A Poem!!!!&n
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A Poem!!!!&n
A Poem!!!!
I Have
sewing up my fingers
With a needle and some thread
Saying that I am
When I'm not really dead
Falling down the stairs,
Hitting my head
Reading a book
That I've already read
Wishing for tears'
That are gone and shed
Not doing what you told me,
Not doing what you said
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And that seems to be the ending. It is really rough right now, but that might change once I polish it. I seem to have lost my talent for writing poems... The poem is about what I've done, in rhymes! Yes, and now, critique!!!!
submitted by Meadow, age 11 , my dad will be
(February 23, 2010 - 1:01 pm)
(February 23, 2010 - 1:01 pm)
I like the first and last set of lines. The middle part left me confused... But I liked it a lot, in a weird way. Keep writing! It was good!
(February 25, 2010 - 6:57 pm)
nice
(January 22, 2011 - 1:31 pm)