An eleven year-old-boy

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An eleven year-old-boy...

An eleven year-old-boy sits in a train compartment, alone, reading a book.

He is short, and implausibly skinny. He is very pale. His hair is long, black, and unruly. He has an angular face and a large nose. He is very good - a bit too good - at hiding his feelings, but if there's one that comes across loudly and clearly, it is scorn. 

There is a knock on the door. He looks up in time to see another boy come in to the compartment.

The other boy is freckled and orange-haired, and he carries a brown paper bag. He points at a seat. "Anyone sitting there?" he asks, a bit apologetically. "Everywhere else is full."

The other boy shakes his head.

"Name's Ron. Ron Weasley."

Ron Weasley doesn't seem to notice or care that he was being ignored. He peers into his bag, then drops it, groaning. "She knows I hate corned beef!" He looks up at his companion. "What's your name?" 

As the other boy looks up exasperatedly from his book, his hair moves slightly, revealing a mark on his forehead.

It is a scar.

It is shaped like a lightning bolt.

Ron's mouth falls open. He stares. Then he swallows, hard. "It's you," he whispers. His voice is a mix of shock, horror, fear, and loathing.

He picks up his detested bag, and he leaves the compartment, without once looking back.

submitted by ZNZ, age Thulcandra, 14
(August 8, 2011 - 4:07 pm)

My bets are that James is Harry's dad.

submitted by Olive
(August 11, 2011 - 6:49 pm)

Mmhmm

submitted by Tiffany W., age 10, Nashville, TN
(August 11, 2011 - 8:29 pm)

I really like this. Are you writing this up as you go along or do you have it planned out? You are an amazing writer, ZNZ. Most poeple on this are.

submitted by Claire S.
(August 12, 2011 - 12:50 pm)

The way ZNZ said that "James has black hair canonically" makes me think it might be possible that Harry has the same father as he did in canon. But why would Harry's personality be any different, then, if he'd still been raised by the Dursleys? And where did Mr. Weasley come into this...? Well, it's definitely either Snape or James, but I've no idea which.

submitted by Ima
(August 13, 2011 - 1:25 pm)

It's Snape. Didn't you see the large nose part?

 

And this is awesome! ZNZ, keep writing more, kk?

 

Andy P. C. says ffuv.

~Wolfgirl67 signing off.

submitted by Wolfgirl67, age ~13~, Back where I belong.
(August 13, 2011 - 4:25 pm)

TOP!!! I REALLY WANT TO READ MORE OF THIS FF!!!

submitted by Tiffany W., age 11!!!, Venice, I wish
(August 20, 2011 - 9:34 pm)

This is amazing. post more soon. never stop wrighting.  Ur really good you should get somthing published someday.

 

sorry about spelling errors if there is any. I'm really bad at spelling.Cry 

 

 

submitted by Amazed, age ??????, ?
(August 22, 2011 - 1:21 pm)

Ooh! This is really interesting! Please post more. :):):)

submitted by Emily L., age 16, WA
(August 25, 2011 - 6:18 pm)