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Hi, CBers. I could use some help. I am trying to write a book, but making millions of Charries is beyond me. I have quite a few, but could use your help. I'm looking at you, Cho Chang! But seriously. Anyone and everyone, please help¡ Here are the Charrie sheets, and below that are the main types of animals I want feel free to make an animal not on the list. The Griffins, Sphinxs, and Pheonixs are the infrequent powerful ones. Please don't make sheets for those unless you really, really want to. If you really, really want to, I guess you can.
Animal species:
Clan:
Good or bad:
Gender:
Name:
Age:
Personality:
Appearance:
Other (powers, relationships, stereotypes):
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Main types of animals: small mammals (squirrels, rabbits, mice), large mammals (horses/deer, cats, dogs, bears), birds, perhaps Griffins, Sphinxs, and/or Phoenix. Underwater animals: Dolphins, whales, turtles, fish. "Evil" animals include foxes, wolves, Sharks, possums, snakes.
Also, I need help worldbuilding. Sorry if this thing is a bit crude, feel free to edit it. Please help, guys! I really appreciate it.
World Building:
History:
Places:
Geography: forest land, underwater seas, below the earth burrows, colonies. There are plains and fields. Deserts are barren, mostly, and on the edge of the world. Distant and out of the way mountains are home to the magical creatures.
Regions:
submitted by I need help, please!
(September 15, 2016 - 7:44 am)
(September 15, 2016 - 7:44 am)
Here is the promised writing! Hope you enjoy. Feedback welcome! A shoutout of thanks to UNSUSPCTINGSTRTL (I'm sorry if I spelled that wrong) for the Genning Starlight Ruins of Plenice! I hope you don't mind that I changed the name up a bit.
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Aurora flew back to the only home she ever knew: the Plenice Ruins of Starlight. She landed abruptly outside of the tumbled down walls, then entered a secret entrance to the deep caves below. Struggling to stay calm, she approached an animal hidden in the shadows.
"Yara. It is time."
The animal did not move. Then, it rasped, "Get Atria! Quickly, quickly."
Aurora bobbed her head in a tight nod and winged off, glowing brightly in the semi-darkness of the cave. She flew through a maze of tunnels, reaching a large, bright room full of ancient treasures. A Phoenix sat in a high golden throne, sitting as still as a statue. Aurora bowed deeply, tucking her wings close to her body, before saying, "O Wise One, please, Yara has sent me-"
The Phoenix said in a sing-song voice, clear and pure, but passionately fired up, "Patience, child. I know. I know why you have come. I know what you will do. I know all things." Atria flared her wings outwards. They burned and shine brighter than fire, for she was fire.
"I will go to Yara." Atria majestically flew out of the cave, illuminating the passageway. Her fire gave off sparks, dropping to the cave floor like shooting stars. Aurora quickly followed her.
(September 27, 2016 - 8:47 pm)
Hum. I love this, I really do, but I'm not getting a feel for the charries -- their personalities, the little quirks they have ... If it's there, it's all been lost on me.
Also, I think you may have too many charries running around at the same time. That might be fine if you could show off their personalities, but otherwise I really can't tell what's going on.
Sorry if this offends, but I like helpful critiziem, and you've asked for it elsewhere, so I figured I should let you know ...
(September 28, 2016 - 11:42 am)
Maybe your right-
Of course she's right.
Not helping, Burt. Anyway, maybe I am trying to juggle too many. But I feel since I've barely begun, I haven't had time to develop the characters yet.
Thanks so much for the advice though! I will keep it in mind. :)
(September 28, 2016 - 4:55 pm)
Glad I could help!
(September 29, 2016 - 4:19 pm)
This is Atria.
(September 28, 2016 - 2:57 pm)
Hmm, didn't show up.
I deleted the art, Daisy, because there was a very faint web address showing in the middle of it. We aren't allowed to post artwork copied from another site. If you created the art yourself, then we can post it if you can delete that address.
Admin
(September 28, 2016 - 5:59 pm)
Ok, let me try again. Thanks, Admins.
(September 28, 2016 - 8:22 pm)
No offence, but I don't see anything. Loving the story! Don't wory about my name. You can call me STRYTLLR like Icy does if you want.
(September 28, 2016 - 5:21 pm)
Ooooh now I see it. Pretty I think that- SILENT! Sorry, my chicken is eating my professional drawing supplies. Silent, you can look at the screen but don't ahfkjzhffkJHvkshf *sighs* type. kjacajbksjh Sorry! I think I might have to aafksjaghaksjfvhyq give you my sajlajbkzx advice later!!!! 235wuagfe7iuf*&(*tf4 uyg
(September 30, 2016 - 7:52 am)
Im so sorry... Read my newest thread on DtE.
(September 30, 2016 - 8:08 pm)