Poetry Contest
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Poetry Contest
Poetry Contest
Well, we haven't had one of these in a while, have we? Time for a new one, I say! Welcome, resident poets!
The rules are pretty simple. I am the first judge. I will give you a theme, and you must write a poem relating to the theme. Be creative with your interpretations! I will then judge the entries by a set date, and the winner will then be the next judge, and set the next theme. And so on, and so forth.
The first theme will be... *dramatic drumroll*
Stars! Whether you chose to write about the kind of stars you wish on, or the kind that take the stage, I will be eagerly awaiting your sparkly, shiny, beautiful poems. Have them in by... Saturday, March 18. Two weeks. Sound fair?
I hope to see your poems soon!
~Booksy <3
(March 4, 2017 - 8:58 pm)
she picks a pebble off the ground, grey as a cold sky
she brushes dirt off, sets it gently in her palm
what is life, she thinks, but a cracked pebble that thinks it's special?
nevertheless, she threads a chain through it, and wears it around her neck
life, she figures, may as well be enjoyed
she bakes bread and eats it,
she picks berries and talks to her friends
she stares at the ceiling and whispers the things she's only ever thought
then she takes it off to shower and it stays there, on her bathroom counter
the flourescent light shuts off,
she goes to sleep.
the next morning, she knocks it off the counter
it falls on the floor amid cobwebs and dust
she contenplates saving it, but she might be late for work
she leaves it lying there, dirtier than before.
but it was beautiful while it lasted.
perhaps that's worth the ending.
(August 23, 2023 - 4:43 pm)
I. Love. This. So. So. So. So. So. *says infinite sos* MUCH!!!!!
beautiful interpretation and thoughts and symbolism and execution and conclusion!! Very true, too. You gotta enjoy it while it lasts! And maybe, even that little bit, is worth the end.
(August 23, 2023 - 7:37 pm)
This is far from my best work but I wanted to enter something for this contest.
the silent sparrow
it’s small,
smaller than it should’ve been,
lying there on the cracked concrete
beside the curb
as cars barrel by without a thought,
clouds of exhaust like
smoky ghosts,
forever haunting the city streets.
its soft white underside is what first caught her eye,
a sort of vulnerability there’d never have been in life.
its wings, a brown and black tapestry,
curl around it, like some
mock funeral shroud,
and its talons forever claw at the air,
rendered in lifeless stone.
its beak glints like a dull, rusted sword—
useless, now, but reminiscent of the
conquest it might’ve led.
a warm august breeze rustles the feathers on its chest—
if she squinted she could pretend it was still
alive,
breathing,
but it isn’t, of course.
she picks a golden wildflower,
delicate petals like silken sun rays,
growing from a crack in the sidewalk,
places it upon the bird’s naked white chest,
bows her head, solemn
as a churchyard angel
made of stone,
or perhaps as a humble peasant
being knighted by a noble king.
after a moment, she stands up,
walks away,
and the bird remains.
and life goes on.
(August 23, 2023 - 5:04 pm)
What?! This is AMAZING!! I loved every second of it!! Although... the ending was a bit... meh. Sorry. I know. Critique? Coming from me? About a poem that I really, truly love (ACKK I LOVE THIS POEM IT'S PERFECT IN EVERY WHICH WAY (except for you know which one but some matters can't be helped (unless you do! Help it, that is. It's just I feel like it was a bit too cliche)) AND (switching out of caps lock for easier readability, not cuz I'm any less enthusiastic about this) each little description in here is so delicate, so fragile, painting a whole easily accessible world, and your observations and thoughts are spot-on and just what this needs (I especially love "a sort of vulnerability there would've never been in life" and "clouds of exhaust like/smoky ghosts,/forever haunting the city streets.") and your spacing is absolutely perfect as always!!!) written by a poet I totally, absolutely enjoy (imagine. In my English class, they'll be like "who's your favorite poet?" and I'll be like "Pangolin" and they'll be like "who???"! That'd be funny. But you are (I'd probably be too shy to say that though)!). But yeah. Otherwise, I LOVE THIS!!! Not otherwise. I DO love this!! Thanks for sharing! :)
(August 23, 2023 - 7:51 pm)
I want to compliment on this dazzling poem but Celine up there has already said it all(or at least, most of it) in a very enthusiastic manner, so meanwhile, I'll just float here emitting silent radio waves of amazement into space and wonder how you write beautiful poetry like this.
Wow.
(August 24, 2023 - 5:46 am)
Hm, I actually like that little "letdown" at the end.
Life often feels big and overwhelming and dramatic, but when you take a step back or when everything's all over, much of it can actually feel rather anticlimactic. It might not be a "good feeling" per se, but I still quite like the almost vapid effect it incurs, one that sharply contrasts with the imagination and creativity that's present the rest of the poem.
It's interesting, and requires quite a bit of skill of its own to do so gracefully! Great job, pangolin!
(August 23, 2023 - 11:46 pm)
Oh my... huh, that's a really interesting take on that! Wow! So actually now I agree with you bc I love love love how you interpreted and explained that, so now the poem has no flaws. Ignore my previous comment please!
(August 24, 2023 - 9:31 am)
Thank you all for the compliments and critique! I always enjoy hearing different interpretations of my work. You all have wonderful poems as well!
(And wow, Celine, am I really one of your favorite poets? That's such a huge compliment, thank you so much!)
(August 25, 2023 - 6:30 pm)
Life is meant to be real,
Full of feels and smells and sensations:
So many strive for authenticity,
Chasing 'organic,' 'all-natural' and 'freedom'
We are appalled by the barbarousness of the wild,
Yet lust after her serene sheen of youth and animation
Whilst also pumping the planet full of plastic,
Smothering her oceans in oil,
Coating her pores in asphalt,
Drilling and scraping away her organs for her limited resources, and
Hunting her vivacious spirit through the forest
Until there is no tree nor stag nor wild at all.
We leave nothing but destruction in our wake.
After all, we are the type to feverishly take and take and take.
Taking, taking. Always taking. Only ever taking.
Only then do we toss our refuse,
Our waste, our broken dreams and lost causes, our death
Filling her stomach with rubbish and pretending it to be our thanks --
Such a cheap repayment for the life she has given us;
The life she so painstakingly breathed into existence,
The small spark she patiently kindled into a raging inferno,
Sacrificing her time and body, nurturing us
Until we have no choice but to thrive
But oh, do us humans hate to thrive.
We court our vices so dearly, starstruck yet terrified
Of what lies beneath our flesh and bone and blood --
It is so hard to look past those things, though
So we turn our wrathful frustrations out at all those around us;
Ourselves, our neighbors, our planet.
As if we detest her for birthing our sorry selves,
We strangle the shine out of the Earth who raised us.
No more sights or smells or sensations.
No more freedom or nature or realness.
Not after all we've done to steal her flame,
To take it as our own,
Only to douse it in our pathetic, damp, heavy mass of sins.
Do we really deserve the life we so often trample on?
Can we truly claim to live when it is at the expense of all others?
(August 24, 2023 - 12:19 am)
Hey Moon Wolf, just a reminder, it's judging day! No pressure, though :)
(August 27, 2023 - 4:24 pm)
These poems were so hard to judge, as they were all so good. It was quite nice reading all of them, and I enjoyed them a lot...
Honorable Mentions (of course, in no particular order):
BookGirl!
I really enjoyed how your poem questions what life means, and the examples of certain precious moments that capture what a person's meaning in life could be. I also enjoyed how you leave a question for readers to ponder, as something similar to what was listed or something completely different. Good job!
CelineBurningBright!
You truly captured the topic of life in this poem, showing how you can live in the world however you want, as it is yours to make. I especially enjoyed your descriptions in the beginning and how you described life as an energy "Crackling, leaping, jolting / Me". And the ending gives me a determined feeling, about how you should continue living for your purpose. Amazing!
Hawkstar!
I liked how you showed a life throughout your poem, from a childhood to the teens to adulthood and lastly as an elder. I enjoyed how throughout the childhood, you showcased a feeling of carefreeness and freedom, and in teens, you showed a scene of hanging out with friends and reading, slowly growing out of childhood, and as an adult, you revealed a family, and lastly, you showed a more thoughtful stage of any dream "to come true / for you", which I especially enjoyed.
WordSong!
I loved the way you showed a girl thinking about life, and as she goes throughout her day, it is portrayed in a gloomy-kind of light. You showed a kind of feeling of life being short and unappreciated, "but it was beautiful while it lasted. / perhaps that's worth the ending." That part was my favorite, as it really made me think about how life is beautiful, and maybe it's worth the death in the end. Awesome job!
Sylvazia!
Wow. I really liked how you portrayed rain and water as life, as an essential for everything. I also enjoyed the metaphorical meaning to it, of how although rain/life may seems gloomy, it's also a part of it. I especially enjoyed the lines, "Though some may hope for warm days / Sunny, and hot days / What gives us life is the water, those hard days where the sky is gray." It really shows how life grows out of not the easy and enjoyable times, but the harsh times when it looks more bleak. I loved this take on the topic.
Third Place:
Jaybells!
Throughout the poem, you showcase how the Earth is unappreciated, trashed by humans. I loved the way you come to question the way we treat life, and the environment, about how we take away from the Earth and, "Only then do we toss our refuse, / Our waste, our broken dreams and lost causes, our death / Filling her stomach with rubbish and pretending it to be our thanks --" I like the way you show Earth as a sort of being that we should enjoy and protect. Really great job!
Second Place:
Pangolin!
This poem is truly amazing. I really enjoyed the way you made your poem based on the topic, of how it focuses on a lifeless sparrow, and your descriptions on a what could've been of the sparrow's life. I loved the last few lines, "walks away, / and the bird remains. / and life goes on." It shows how although there may be loss in life, it still goes on nonetheless, without it. Again, truly amazing.
First Place:
Ultimatum!
This poem feels professional. I loved what you did with the topic of life, of how you depict people wanting to move faster, in a way like through life, and on how it is useless to just cast it away when all will move on eventually. My favorite part is, "Can you make out / the lantern fading into the night / Can you laugh at me / wave goodbye to the person not standing in the light / I stride away by the side of the Styx / with sorrows and joys in my mind unfixed". This poem is really meaningful, and I love the description that went in with it. Congratulations! You're the next judge! :D
(August 27, 2023 - 5:54 pm)
Thanks for the compliments! :))))))) I really liked reading everyone's poems. Congrats, Ultimatum!
(August 27, 2023 - 6:46 pm)
Thanks so much, Moon Wolf! It means a lot <33 Congrats Ultimatum! Your poem was gorgeous. Everyone wrote such beautiful poems! <333
(August 27, 2023 - 6:53 pm)
Thanks! And, everyone was really absolutely amazing here (I kept on thinking, WHAT?! This person only got an HONORABLE MENTION?! WHAT?! This person only got THIRD PLACE?! WHAT?! This person only got SECOND PLACE?! WHAT?! The person who got first place has a poem that's so amazing I can't argue with the other ones not getting first place?! WHAT?!? THERE SHOULD'VE BEEN A THOUSAND FIRST PLACE POSITIONS!! Alas, that is not how contests work)!! Congrats Ultimatium and well done everyone!
(August 27, 2023 - 11:14 pm)
haha I also would've wanted to put them all in first place, but alas, I must pick one person.
(August 28, 2023 - 7:10 pm)