my head
(February 16, 2019 - 1:55 pm)

Oh, this makes so much more sense now! Yeah I don't keep up with the news ;/ Aww, that's kinda sad.

submitted by Leafpool, age No, not a cat
(February 17, 2019 - 1:44 pm)

Oh. My. The rhyming. The rhythm. Oh, my, oh, my, AAAAHHH! That is seriously one of the best poems I have ever read in my life. Including published poems. Do I have your permission to show this to my friends and teachers (especially my Earth Science teacher, who LOVES astronomy) if I give you credit?

submitted by Cassandra the First
(February 18, 2019 - 10:14 pm)

Ahhhh oh my gosh!! Thank you so much, that means a lot! <33 You totally may show it to them, I'd be honored.

submitted by Abigail, age Old enough, Inside my head
(February 21, 2019 - 10:24 am)

Okay, I've never posted on this thread before. Here goes.

 

the school hallway is dull colors

is blue lockers and scuffed tile and quiet.

you are quiet too, uncharacteristically,

lying on your back across the hallway

one earbud in, half-asleep

drowning in an oversized sweater 

your backpack as a pillow.

and i

i don't know

i am sitting on a bench, pretending to text

really just watching you

watching you in your uncharacteristic quiet

your uncharacteristic vulnerability

lying half-asleep on the scuffed tile

in a hallway made less dull.

submitted by Zeus, Idaho
(February 16, 2019 - 10:00 pm)

Aww, this is so cute! The way you wrote it, it makes a really vivid image in my head too. I love it!

submitted by Leafpool, age No, not a cat
(February 19, 2019 - 10:38 am)

Okay, so, I don't normally write poetry, to be honest. But recently I had to write a dramatic monologue for Literature in school based off a painting (George Frederick Watts' "Ellen Terry ('Choosing')" if you're interested!) and I think it's pretty good, so I'd like to share it! :3

Why do you return now? At this time?

After both our dreadful crimes

What--remember? The woman who you

Forced to try to marry you?

I did you a favor if I helped at all

So, listen now, to the tale you don’t recall

 

There was a woman you loved and wished to woo

You had a wife, yet that didn’t seem to matter to you

Bringing roses, you professed your love

Pushing your feelings to surface above

She flushed and took them to be kind

And used her door to hide behind

A moment later, she wilted down

As a flower loses its morning gown

Your wife had poisoned each and ev'ry thorn

To attempt to salvage what you’d sworn--

“Be together ‘til death do you part”

Yet there were no feelings left in your heart

 

Three days o’er, they buried her

Her expression calm and so demure

Her dress as blue as the ice in her eyes

They lowered it amongst the weeping cries

The green vines slowly vanished, as did

The last strands of her golden hair, laying amid

The roses, as red as her rosy cheeks

Then it was over, for weeks and weeks

 

Now you return, and for what, I ask?

A confession? For me to be unmasked?

Fine, I’ll admit--I poisoned the thorn

But I have no reason to mourn

I cannot forgive you, forget that thought

After another lady’s hand you sought

If you don’t believe me, take these flowers

And in a matter of only hours

I swear you will see what I had to do

Just the way I swore to be faithful to you

submitted by Inktail
(February 16, 2019 - 11:00 pm)

Thank you (from before), Leeli!

submitted by Twirlgirl, age 13, My Imaginary Dance Studio
(February 18, 2019 - 1:54 pm)

Abigail, I just read the one from page 51, and... *sob*.

It's just so pretty, so amazing, I love the rhyming, it's... I can't.

*retreats into a corner to get heart back together*

submitted by Twirlgirl, age 13, My Imaginary Dance Studio
(February 18, 2019 - 1:59 pm)
I cleaned up and edited slightly a poem that I wrote during writing group the other night and put it into a more poetic structure. Here it is:
Requiem 
I remember warmer days
Floating on a summer haze
Wondering how we grew so old 
Wandering through a world so cold
I miss the days in which we’d train
I cherished feeling, right as rain
My teammates racing fast with me
Nutmeg made it, three for three
Small bare feet on heated pavement
Heart full and free and with no ailment
I think about what I’ve become
I’m different from when I was young
And with that feeling of nostalgia
A story comes to mind of,
“Once upon a world
so dark.
There was a girl
A shattered heart
Her eyes once sparkled
Jewel bright tones, but now
They simply look like stones
I wonder briefly 
What she’s grieving
A future that 
she’s ceased believing?
I ask her softly
Who hurt you honey
She lifts a finger
Pale and bony
And points it towards her face
Still stony
She says to me
Don’t you see
I suffer from
Anxiety”
A thousand joyful moments enter
And I remember
I remember
That girl is me
From last November.
Please, let me know how I can improve/ edit this! I’m probably going to submit it to my school’s Juxtaposition, and I’m not the greatest poet, so I’d love any and all feedback. 
submitted by Kestrel, Returning to reality
(February 19, 2019 - 9:15 am)