I warn; I can be a critic. No offense, but I give out...Constructive critisism. I'd just like to say that you should have a different prophecy, I'm bored with the prophecy of the star power because EH has(Or probably will have) two series of it.  Make their powers cool, and original, and I might rethink this.  It's also slightly unoriginal because you made clans and said "they are like this clan."...But with different names.  On that thought, I'm going to have to rethink the warrior story that I'm writing.  You also modified the apprentice ceremony, but I can handle that.  Is there anything that makes Dovepaw particularly popular?  I don't think that otherwise every warrior would want her as an apprentice...  By the way, there is a cat named Snowbird in the books, but I can let it slide because Snowbird never did anything in the books.(And it's an awesome name. =))  It's also slightly predictable, your story.  Dovepaw will have awesome powers, etc, etc.  Just don't make her a Mary Sue or personalityless. Then again, in Into the wild, I almost instantly knew what 'Fire will save the clan' meant.  No offense, but I just wanted to say that.  Maybe you should describe the characters as you introduce them.