NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!

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NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!

NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!

I really, really wanted to enter this month's poetry contest (sweetness is a...) but then I looked at my magazine and realized the deadline was TODAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Cry I actually started crying. (I know, I'm a crybaby) . Since I could not enter, I guess I'll post it here.

Sweetness is a Tabby Cat

by SusyQ* 

 

With her rough tongue

She grooms her soft self,

Slicking down fur

Of liquid silver, molten gold. 

She finishes, blinks

With her large jade-green eyes;

She yawns, and her teeth

Are sharp ivory points;

She stretches her paws

With their smooth ebony pads;

She twitches her nose, and resuming her doze,

She purrs-

Gently...Sweetly...

Smooth pearls of sound.

I smile, and I stroke

The warm head on my lap.

I will treasure this moment

Forever.

 

Does it seem a little  forced, anyone? Opinions are welcome. If I tune it to perfection, maybe it will be published in some other kids magazine.

 

I love the poem, SusyQ! I'm so sorry you missed the deadline. Actually, when the deadline (always the 25th) falls on a weekend or holiday, we accept whatever arrives in the next business day's mail. But that would be Monday. Please watch the deadline and enter next time!

Admin

submitted by SusyQ, *not my actual name
(September 25, 2011 - 8:28 pm)

back to the Inkwell

I like it! I think it would be better if you removed the words, "soft" and "large", you should see how that sounds, but yeah it's nice!

submitted by Emily L.
(September 25, 2011 - 11:40 pm)

=^..^=

~TOP~

I liked the meter with 'soft and 'large', but I could probably find a synonym for either of them. 

=^..^= 

submitted by SusyQ
(September 26, 2011 - 8:13 pm)

I really like it! I don't think it sounds forced at all. It really conveys the sweetness of a tabby cat, if that makes any sense. The only thing you could change would be the ending.

submitted by Alexandra, age XII, Never Land
(September 26, 2011 - 11:41 pm)

That was my favorite part...

Spammythecat says tunr. Turn? Turn from what?

=^..^= 

submitted by SusyQ
(September 28, 2011 - 5:29 pm)

Perhaps  Spammythecat meant Tuna, not Turn.

submitted by Alex, age 10, East TN
(November 7, 2011 - 10:51 am)

i love ur story it was great but i think you should not use largeLaughing

submitted by brooklyn gibson, age 10, ohio
(September 27, 2011 - 9:38 am)

Cry I agree with u. That is sooooo sad! But if this month`s contest was a poem, u should enter (April 2012) 'cause your poem is awesome. Laughing 

PS. i LOVE smileys.

submitted by Elizabeth F., age 9, Raleigh, NC
(April 21, 2012 - 8:28 am)