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Kelly was walking around the block, on her way to the supermarket. She had purse ready to go to purchase her favorite foods. All of a sudden, a plane crashed just in front of her. She walked aroud it. Coming home, she was loaded down with food. Again, she walked around the plane. People screamed for help. When Kelly got home, she settled down for a nice snack.
Hint: The question is "What's wrong with this story?", not "What's wrong with what Kelly did?"
submitted by En-Hua C. Holtz, age 11, East Lyme, CT
(March 30, 2014 - 1:48 pm)
(March 30, 2014 - 1:48 pm)
You wrote "She had purse" when you should've put an "a" before purse. Another thing is that the people were still alive, when in plane crashes most people die right after the impact. Lastly, there was no emergency help, so I'm assuming it was a dream.
(March 30, 2014 - 2:52 pm)