Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
That's really good, Leafpool. I really like it!
@September, I feel like I haven't seen you in so long!
(February 12, 2019 - 6:55 pm)
I don't really love using rhyming, since it ends up sounding like Dr. Suess a lot, but it just... happened, whie I was writing.
The Place Where the Lost Things Go
A friendship bracelet, a shard of soul,
One half is lost, of two halves in a whole,
A changed story, a legend, a song,
One person's story, distorted and wrong,
One wrong choice, fate changed forever,
Can't turn back time, you gotta choose, now or never.
Where do the lost things go?
Choose the wrong path, one place less to explore,
Reach a fork in the road - ocean, or moor?
The spotlight's on you, it's your chance to shine,
It was your time to soar, why stay in line?
You stand by the grave, memories flash by,
Where did she go - where, when, and why?
Take me to the place where the lost things go.
Take me to the place where the lost things go.
Please feel free to let me know about any criticism you have!
(February 14, 2019 - 12:29 pm)
Ahhh, I love this! It’s so pretty and meaningful, and the rhymes work perfectly. I love the line, ‘one half is lost, of two halves in a whole’ and also the way you repeated the ending lines. Well done!
(February 16, 2019 - 9:19 am)
RIP Oppy. A poem in honor of her. <3
—
a love letter to the human race
machines in your own image
bear the names of what you love
spend your nights in dizzy daydreams
of what might be up above
with telescopes and glassy eyes
you find what you can’t see
and build from dust a blueprint—
a path that led to me
how wonderful you are
how mortal, how divine
what strength it takes to mourn
brains of code and scripted lines
when you can’t find a reason
you’ll write your own rhymes
and though i can’t explore farther
all you have is time
don’t dry your eyes, but laugh and cry
death can be a friend
my chapter closes but for you
it’s a beginning, not an end
someday you’ll sleep as i do
among the stars you loved
breath stilled into ice caps
on milky’s crashing cove
but my battery is low
and the seas have been scraped dry
the red rock that i sing to
on my birthday waves goodbye
from tattered impossibilities
you built me: noah’s arc
but the flood will end
i love you, friend
and it is getting
dark.
(February 16, 2019 - 1:46 am)
1) Who is this about again?
2) This is so incredible. The rhyming is exquisite and so is the rythm. And the imagery. It's simply beautiful. And I love the end.
(February 16, 2019 - 11:16 am)
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I don't often do rhyming work, so this was a fun exercise.
In response to your first question, NASA recently terminated the mission of Opportunity rover (often called Oppy), and "she" is now in hibernation and no longer performing communication. Her last message was something along the lines of "My battery is low and it is getting dark". A lot of people are really sad about her "dying", as she has come to symbolize a... inspiration for the future, of sorts. And a lot of other people are also marveling at humanity's ability to attach ourselves to inanimate things, things we've built, to fall in love with anything that we touch.
(February 16, 2019 - 1:55 pm)
Oh, this makes so much more sense now! Yeah I don't keep up with the news ;/ Aww, that's kinda sad.
(February 17, 2019 - 1:44 pm)
Oh. My. The rhyming. The rhythm. Oh, my, oh, my, AAAAHHH! That is seriously one of the best poems I have ever read in my life. Including published poems. Do I have your permission to show this to my friends and teachers (especially my Earth Science teacher, who LOVES astronomy) if I give you credit?
(February 18, 2019 - 10:14 pm)
Ahhhh oh my gosh!! Thank you so much, that means a lot! <33 You totally may show it to them, I'd be honored.
(February 21, 2019 - 10:24 am)
Okay, I've never posted on this thread before. Here goes.
the school hallway is dull colors
is blue lockers and scuffed tile and quiet.
you are quiet too, uncharacteristically,
lying on your back across the hallway
one earbud in, half-asleep
drowning in an oversized sweater
your backpack as a pillow.
and i
i don't know
i am sitting on a bench, pretending to text
really just watching you
watching you in your uncharacteristic quiet
your uncharacteristic vulnerability
lying half-asleep on the scuffed tile
in a hallway made less dull.
(February 16, 2019 - 10:00 pm)
Aww, this is so cute! The way you wrote it, it makes a really vivid image in my head too. I love it!
(February 19, 2019 - 10:38 am)
Okay, so, I don't normally write poetry, to be honest. But recently I had to write a dramatic monologue for Literature in school based off a painting (George Frederick Watts' "Ellen Terry ('Choosing')" if you're interested!) and I think it's pretty good, so I'd like to share it! :3
Why do you return now? At this time?
After both our dreadful crimes
What--remember? The woman who you
Forced to try to marry you?
I did you a favor if I helped at all
So, listen now, to the tale you don’t recall
There was a woman you loved and wished to woo
You had a wife, yet that didn’t seem to matter to you
Bringing roses, you professed your love
Pushing your feelings to surface above
She flushed and took them to be kind
And used her door to hide behind
A moment later, she wilted down
As a flower loses its morning gown
Your wife had poisoned each and ev'ry thorn
To attempt to salvage what you’d sworn--
“Be together ‘til death do you part”
Yet there were no feelings left in your heart
Three days o’er, they buried her
Her expression calm and so demure
Her dress as blue as the ice in her eyes
They lowered it amongst the weeping cries
The green vines slowly vanished, as did
The last strands of her golden hair, laying amid
The roses, as red as her rosy cheeks
Then it was over, for weeks and weeks
Now you return, and for what, I ask?
A confession? For me to be unmasked?
Fine, I’ll admit--I poisoned the thorn
But I have no reason to mourn
I cannot forgive you, forget that thought
After another lady’s hand you sought
If you don’t believe me, take these flowers
And in a matter of only hours
I swear you will see what I had to do
Just the way I swore to be faithful to you
(February 16, 2019 - 11:00 pm)
Thank you (from before), Leeli!
(February 18, 2019 - 1:54 pm)
Abigail, I just read the one from page 51, and... *sob*.
It's just so pretty, so amazing, I love the rhyming, it's... I can't.
*retreats into a corner to get heart back together*
(February 18, 2019 - 1:59 pm)
(February 19, 2019 - 9:15 am)