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Okay, so this is my first attempt at one of these poems, and I don't normally write poetry, sooo...yeah.
but I'd love feedback for this!
The Doomed Generation
Our generation is doomed
There is nothing you can do to convince me
We can fix it
when we really look at the problem
We’ve only ever known broken
And even if
Light doesn't shine through the cracks
You can’t tell me
We are enough to fix what has been done
Because
Our greed
Shine brighter than
Our kindness
(now read from bottom to top)
Wow, Annabeth. I think this is a masterpiece!
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submitted by Annabeth C
(August 29, 2018 - 1:39 pm)
(August 29, 2018 - 1:39 pm)
*Tremendous applause* Wow, Annabeth! That's incredible!
Now that I've gotten that out, *Tackle hugs* ANNABEEEETH WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN!tv
(August 29, 2018 - 4:57 pm)
(August 29, 2018 - 8:40 pm)
Thank you so much, I worked really hard on this, and i defintly plan on writing more....but....*Tackle hugs back* ROOOOOOOOOOOGUE! I've been at my school giving tours to new students and sixth graders, I've never hated stairs with more of a passion, but I'm back now!!
(August 29, 2018 - 9:00 pm)
Oh my gosh that is amazing! I think you ought to submit that to someplace for publishing!
(August 29, 2018 - 9:53 pm)
Red! Red! Come look at this!!! *pulls rtp over to look* IT'S AMAZING!!!! I'M CRYING.
(August 30, 2018 - 9:00 am)
That is amazingly clever, Annabeth! It's really good!!!
(August 30, 2018 - 4:31 pm)
Well, now you're back, so it doesn't matter... Unless you plan on disappearing again. *Gives Annabeth a playfully sharp look* Oh and also ASPEN *Pulls Aspen into hug as well* I missed you too! All of the missing CBers are returning!! Now there's only *starts listing off older CBer names* left! *Single tear slides down cheek because I know most of them aren't returning* Winter Firefly... Snazzy44... WHY DID THE IMPERSONATOR WAR HAVE TO HAPPEN???? *Recovers self* And then there's Ice Wolf and her sister... I can't remember all of the names right now... Ugh BUT WHATEVER ABOUT MEMORIES *Hugs Annabeth and Aspen tighter*
(August 30, 2018 - 5:56 pm)
Yeah, I don't plan on disappearing again, but school does start next week for me, so I don't know how active I'll be, but I'm going to try and stay as consistant as I can...also...
She was Useless
Nothing could ever convince her
She was enough
She knew
No one would love her
When people told her
She had her whole life in front of her
She knew
She had little time left
Refusing to believe
She could be helped
A friend constantly reminded her
The truth,
“She had a soulmate”
Was another pitiful lie and
“Never amounting to anything”
Would come to life
Dreams
Merely something to wake from
Living an empty life was
Something that she felt everyday
The thankfulness of life
Had been whisked away by
The sadness inside her
the one line doesn't flow very well, but that's okay.
I'm working on other too, I've recenty gotten really into poetry...
*slips out from hug* like I said before I totally am not planning to disapear, so expect to see much much more of me *gives awkward finger guns* p
Wow, Annabeth! Congratulations on another great poem that has reverse meaning when read backwards.
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(August 30, 2018 - 7:40 pm)
*wails* Don't remind me.
Did you...by any chance...mean...Savvy44x? Um, instead of Snazzy44? Because I don't remember ever knowing or seeing in the back pages a CBer by that name. They sound very similar and...heh. That's just odd.
(August 31, 2018 - 2:14 pm)
I love the trick you did when you read it bottom to the top.
(August 30, 2018 - 6:35 pm)
*claps hands*
That flowed beautifully from back to front!
(August 30, 2018 - 7:08 pm)
I love your second one, Annabeth! It flows really well and it's so beautiful. Both of them are.
Did you consider maybe adding a "that" to the end of the second line? I think it would flow better both ways if you did.
(August 30, 2018 - 10:14 pm)
I didn't think of that, and now that I look back I think it would, Thanks!
(August 30, 2018 - 10:41 pm)
EHMAHGURD I LOVE THEM ANNABETH! I wish I had your poetic skills!
opgv
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING
I am not sure what that means Mor and Harliquin will you please calm down.
*looks at her fellow AEs and sighs*
I feel ya Izzy *pats her back* I feel ya.
(August 30, 2018 - 11:21 pm)
That's really cool--I love reverso poems, and this one's really good!
(August 31, 2018 - 2:12 pm)