THE MOON'S CH

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THE MOON'S CH

THE MOON'S CHILD

I need honest feedback from all of you,

I hope you like it Lia M.

PROLOGUE

Five summer old Luna was curled up whith two wolf pups now this looked odd because she was human and they were wolfs, mean while there was a argument going on between the she wolf nown as Nira and the Alfa Tigred, 

"You can not raise that child she is human" said Tigred "what do you not under stand"

"I dont under stand  why she is just a child"said Nira "what is so wrong about raiseing a human child"

"there is much you do not under stand Nira" 

"may be so but I do no one thing, that she needs me"

"she would grow up fine in the human villige"

"no you dont under stand"

" Nira please when she grows up she will be just like every human, a killer, she will bring nothing but misery to are pack, please listen, Nira please"

"no she is not a threat I have raised her for five summers and she has been nothing but kind"

" I will never put my pack in danger, not even for you, Nira"

"you dont under stand she will die out side the pack" 

"Nira you now that is not true"

"please just listen to me, you have to belive, Tigred please"

"sigh, tell me what is so enportent about her"

"she is a child of are great queen, the Moon"

"if what you tell me is true then let the moon clame the child, if she does then you may keep her if not I will take her to the human villige"

"yes" Nira carried Luna out of the cave placeing her on the long soft grass and said "if Luna is your child then clame her" and her and Tigred waited for some thing to happen, and it did, the moon sent down a ray of light it should have woken up the child but some how it did not it encircled her lifting her gentily of the ground and placed her back down,

Tigred sighed"you may raise the child but when she turns 12 summers you must tell her the truth"

"I under stand Tigred" said Nira

 

well thats all for now I will post the next bit later

Thanks for Reading 

Lia M.

submitted by Lia M.
(January 13, 2017 - 5:27 pm)
submitted by Top!!!!!!!
(April 7, 2017 - 7:05 pm)

Icy could I put your comment on the back of my book when I publish 

submitted by June
(April 7, 2017 - 7:06 pm)
submitted by Top!!!!!
(April 7, 2017 - 7:09 pm)
submitted by Top?
(April 8, 2017 - 10:16 am)

Dude! Your 10 and writing this? The story is beautiful and amazing. Your writing style is very good. Keep it up! I might be able to illustrate... I'll post a pic later. Wow. Just so beautiful Lia!

submitted by Esquire of Rohan , Playing Xbox with Hawkeye
(April 8, 2017 - 12:23 pm)

Thanks!

submitted by June/Lia M
(April 8, 2017 - 2:43 pm)

This. Is. Amazing. Might need a little grammer work needed, need a tad of bit more detail, but other than, this is awesome. Can I draw a picture and send it to you? Working on it right now......Also, can't wait till next part.  

submitted by Zen, age 13, China
(April 8, 2017 - 3:51 pm)

Hand-drawn by Zen. 

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submitted by Zen, age 13, China
(April 8, 2017 - 4:41 pm)

Thanks Zen I love it!

submitted by June
(April 14, 2017 - 9:49 am)

Yes, of course!

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(April 8, 2017 - 5:37 pm)
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(April 13, 2017 - 4:53 pm)