Hey!  I'm writing

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Hey!  I'm writing

Hey!  I'm writing a new story about the Ancient Greek Underworld and a Greek girl (I don't know what I'll call her yet) who was enslaved by the Romans.  Right near the beginning of the story, she dies.  She explains about the Greek Afterlife and gets stuck between her newfound real father and the corrupt ghost of her old dad who she knew all her life.  Tell me what you think! If you want a snippet, just post a request and I'll reply as soon as I can. Laughing

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(November 29, 2008 - 10:22 pm)

Wow!

Smile

submitted by Mai K., age 12, Milwaukee
(December 9, 2008 - 9:41 pm)

That is really good, Megan! It definetely sounds like something that I would want to read and not put down. For names, I would pick Corrina.

submitted by Julia, age 12, Oregon
(December 10, 2008 - 1:57 pm)

Wow!  Thanks for the awsome compliment, Julia!  I'm leaning towards Corinna as well, because Elpis is kind of awkward name, and because Zoe means life.  Also, my voice teacher is named Corinna, and I would love to honor her by including her in a story.  I'm working on more of the story, so be paitent.  I'm running low on ideas at the moment though, so it might take a little while to get a brand new idea. 

*hits head on desk to get brain juices flowing*

*falls over on floor, unconsious* Yell

*Ambulance arrives, and carries her off on a stretcher* 

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 10, 2008 - 6:27 pm)

Wow!  Thank you for your awesome compliment!  It's a wonderful feeling to know that someone out there likes your creation.  For names, I'm with you on the fact that I'm leaning toward Corinna.  My most prominent reason is that my Voice and Musical Theatre director is named Corinna, and she is an awesome, witty, trustworthy... Well, you get the picture.  Anyway, I would be honored to include her as a character in my story.  Also, the other two names just don't quite fit. But, getting back on track, I'll post another exerpt as soon as I write it.  My brain is kind of dead right now though, so it may be a little while.

*Hits head on desk in attempt to get brain juices flowing*

*hits to hard and falls to the floor, unconsious*

*ambulance arrives and is carried off in a stretcher*

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 10, 2008 - 8:31 pm)

Oops!  I accidentally posted thst twice.  Sorry about that. Embarassed

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 11, 2008 - 6:15 pm)

Copyrighted by Megan T. , on 12/10/08

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 10, 2008 - 10:02 pm)

Wonderful. I take Greek, and that sounds engaging... 

submitted by Tim C., age 11, PA
(December 10, 2008 - 7:56 pm)

For names: Pandora, Ara, Abellona, Katla, Rhea, Anastasia

Hope this helps! (Yeah, I know a lot about Greek mythology, but I'm loads better with names from Ireland, [used to live there--in Cork!] so, Ireland, Norway, and Russia, and some other Austrian-ish names...Heidi, Liesle,). Hey, if you ever do Norway: Sonia/Sonja/Sonya, Helene, Nina, Kate, Kirsten, and a few boy ones--Tor, Bjorn, Knut, Sven, Lars.  

submitted by Kit Kat
(December 14, 2008 - 3:37 pm)

My brother has a friend named Lars, but don't name anybuggy after him, because he's really mean and annoying (he watches MTV all day, with the volume cranked up, eats all the food in our house, and insults almost every single person at the high school...)

submitted by Paige P., age 12 :), Gorham, Maine
(December 17, 2008 - 8:39 pm)

I don't know...

Maybe I could use him as a mortal tormentor with a small part! Laughing

This is my list of characters so far:

Corinna (finally chose!)- main character; deceased

Pyrrhus- Corinna's (mortal or assumed) father; deceased

Helena- Corinna's mother; deceased

Hades- Corinna's (immortal or true) father, King of Underworld etc.

Primus- common guard who takes Corinna 2 Hades; deceased

 

Hmmm...  I need more characters...  Not to mention a concrete plot!

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 26, 2008 - 8:47 pm)

Whatever you do, make sure he's really annoying! :D

submitted by Paige M., age 12, Gorham, Maine
(January 1, 2009 - 3:02 pm)

Oh, don't you worry about that!

*gets evil grin and wierd look on her face*

*trustworthy dog turns tail and flees*

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(January 18, 2009 - 3:29 pm)

That story sounds good. I'm writing one as well. Well, actually much more than one. I have tons of stories. A new story pops into my brain every day, and I can't stop writing. If I don't put my idea on paper quick, I'll forget about it! Your story seems awesome!Laughing Good luck with it!

submitted by Maggie S., age 12, Minnesota
(December 23, 2008 - 10:41 pm)

Okay, I finally got around to writing more! Tell me what you think! Just for a reminder, Corinna is being led tothe palace of Lord Hades. We start with a description of the palace:

 

It was dreadfully terrifying, seeming to loom malevolently, leering at me as I approached. As appropriate in a world of black, white, and gray, this tomb was made of gray stone, seemingly carved out of the cliff behind it, seamless and smooth. It reminded me of a protruding tooth, gray with age, unwanted and soon to be yanked away. (No? Oh well, at least I tried. Really though, sometimes you mortals are so dull.) My musings were interrupted by a tug on my arm from Primus; I realized that I had been standing still, slack-jawed as I stared at the monstrosity. We continued. Into the castle, through corridors of impenetrable black, the color of hopelessness, the only color around the castle except tombstone gray. Past grimacing gargoyles and demons, harpies and naiads, liars and tricksters. Before I realized, Primus grabbed my arm (again), and spun me into the throne room of Lord Hades, Emperor of Tartarus, King of the Dead.

“Good Evening, Corinna,” said Lord Hades. He was rather imposing, with a gray beard and matching cloak and robe. (I don’t mean that the beard and cloak and robe matched, I mean the cloak and robe matched. Just checking. Really, you mortals can be quite slow.) I searched for a suitable reply.
“How do you know that it is evening, my lord?” I attempted a curtsy, and ended up balancing precariously, frantically avoiding a collision with the ground.
He appeared not to notice as he replied, “I know a great many things. I know of the 15 young children in great danger of death by drowning in a deep lake, much deeper than they believe. I know of the old widow who just pricked her finger on a needle that she borrowed from a jealous neighbor, who poisoned the tip with the saliva of a satyr. I know of —”
I know that this sounds rude, but I sort of dozed off there. I mean, he was just prattling on and on about the demise of random people who I didn’t know. I’m not cold-hearted, to talk about people dying so calmly. It’s just that death in the Land of the Dead is like a candle going out when dosed with water. Also, the way that god talked about death, you would think that he was talking about his favorite birth-day present. Anyway, while I was wandering around aimlessly in my mind, Lord Hades brought me back to the present time and place with and abrupt jolt.
“… I also know of your true parentage.”
What? If I had still been of flesh and blood, my neck would have snapped with the speed and force with which I turned to look at him. My manners forgotten, I demanded “What? What do you mean? I know who created me, who makes up my bloodline! My father, Pyrrhus, and my mother, Helena, are my parents and caretakers! How could it be otherwise? How dare you suggest it could be otherwise!” I was so enraged by the thought, I could have sworn that steam came out of my nostrils.
The look Lord Hades gave me was gentle yet firm. “That is what your mother told you. That is what she believed to be the truth. It is not. You are the offspring of an immortal. He came to your mother in the form of a serpent.” (You know what happened next, so I will spare you the details. If you don’t, close the book, have your older and wiser guardian place it on a high shelf that you can’t reach, and come back in a few years.) “You are of his line. Indeed you are the first he has created.” He broke off suddenly and gazed solemnly into my eyes. I refrained from shuddering. His eyes were blacker than the walls, with no pupils that I could distinguish. Very slowly, he said, “This immortal was no satyr or monster. The immortal was a god, whose golden ichor flows in your veins. You are the descendant of the immortal who possesses the Helm of Darkness. You are my child, daughter of Lord Hades, Emperor of Darkness, King of the Dead, Lord of the Underworld, and I recognize you, Corinna, as my daughter and sole descendant.”
He broke off as I executed a flawless swoon and fainted at his feet. The feet of my birth father, Lord Hades of the Underworld, of the three most powerful Gods in the Universe.

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 29, 2008 - 12:16 am)

Copyrighted by Megan, on Monday, December 29, 2008.

submitted by Megan, age 13, Alagaesia
(December 29, 2008 - 12:18 am)