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This is a poem! I'm really Autumn, Meadow's sis, but I just wanted to make up a name. ((From Medd: She could have bee Karamel, like Kake and Koffee, but she chose Caramel instead.))
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Seasons
The trees are grren
The sky is blue
The sun is looking down at you
It's hot as can be
Look at me, I'm sweaty
The sky is blue
The trees ar green
The flowers are blooming everywhere
The trees are swaying here and there
The leaves are falling from the trees
Colors you can see
From the brightest greens
To the darkest oranges and reds
Red falling onto my head
It is cold,
Crystals falling from the sky
What would it be like
If I could fly?
The trees are white
As you can see
I like to sit here under them, under the trees.
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Hope you like it. I just sat on the couch singing something, so, that's how I made it up.
submitted by Caramel, age 9, In this room in
(June 11, 2010 - 11:10 am)
(June 11, 2010 - 11:10 am)
Why wil no one look at this!?!???!
(June 14, 2010 - 8:25 am)
Hi everyone, I'm back to posting again!
That's a nice song, Caramel! I really like the pictures. Just one suggestion, maybe you can put something connecting the lines, 'what would it be like if I could fly' and the next lines, so people know what flying has to do with, 'chrystals falling from the sky', and 'the trees are white'.
(June 15, 2010 - 8:31 am)
Thank you, but I'm just gonna keep it as it is. It's weird. I like it weird.
(June 15, 2010 - 10:15 am)
Ok, wierd is good too, sometimes! I didn't think it was really wierd though. I should do as you do and keep my poems, no matter what they sound like, because I just threw one that I didn't like in the trash. Well, that one really didn't make sense, like the sentence, "A banana is nutritionally beneficial to eat because it gives you powers to act like a moose." That's not the poem, that's just an example of the wierdness that tends to randomly leap from my brain.
(June 15, 2010 - 4:59 pm)
I think that is good. You should've kept that one.
(June 16, 2010 - 10:36 am)
That actually wasn't part of the poem. But I did take the poem out of the trashcan and I am going to revise it. Thanks for your support! Maybe I'll post it, when I've revised it and looked it over more.
(June 17, 2010 - 12:45 pm)
Cool! Tell me its name so I can find it when you submit it.
(June 18, 2010 - 7:36 pm)
Well, the only correction I can find is that it should say, "are" instead of "ar".
(June 19, 2010 - 8:51 pm)
NO! YOU ARE NOT CARAMEL!!! HE IS CARAMEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! >_< >_< >_< >_< >_< >_< >_< >_<
[Sorry, Emma and her friends call Heath Ledger "Caramel" for code and so she found this upsetting. If Heath wasn't "Caramel" she would have thought your name quite cool. Don't pay attention to this post. ~The Sane Ones]
(June 20, 2010 - 11:13 am)