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Uh, so, I wrote a poem... Any thoughts?
Always where I look
Down beneath the sea
Many forgotten legacies
In the great blue
Nearest to my heart
Soon to sail south
Nowhere to be found
Only sorrow left
Tomorrow is the same day
Perfectly symmetrical
Over the next era
Gone with wind
Gone with light
Everything's the same
Right as my eyes open
Sunset comes.
I think maybe I should have spent more time on it but I like it anyways... So any thoughts? Feedback? Etc?
submitted by poem writer, age poem time, i love poetry
(June 4, 2021 - 10:29 pm)
(June 4, 2021 - 10:29 pm)
I like it!
Sort of mysterious, plus wistful, imagery-driven language... Awesome~
(June 5, 2021 - 12:55 am)
Thank you. I was definitely going for mysterious/secretive, I'm glad that was portrayed in the poem.
(June 5, 2021 - 10:30 pm)
(June 5, 2021 - 2:12 pm)
This is so good. I love this poem. Now I obviously do not know what you meant to convey with your poem, but I personally interpret it as being a metaphor for being stuck in the same boring pattern, day after day... I think this poem could be interpreted in many ways and thats really cool... Anyways I might be back later with more feedback, I have to go now but I definitely have more to say... Anyways it is a very good poem, keep up the great work. :)...
(June 5, 2021 - 10:27 pm)
I like it! Here's a Mother's Day haiku:
Happy Mother's Day! Hooray!
A day celebrating you.
Dusk to dawn eating.
(June 6, 2021 - 10:47 am)
Very nice! I do like the poem, as well as the... layers :)
(June 8, 2021 - 2:13 pm)
Thank you.... I'm so glad you understood its meaning.....
Hopefully some of our recent conversations will help us be more pog. --admin
(June 10, 2021 - 4:07 pm)
Yes you are definitely being more and more pog.... I am genuinely very proud of you for doing all this.
(June 10, 2021 - 7:37 pm)
Ok here is another poem.... I hope everyone enjoys it......
When the sun sets
Everything goes dark
Mist covers the sky
I want to hide
Soon the minsters come
Sneaking in the shadows
Younger than the sun
Over the ground
Until the day,
Quietly singing,
Ugly white light
It watches from above.
Long live the sun
Long lost moon.
(June 10, 2021 - 7:38 pm)
Ooh, I like it! Very pog :D :D is it a sonnet? Or free verse?
(June 10, 2021 - 8:41 pm)
It is free verse... And thank you......
(June 10, 2021 - 9:35 pm)
<3<3
(June 11, 2021 - 12:55 pm)
what's pog?
(June 11, 2021 - 4:12 pm)
it's internet slang for good, cool, awesome, etc. it comes from the abbreviation "play of the game", but people use it much more widely now.
@poem writer, these are great poems! both in their, er, meanings, and actual content!
@admins, I'm very glad you're trying to be more pog :)
(June 11, 2021 - 8:15 pm)