Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(Claaws has written a depressing poem and would like to share)
~Daydream~
She's a daydream, they say
With her smile and her eyes,
and rosy cheeks she tells no lies.
That's what they say.
With stary eyes or
jealous thoughts or
insecure glances.
That's what they say.
What they don't know,
is how she walks as if she's
stuck in a dream,
how she thinks it'll all be over soon.
How she touches the walls
around her
as she walks down the halls,
making sure they're real.
How images fill her head,
memories,
that never seem to leave.
Broken.
That's what they don't know.
She's a daydream, they say.
Just a daydream.
But they'll stare,
and whisper,
and size her up for taking.
And what they don't know is that
she's afraid to look in the mirror,
of her perfect smile and her sun-kissed hair. . . .
She's a daydream, they say.
Something no one can have.
(December 9, 2018 - 9:59 pm)
I've written a lot of poetry lately, and some of it is sort of finished, I guess. Here's a poem.
to s.
you're almost always happy when i see you
smiling and blushing and joking with your friends
running a hand through your brown hair
laughing most times, lighting up your symmetrical face and
you can run fast and skate faster and
always catch your friends but
sometimes i wonder: are you ever lonely?
are there ever times when you don't feel like
smiling, when everyone is either younger or older
than you and you can't even run fast enough
to catch up to yourself?
sometimes when i see you you've fallen
behind your friends and you're not
smiling
so much
(December 10, 2018 - 1:49 pm)
aww I love it. The format works really well and the message is so true
(December 11, 2018 - 5:32 pm)
This one is in sort of a different style, I guess. I was trying to use that "and then we were starlight" prompt that September gave me a long time ago.
stardust/nova
last night i sat outside on a rock to see the sky grow dark
i watched the heavens and contemplated the sweet smell of
nature and i tugged on my sweatshirt strings
bare legs clinging to the cold stone
and i saw the moon glow bright, and you
you sat on the moon and watched the earth
your face was lit up almost white
and scattered with stars, silver
glittering sequins, sparkling with warm light
you swung your legs and tilted your head back to look up
i leaned back on my hands and kept watching you
and then you looked at the earth again,
and somehow we met eyes
i suddenly felt riveted to you and i think you felt the same
i held out my hand towards you
and across stars you stretched to me
our fingertips brushed each other
and then we were starlight,
a golden girl and a silver boy
(December 10, 2018 - 1:56 pm)
Gosh, this is really beautiful. It evokes a very specific, poignant image. You're really good at painting a picture with your words. I've been loving your recent poems, Leafy!
(December 11, 2018 - 7:53 pm)
Ahhh this is sooo pretty, Leafy! I love it! It has great imagery. I agree with Abigail, you’re really good at painting pictures with your words and giving the reader a certain feeling or mood, if that makes sense.
(December 12, 2018 - 9:03 am)
Thanks!
(December 12, 2018 - 11:47 am)
This is beautiful. When I finished reading, I let out an involuntary oh in awe because I loved it so much. I love that celestial aesthetic (as you might have guessed), and it's just so beautiful, kudos to you!
(December 12, 2018 - 6:39 pm)
Loud
too loud
clanging
everything
cars
streets
citys
homes
I am
going
mad
from all
of this
awful noise
(December 12, 2018 - 8:17 am)
I feel like I wanted to say something about the style that I've sorta/kinda started writing in, and how I used to write, and how some people can tell while showing, but I can't quite. But I'm just going to post another poem.
untitled
a dream-beat
slow and potent
drippy and firey and sweet
falling through space
and time
humid summer air
warm smiles floating in with
the tide
nothing exists anymore
just him and her
and sleepy-eyed promises before
parting
slowed down the way
golden tree tears drip
(December 13, 2018 - 10:19 am)
Whoa. This is so beautiful, I love it!
(December 13, 2018 - 2:04 pm)
I've recently been reading a lot of e e cummings, and I really like it, so I decided to try to write in his sort of... unclear, I guess, way. I'm not sure how good I did with it, and I didn't even try for iambs, but still.
an ode to e e cummings
i like the way your words fall (all) over
the page, and make me run up a maze, (the black lines
never contained you, but look! i can
jump them too),
following your tantilizing truths through layers of lines,
chasing my brain's tail (and my friend's, too),
to struggle to make sense of your puzzle-piece untucked
ends, to find they've fallen off, and i must return again to
tobbogan into know once more,
all to find the gemstone in the middle,
the asymmetrical fountain of
unlikely truths i would happily drown in
to endure it all again:
for along the way i feel you (and me) stronger than the raindrops,
and i find the method in your madness to discover
my own beating heart, again and again,
(December 16, 2018 - 12:58 pm)
I love that (and E.E. Cummings) so much! It really captures the uniquely surprising mood of his poems, your use of punctuation is perfect. My favorite lines are "(the black lines/never contained you, but look! i can/jump them too)". It's so perfectly sweet and playful and just kind of hit something in me. This is really wonderful.
(December 16, 2018 - 6:32 pm)
I like this as well! I love how it's so loose and it's so prettily worded.
(December 17, 2018 - 11:26 am)
Thank you guys so much! You have no idea what that means to me, coming from two poets I admire very much. You guys literally just made my day. I had to take a moment to do a victory spin in my chair and mentally squeal many times before writing this. Thank you so so much!
(December 17, 2018 - 8:26 pm)