Poetry Contest
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Poetry Contest
Poetry Contest
Well, we haven't had one of these in a while, have we? Time for a new one, I say! Welcome, resident poets!
The rules are pretty simple. I am the first judge. I will give you a theme, and you must write a poem relating to the theme. Be creative with your interpretations! I will then judge the entries by a set date, and the winner will then be the next judge, and set the next theme. And so on, and so forth.
The first theme will be... *dramatic drumroll*
Stars! Whether you chose to write about the kind of stars you wish on, or the kind that take the stage, I will be eagerly awaiting your sparkly, shiny, beautiful poems. Have them in by... Saturday, March 18. Two weeks. Sound fair?
I hope to see your poems soon!
~Booksy <3
(March 4, 2017 - 8:58 pm)
I just wrote this poem down approximately an hour ago, but I've had the idea for a while. And Stardust, I tried to follow your advice.
It is
Visits to the beach
When the sea is clear
and
Warm summer days when the sky is
Empty of clouds
and
Small puddles,
Shining under the bright sunlight.
It is
Tears rolling down the face
Of a person you love
and
Huge waves roiling,
Swallowing sailors at sea
and
A small flower, crushed
Under an angry shoe.
(March 25, 2020 - 2:17 pm)
blue is beckoning from every corner--
calling out as buds steadily explode into blooms,
whispering from frostbitten lips of arctic explorers who have followed her siren serenade
like ship captains used to do until they grew too old to find answers to her call
and their grandchildren looked to her sister above instead (she sung them to sleep
and they dreamed of wings, but when their eyes opened they could not see) sky had always been but mirror to sea;
winds to her tides, shamayim to her mayim, unlimited height to her infinite depths
like crystalline refractions along the horizon line
where storms are brewing crooked blue shocks worthy of god-kings (see how loud her voice can be?)
but gods are built in the image of your body, lightning in your branching electric veins, teal tides in your heartbeat, blue bronchi like the reflection of trees in each breath you take (for her call fills the air)
blue hides, and still she inspires,
lying secreted away deep under the hot desert,
sparkling from eyes in love poems
scribbled away in hard-won notes
in frost, she hides blooms and viruses and a ratio worth its weight in ultramarine,
a formula for perfect infinite spirals
for cornflowers and beryl
for a path of glowing stars, teeming with worlds like so many blue marbles,
for the shells before you;
pick one up. hold it to your ear.
can you hear
the call of the blue?
(March 25, 2020 - 5:03 pm)
Ooh, I like the Hebrew! (And the whole poem, I mean, but the Hebrew stood out to me.)
(March 25, 2020 - 5:49 pm)
Thanks so much! (You have no idea how many times I rewrote those lines to work it in, I really wanted to use it :))
(March 25, 2020 - 7:29 pm)
Escape~
Surrounded.
can't escape-
mind wrapped around
you. your memory
is around, but you are not.
tears flood, pile on the
floor, sticking together
like we used to.
puddle collects like
an ocean in a storm.
i am pulled under
the tide
can't escape-
my legs and arms
are weak from
the sadness
can't escape-
there is nowhere
to go. i cannot
find you. icannot be
with you. The cold
is all i feel.
a wind blows
and wraps me tightly
as if it were
a blanket.
can't escape-
but you slipped
through my fingertips.
you escaped this
world. if only i could
be less blue.
if only i could join you.
(March 26, 2020 - 12:13 pm)
I made a few edits to my poem. If I post it hear would it count to the contest, or will my original poem be judged?
(March 26, 2020 - 1:02 pm)
I think you can submit a revised version, as long as you clarify which one you want judged.
(March 28, 2020 - 10:39 am)
Ok so I'm not really a poet but let's give it a try.
BLUE is the color i feel when you turn away
from me and
don't let me say what i want to.
BLUE is the color of the sky on the day i first met you
and it is the color
of the BFF necklace you gave me.
BLUE is what i feel when i see you
prancing around or playing with your hair
and i think
where is the real you?
where is my old best friend?
now you only care about
popularity
and the boys that talk to you.
you said you would kill for my eyelashes,
and that is a problem.
because
you shouldn't be killing people
well obviously
but "pretty" isn't all that matters.
you're pretty, sure,
but why do you care?
why do you use that?
and act like all the boys are crushing on you and could only be crushing on you?
BLUE is the color the new you makes me feel
like i never learned to swim
and the depths are swallowing me,
the BLUE is a lake
of currents with shadows and depths
and your new self
is pushing me
into the BLUE
where i don't belong.
(March 26, 2020 - 2:25 pm)
All right! I felt inspired, so I have an entry!
All that remains
I love the blue of the sky.
Silken summer days float by
on puffy sunlit clouds
and flocks of birds are black arrows
against the gorgeous,
tangible spread of cerulean.
I love the endless arch of it
as I lie on my back
counting clouds
and tasting the heavens.
And when the sky fades
into the space that hovers
on the edge of it
the blue will be all that remains.
i love the blue of the sea.
Crisp foam crests the tips of breakers
and dark pebbles coat the bottom
as a bed of onyx beneath
the indescribable churning waters.
I love the glowing sheen
as it ripples in the sun
and the caps and crests
that catch the light in the wind.
And when the sea dries to silt
soaked up by the hot, dusty light
the blue will be all that remains.
I love the blue of your eyes.
Years and decades pass by undisturbed
under your silent, watchful gaze
and oceans swirl in your irises
drawing you underwater to your own world.
I love how they fade to green
on the outer edges
and preserve crowns of gold
that curl around your pupils.
And when your being is consigned to the darkness,
when your lashes touch for the final time--
the blue will be all that remains.
(March 27, 2020 - 4:46 pm)
I absolutely love this! Your description is so amazing. Like, “Crisp foam crests the tips of breakers.” It makes me feel refreshed. I don’t know how you do it. It’s just... ahhhh.
*rereads poem into eternity*
(March 28, 2020 - 12:28 pm)
Thank you so much! I'm happy you like it.
(March 29, 2020 - 9:55 pm)
Okay, this is the poem I want to be judged:
Visits to the beach when the
Sea is clear
and
Warm summer days when the sky is
Empty of clouds
and
Small puddles,
Shining under the bright sunlight
but-
Trears rolling down the face
Of a person you love
and
Huge waves roiling,
Swallowing sailors at sea
and
A small flower, crushed
Under an angry shoe
(March 31, 2020 - 8:20 am)
(April 2, 2020 - 1:35 pm)
You are correct, whoever "It's Judging Day!" was. So, here is your judging. ^.^
Third place: Kitten!
I love how you used line breaks to imitate the waves of the ocean! My favorite lines are "and with each repitition, she feels a piece of her soul slide out / of her, joining the others beneath the waves". However, I kind of feel like the vibe/feel of the first few lines doesn't quite match with what I get from those lines. It was sort of a sudden change between super direct storytelling and super poetic-y imaginary. (Not sure if that's really a bad thing, more just my opinion/observation). You had a really nice ending, though, and you used the prompt very well!
Second place: Stardust!!
Wow. ^.^ I love how you personified blue. That was such a clever use of imaginary, ah. You used line breaks and word choice so effectively to illustrate these pictures in my head. I love the phrases "whispered from frostbitten lips", "teal tides in your heartbeat" and "crystalline refractions on the horizon line". It did get a little hard to follow at times (at least for me), but it still had a clear meaning and was put together beautifully. Amazing job!
And in first place... Summer!!!
I feel like this was really the perfect representation of the prompt. I love how you used three stanzas, all telling about different things that are blue, ending with the same line; that was a really neat way to tie your whole poem together! I love the last few lines, they were just so poetic and finalizing and bittersweet and ah. You described all three things so beautifully and really brought them to life. Like Kitten said, I could read this into eternity. <3
Amazing job to all of you! You all used the prompt so differently, and it was funto read all of your different takes on it.
(April 2, 2020 - 7:36 pm)
Congratulations, you totally deserved to win!! Can you choose a new prompt?
(April 4, 2020 - 2:17 pm)