I wrote this
Chatterbox: Inkwell
I wrote this
I wrote this poem...
And I'd like some feedback on it.
Please tell me anything I could change or add.
Here it is:
Locked
A spiral staircase winds down below me, but
There is no reaching the steps
There is only holding on
Onto life,
dreams,
hope,
magic
Off of life,
dreams,
hope,
magic
Two worlds pulling me
On
Off
On
Off
And I am the life
dream
hope
magic
That I have been seeking
submitted by Nora the Singer, age 13, New Jersey
(November 16, 2013 - 4:24 pm)
(November 16, 2013 - 4:24 pm)
Wow! Nice poem! There is nothing I could change or add to this. Maybe you could use adjectives to describe the dreams, hope and magic to make the poem a little more interesting. Other than that, the poem is great just the way it is. Good job!
(November 17, 2013 - 9:25 am)