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Lena and Maggie are doing an Abstract poem.
Rules:
1. No fighting.
2. No taking over the story. Work it out with your partner so you can both do the story equally.
3. Keep the story PG.
4. GloWorm says to always keep to your genre, but I disagree: if you really want to, change genres.
Thank you very much! :)
submitted by BellaTrix♡♥♡
(March 30, 2009 - 10:19 pm)
(March 30, 2009 - 10:19 pm)
Ok, so Lena, what should we write about? :)
(March 31, 2009 - 10:28 am)
Lena??
(April 1, 2009 - 11:55 am)
Here I am; sorry. The thread was missing for a while, but it's at the top again. Okay, BellaTrix said we can change genres if we want but lets stick to abstract for now and if we want to later we can change. Except I'm not exactly sure what abstract means... *shrug* Anyway, I am open to ideas, but here are some of mine:
1) Poem about nature/the world
2) Poem about people/society
3) Poem about feelings/moods
4) Poem about objects/things
Which one do you want to do? You can also come up with your own!!! :)
(April 1, 2009 - 3:36 pm)
I like the nature idea! What do you want to write about nature? The rain, snow, trees, cloudy days, or animals?
I, too, don't really know what abstract means! I'm going to look it up... *runs off* *comes back looking confused* I'm confused!
(April 1, 2009 - 4:43 pm)
From what I gather, abstract things are things that do not concretely exist, such as love, hate, sadness--all feelings, I guess. Maybe things like beauty or loyalty, things that are surely there but are not entirely real. Things like a book are not abstract, but the feelings you have when you see or read it, are. Like you can do a poem about a leaf that is abstract if you contain things like awe or regality or--
(April 2, 2009 - 10:04 am)
Thanks for trying to help... I appreciate it... but sadly I'm still confused! *IDEA!* Old Cricket, how do you write an abstract poem?
Maggie, An abstract poem tends to express ideas and emotions more through the sounds and rhythms of its words rather than through the simple meaning of the words. But I think there are few real rules--almost anything goes!
Old Cricket
(April 2, 2009 - 3:08 pm)
I think the Admin and BellaTrix described it pretty well. Okay, nature is great! :) I think rain would be cool b/c it is actually very strange. Think about it: water falling out of the sky? It's like the sky is leaking or something. So, how do you want to do this? I think it should probably be free-verse, but if you want to do rhythmic that's great also. :) Maybe we should each write a line and see where that goes? If you want to do that, here is my opening line. If you don't like it that's OK; I'm flexible.
Rain
by Lena and Maggie
When the sky leaks
(you continue!)
(April 2, 2009 - 5:20 pm)
Ok, we can do free verse! I'm flexible too.
I like the way you start it!
I'll pick up from where you left off
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
Should we do this every line? Kind of like you write a line and I write a line? Or should it be two lines?
(April 3, 2009 - 7:46 am)
Maybe two lines would be best.
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
(April 3, 2009 - 12:10 pm)
Do you think it would be best to write down the whole poem before the new part that we write? I think that would be kind of nice to rewrite it so we know where we are in the poem! :):):)
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
The noisy splash of the cars driving thorough the streets
and all the people jumping in puddles
(P.S. I really like your part!)
(April 3, 2009 - 12:29 pm)
Yeah, that's a good idea. Thanks for the compliment!
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
The noisy splash of the cars driving thorough the streets
and all the people jumping in puddles
Ignoring the dark skies while the water sloshes out around them
In bursts of wetness
(April 3, 2009 - 5:53 pm)
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
the noisy splash of the cars driving through the streets
and all the people jumping in the puddles
ignoring the dark skies while the water sloshes out and around them
in bursts of wetness
Wet hair, wet legs, wet boots,
wet all over while the thunder roars and the lightening shocks all the people around
(April 5, 2009 - 12:10 pm)
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
the noisy splash of the cars driving through the streets
and all the people jumping in the puddles
ignoring the dark skies while the water sloshes out and around them
in bursts of wetness
Wet hair, wet legs, wet boots,
wet all over while the thunder roars and the lightening shocks all the people around
Off in the distance
The sun peeks through the clouds
(April 5, 2009 - 4:36 pm)
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
the noisy splash of the cars driving through the streets
and all the people jumping in the puddles
ignoring the dark skies while the water sloshes out and around them
in bursts of wetness
Wet hair, wet legs, wet boots,
wet all over while the thunder roars and the lightening shocks all the people around
off in the distance
the sun peeks through the clouds
and the tulips peek up
and slowly turn their heads towards the sun
Maggie and writing partner, this is a beautiful poem! I love it!
Old Cricket
(April 5, 2009 - 8:16 pm)
Thanks, Old Cricket! Can I finish it, Maggie? If you still have more that's okay, so correct me if you want to continue!
When the sky leaks
Rain falls down
And crowns the earth in a blanket of drops
that move like little tadpoles under pond water
the noisy splash of the cars driving through the streets
and all the people jumping in the puddles
ignoring the dark skies while the water sloshes out and around them
in bursts of wetness
Wet hair, wet legs, wet boots,
wet all over while the thunder roars and the lightening shocks all the people around
off in the distance
the sun peeks through the clouds
and the tulips peek up
and slowly turn their heads towards the sun
shining through the rain that tapers off -
rainbow.
(April 6, 2009 - 7:16 am)