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[This is for Choco's theme of the week]
I live in the future on earth. Where I live you can not have more than two kids. I am a first born. I have a younger sister and a younger brother. My younger brother is the third child. My parents kept all of us a secret from the world, until I turned twelve, when they asked me if I would let my sister and brother step out of the shadows. It would mean that I would have to, forever, live in the attic. I said yes.
My parent's knew a family with three children. The third child, Lucas, is the same age as me. We've become the best of friends.
Somehow I have a fake I.D. card, and so does Lucas. But he is not with me now at this moment, so he is not important yet.
Now I am in a beat-up, old car with a Population General, my mortal enemy. I have just saved his life. He was about to get shot when I jumped into this car and drove us away. I am with my friend Matt who is eleven. Our two other friends, Perci and Alya, are hurt, but they are misisng. Matt and I are going to become Population Generals to see if we can find our friends.
"Thanks...so...much," the Population General pants. " Call...me...Tiddi."
He had taken over driving the car a while ago, and he stopped suddenly and turned around. He looked me over, and then said something to the effect of how I was cute. I rolled my eyes. If only he knew that I was an Illegal. I turned on my ear plug, and then a whole screen popped in front of me, me the only one who could see it. I began to use my eyes to write out this whole entry, so if someone finds my earplug, (If it happens to fall out.) they will figure out what it is like to be an Illegal.
I have to finish this first entry now. Matt just gave me a look that said, pay attention. Goodbye. Let us hope this is not my last entry.
Always with love,
Gracella
submitted by Gracella, age 15-I think, In the car with
(February 4, 2011 - 5:22 pm)
(February 4, 2011 - 5:22 pm)
Here we are.
It was easier then I expected. All we had to do was get into a uniform. Matt and I have to pretend to be brother and sister. We also have to fake our ages. Matt is "thirteen" and I am "seventeen."
Tiddi went back to the crime scene, where the people who were shooting were. Matt and I are lounging in the cafeteria where our friend Nani is pretending to be a cafeteria lady. Nani is the same age as me, fifteen.
We are sitting with a guy named Mick. Mick is friends with Tiddi. Mick keeps looking at me strange and whistling. What is that supposed to mean?
Matt and I are supposed to meet Nani in the bathroom by the front door.
We will have to wait and see what that is about.
Always with love,
Gracella
(February 5, 2011 - 11:31 am)
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(February 5, 2011 - 6:51 pm)
Tiddi is dead.
It happened suddenly. I was standing outside of the bathroom waiting for my turn to speak to Nani. Matt was in the bathroom talking to Nani. I was standing outside to: #1- keep watch, and #2- it was so it wouldn't look like Matt and I were going into the bathroom together. Nani had gotten in by climbing through air vents in the wall.
Anyway, I was standing outside of the bathroom when all of a sudden Tiddi popped out of nowhere.
"We defeated them!' Tiddi said excitedly, "in the woods where Matt and you rescued me....we burned down everything in a 5-mile radius!"
I was worried. Our friend who is a doctor, Mrs. Kabot, was hiding behind the trees when Matt and I escaped.
The last time we saw Perci and Alya was in the woods close to where we escaped.
Perci and Alya and Mrs. Kabot and the rebels, who were shooting, are dead.
Then Tiddi opened the bathroom door. Nani was nowhere in sight. Matt was standing in the center of the room. Tiddi told his news to Matt.
That was when Tiddi started spazing out. He rubbed his eyes and screamed, " I CAN'T SEE! I CAN'T BREATH!" He falls onto the floor and gasps his final breath.
Tiddi is dead.
"Poison," the emergency people say. "Poisonous I.D. cards that he and his friends had found in the woods."
Tiddi and Perci and Alya and Mrs. Kabot and the rebels are dead.
I fall to ground by Tiddi's side. I weep.
Now I weep and write this entry. I am lucky that ear plug screens are invisible.
But yet I am not lucky.
Always with love,
Gracella
(What do you think about it?)
(February 5, 2011 - 7:15 pm)
I think it's good, but it sounds an awful lot like the Shadow Children series. Even the names are the same! Maybe you could make it a tad bit more your own... but your writing is wonderful.
(February 7, 2011 - 4:53 pm)
What is the Shadow Children Series? I don't want to know- sorry if I happen to be copying a book that is already published!
(February 8, 2011 - 7:28 pm)
Wait... what? You are writing this and have no idea what the Shawdow Children series is? that cannot be possible. You are copying the story nearly perfectly! (not that that's a bad thing, I'm just saying...) Sorry, are you the same as Gracella? Gracella, have you read the Shadow Children? What's going on here! *dramatic gestures* :)
(February 9, 2011 - 1:09 am)
Oh, I think I get it now. Is Choco "Sorry" who is apologizing for making a new theme that's already a book? And then Gracella is just copying that book? That sounds reasonable... Sorry, The Shadow Children Series is basically what Gracella is describing here.
(February 9, 2011 - 1:11 am)
I am just starting the last book in the Shadow Children Series, so I know what it is about.
(February 9, 2011 - 8:10 pm)
I think Gracella was knew here on Chatterbox. She might have left already, not knowing what this website is.
(February 9, 2011 - 8:11 pm)
Yeah... this is kinda strange. It's a new theme, so Gracella, show yourself!! :) I just want to know if she realized she was copying the Shadow Children, because "Sorry" didn't know what they were... weird. She HAS to know what the Shadow Children are, though, because Gracella is even using the same names!!! Choco, I was VERY DISAPPOINTED in the last book in that series, just to let you know. :P It's awful. A terrible ending. Probably worse than the Hunger Games ending. Awful. *rambles on about awfulness*
(February 9, 2011 - 9:03 pm)
Don't tell me!
(February 10, 2011 - 4:41 pm)
Admins, I drew some pictures on this website of my characters. It is for drawing pictures on the computer.
I'm sorry, Gracella, but we can't post the links to your artwork. It's our policy not to post addresses of any other sites, because we can't control the content there and there may be advertising for products we don't endorse.
Admin
(February 6, 2011 - 2:20 pm)
That's okay.
(February 8, 2011 - 7:29 pm)