Regular poetry thread
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Regular poetry thread
Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
This is my best poem so far! It was an assignment for my school but I'm proud of it...I might reuse the first stanza because it sounds kinda weird. Let me know what y'all think of it or if you have any improvements! (The assignment was to write a 14-line poem on being a teenager or tween and to use figurative language...)
Losing Innocence
I watch my childhood disappear,
Turn and see it burn,
Bright embers turn to lifeless coals,
The point of no return.
The bright newfangled phone
Consumes my waking days
What happened to the ancientness
Of simple pen and page?
My thumb flicks constantly
My index finger sore,
But I don't care at all
For childish band-aids anymore.
All this is part of growing up
A process we might hate,
But when it's fully finished,
You'll see what is your fate.
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Ok, yeah, it's pretty dark but at least it fits the requirements...The lines 3 and 4 of the third stanza didn't used to have the "at all" in it.
Anyways, I tried my best!
(February 5, 2023 - 6:58 pm)
A very silly poem which I made up when we went to the bank ATM the other day and my dad was trying to get the receipt out of its slot.
I ripped my receipt in half -
'Twas a silly thing to do;
But you see, the trouble was,
It stuck in its slot like glue.
So I pulled and I pulled my receipt
And out of its slot it came:
But I'm afraid that after that
It never was the same.
(February 6, 2023 - 9:29 pm)
Jay: This is a beuatiful poem! Chaser always does that, rips the reciept too early and rips it right in half! I spelled baeutiful wrong! Hmm, maybe I'll write a poem on how I can never spell buaetiful correctly! Anyways, I love the way it rhymes and also makes sense! Whenever I try to make a rhyming poem I can never make it make sense because I'm too busy making it rhyme.
Chaser: This is true. I've read all his poems. Anyways, it is a truly wonderful poem. And I have no doubt that Jay will memorize it and recite it to me every time I rip my reciepts.
Jay: Ooo, what a great idea! Hehehehehehe.
~Chaser & Jay
P.S. Knowt says [ thzpp ]. I think he's blowing a raspberry at us.
(February 7, 2023 - 9:59 am)
Jay: Hehe I wrote that poem about being unable to spell the word 'bueatiful.' It's a limerick! Here it is:
There once was a boy named Jay.
His spelling was okay.
But though his effort was indisputable,
He never could spell 'beuatiful,'
And still can't to this very day.
Jay Again: The rhythm is off, I think because the third line is too long. I wrote a different version, where it is one syllable shorter, but it doesn't make quite as much sense. Here it is:
There once was a boy named Jay.
His spelling was simply okay.
But though he was ever so dutiful,
He never could spell 'beuatiful,'
And still can't to this very day.
Still Jay: Anybody have any tips? Any alternate versions of the third line (which is still too long, even in the second version)?
~Chaser & Jay
(February 7, 2023 - 10:15 am)
"There once was a boy named Jay
Whose spelling was just okay,
Alas, ever so dutiful
Still, never could he spell Beuatiful
Indeed, he cannot to this very day."
In my head this comes out as a lovely little song, so it's a shame you can't send any voice recording or anything like that. :/ Anyway, how is it? Better, or maybe not?
(February 17, 2023 - 9:49 pm)
Nostalgia brings the undertow
nothing makes me so overwhelmed as remembering-
drowning among waves of memories i hurt so deeply for,
pinned down by the envy of ignorance
as fuzzy images float innocently by.
a wave collapses upon me, and it is the summer i was seven.
my figure burns a trail through a thousand places; out to the back patio and i am
building empires in chalk with my sister; up the library steps and i am
dragging a canvas bag of a dozen new tales back home; onto the front porch and i am
savoring an ice pop in my pink swimsuit, all to the proud cicada chorus.
my worries melt like snowmen under a sanguine sun.
another surge of water and third grade is in full swing.
memories like swallows dive in and out of their nest; one swoops down and i am
entranced with my teacher’s reading of “Harry Potter”; another glides away and i am
creating a lego fort with three new friends; a third soars upwards and i am
straining to hear the tiny peep from a chick egg, all in a close-knit class of thirteen.
my passion burns like a campfire consuming my thoughts.
the merciless waters spit me out upon the shore-
lungs full of salt and bones weeping for rest as i look up,
the stars so small among the black
as the tide tugs at my aching feet.
(February 11, 2023 - 4:24 pm)
I love this? The imagery, the metaphor, it all gives me life!
(February 12, 2023 - 9:16 pm)
thank you!
(February 15, 2023 - 2:25 pm)
Song of the Dead Queen
A timeless land not far or near,
A clear lake of crystal tears,
A clinic case of cliched fears,
The dead queen sings.
Her voice is strong, a mournful song,
An icy edge for he who wronged,
And now she only sees the lost
And ‘what could have been.’
Her husband, he who loved her so,
Who’d sworn she’d never see him go,
Who’d left of no choice of his own,
Who’d tried until the end, a king.
He’d failed to keep his sacred oath,
And so the queen, grief-swept, she broke,
And empty shell, a heart of stone,
And an abandoned ring.
A tortured grin was on her face,
And ev’ry body makes mistakes.
She found a cliff, and in her place,
A razed blackland, dead kings.
The story told about that here,
Of caves that drip with crystal tears,
A woman driven by her fear,
The dead queen sings.
(February 12, 2023 - 9:26 pm)
This is such a gorgeous poem! I love the ambiance~ <3
(February 14, 2023 - 9:22 am)
your rhythm is amazing, i love this so much. it seems so chant-like.
(February 26, 2023 - 8:26 pm)
fingers crossed the spacing will work ahh
roseate
one: render me perfect and shining.
i am your knight in white armor. i will love you
behind fired skin and paper eyes perfect like first snow
which i have never really seen. i will defy my very porcelain nature
and be unbreakable, for you.
two: draw in my depth.
color in the brown behind my skin
lace it with gold mother of pearl i will be
so beautiful. you paint me into existence
adding the light and color until i am
positively scintillating.
three: watch me try to take shape without you
clay without the hands to sculpt it i’ll fall down.
again and again and again bloom blood-red on a dove-chest
right over the heart
four: cross me out completely.
i am a fallen knight. i cannot love you
painted red and positively scintillating
too colorful. too much. i am not who you once thought i was
and god, do i have too much to say
five: i am myself crossed out or wholely yours
i am your masterpiece and the spraypaint ungraciously slashed across it
do you still find me beautiful
i would still be yours first and mine second if i dipped my
self in vermilion ripped off my armor and bled all over the page
would you still want me.
six: if you paint me over white again
i will still be roseate scarlet shining through the ivory
and still beautiful. hello love
i wanted to be something you’d never seen before
say something worth hearing
do you miss me yet. did you think i was pretty
in white or red or iridescent and positively scintillating
maybe i could love you anyways
(February 13, 2023 - 10:45 pm)
OH MY GOODNESS LUMI-
This is incredibly beautifully written- the details and repetition and the feelings it all goes so perfect together!! The spacing also worked very very well. Thank you for sharing this incredible piece with us!! <333
(February 14, 2023 - 11:58 am)
THANK YOU AHH
it worked *mostly* it was a a little different when i originally wrote it but i'm glad it worked out at least this much ahaha
(February 15, 2023 - 6:27 pm)
i don't have words this is absolutely gorgeous
(February 14, 2023 - 12:41 pm)