So, this is

Chatterbox: Inkwell

So, this is

So, this is basically the place where you write stories and criticize (nicely!) and compliment other people's stories. Here's my story. 

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Lily walked into the little cottage with plants growing all around it. The old woman inside looked at her through her big, round glasses.

"Yes, dear?"

Lily looked up at her, so nervous that she was trembling, "Um, I've heard stories of you and what you can do. Um, can you..." Her sentence trailed off, unfinished. 

"Why would you want such a thing?"

"It would be a better way to go than... than what's planned." Lily felt tears burning in her eyes, and it was all she could do to keep them from spilling out. Her family was all gone, and what was planned for her was a terrible death. Because, for whatever reason, that's what was done to familyless children. The old woman's ways were better, gentler.

 "My family's gone," was all she said. The old woman understood. 

She fished a small bottle out of a big pouch and handed it to Lily, uncorking it.  

"Here, dear, drink this."

Lily looked at it, and, without hesitation, drank the whole thing down. She sank to the floor, unconcious, and the old woman carried her to the garden, burying her fragile body, happy, knowing that this was what the girl wanted most.

The next morning, a beautiful white lily flower grew out of that spot, alive again, and happy. 

~~~

 

submitted by Alexandra
(July 4, 2016 - 9:48 am)

Sorry, I didn't mean to be rude.

submitted by Hated
(July 8, 2016 - 11:53 pm)

Here's a story.

Army Girl 

I clutched my tray so tightly that my knuckles turned white, surveying the cafeteria in hopes of finding a seat. My black knee-high boots clacked against the linoleum floor as I walked towards an open seat. I set my tray on the table and was about to sit down when a boy slapped his hand down onto the chair.

"That seat's saved," he sneered.

"For who?" I asked, tryng not to sound annoying.

The boy looked at me like I was the dumbest person on Earth. "It's saved."

I picked up my tray and started to go, but the boy wasn't done with me yet. He grabbed my arm and said softly, dangerously, "When I say a seat's saved, it's saved. Got it?" I nodded fearfully and wrenched my arm away from his grip. All the boys sitting at the table laughed.

I turned away, my eyes stinging. My father would be so dissapointed with me, going down without a fight. By now, nearly all the seats were taken. I wove through the maze of tables, not noticing somebody's foot sticking in my path.

Falling. In slow motion, I watched my spaghetti splatter onto my camoflauge t-shirt. Water spilled all over me. A banana that wasn't mine was in my hair. My apple looked much less appetizing on the floor and covered in bruises. 

Hot tears stung my eyes. I tried to get up but my foot slipped on some spilled water and I fell down again. The cafeteria howled with laughter. I was the laughingstock of the school, I was certain. My face burned with shame.

I let out a quiet sob. I saw a girl walking toward me, not hearing the sneers and guffaws coming from her classmates. She smiled at me and held out her hand to help me up. "I'm Lisa," she said. "You can sit with me."

Just then, a seed unearthed itself from deep inside me and planted itself in my heart, quickly growing into a flower. As I took Lisa's hand, I remembered the name of that flower, as if from another lifetime.

Friendship. 

 

submitted by Bookworm
(July 6, 2016 - 5:09 pm)

Wow! That's really good! I really like the ending, it kind of bittersweet. 

submitted by Alexandra
(July 6, 2016 - 8:31 pm)

That is great, Bookworm! I have to agree, it is a bittersweet kind of ending. I could almost imagine myself there... Yep, I would be that girl, no doubt.

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 6, 2016 - 9:26 pm)

Luna.

My name is Luna.

Excitement.

I feel excitement.

The wind whistles in my ears, and it blows into my eyes, making them water. My mother. I see my mother for the first time in a long time.

Then there is a sharp pain in my side, and everything goes dark.

~~~

I wake up on a cold, hard floor. Metal bars are in front of me, and dull concrete makes up the remainder of the other walls. Peering at me from behind the bars is a human.

I had hoped I'd never see one again.

The human smiles. "Hello again, Wolf-2316." 

I growl. It's Dr. Zap. His real name is Dr. Anderson, so says his shiny name tag, but I call him Dr. Zap ecause he tasers me. Tasersing hurts. A lot.

"Why?" I ask. "Why did you strip me from my mother again?" But of course, Dr. Zap hears my question as a series of barks and growls. "Oh hush," he snaps unsympathetically. "You'll see you mother again." He pauses dramatically. I hate it when he does that. "When I'm done testing you." 

Ugh.

I hate his 'tests'. More like torture. 

to be continued... 

 

 

submitted by BumbleBuddy, age Ageless, Nowhere
(July 6, 2016 - 8:02 pm)

BumbleBuddy, that is a very interesting story you have going there! It is rare to see a book in the perspective of an animal, particularly a wolf. I love it! The only suggestion - unless you intended it to seem this way - is to possibly cut the repeating parts at the beginning? It doesn't repeat word for word. But for instance, the first and second sentences sound really similar. But overall, I love the idea!

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 6, 2016 - 9:30 pm)

Wait, this sounds like something that people on Kyngdom woud really like a lot. You could have a huge audience with things like this there.

submitted by Gared
(July 7, 2016 - 10:56 am)

I really like the beginning where there is that repetition. I think it sounds really nice and it's a good beginning. 

submitted by Alexandra
(July 7, 2016 - 8:36 pm)

Story; Why Run, inspired by Daft Punk's "Harder Better Faster Stronger"

“Why run?” the sadistic voice whispers through the room. The genius. The warrior. The magician. The liar. The thief. All fighters against the voice that was now speaking to them.

The fighters were in a metal room, if the corrugated iron box they stood in could be called a room. Exits lead out, but to where?

“Ah, my pretty birds in the cage of steel. You know what I need. Give it to me.” The voice sounded again.

“Never.” The warrior glared at the walls, defiance his only agenda.

“Well then, pretty birds. The only thing that scares birds are those who take a likeness to them.” The drawling, elaborate voice of the captor wafted down to the captives as they cowered in the corner.


submitted by Gared
(July 7, 2016 - 10:57 am)

nice! 

submitted by Elmodaisy
(July 7, 2016 - 6:23 pm)

Listen to the song, and you will get what I mean.

submitted by Gared
(July 7, 2016 - 6:42 pm)

I love it! It reminds me a lot of the Maze Runner... Why run? What good would it do? There was not much hope left for them. Running resulted in death. In lack of answers. So again, I like the story.

submitted by Ashlee G., age 15, The Future
(July 7, 2016 - 8:09 pm)

Thank you! Glad you like it!

submitted by Gared
(July 7, 2016 - 11:43 pm)

I was such a jerk on this thread. I am sorry.

submitted by @Scylla
(July 27, 2016 - 11:16 pm)